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No Otaku with Harem System (English Version)

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A young man with a troubled life runs into more trouble after meeting an annoying fairy. "Hey Listen! It's time to start the adventure!" "A fucking giant fly! I have to kill him!" "Wait wait! I'm here to guide you!" Watch the adventures of Luis and the fly Navi on their way to becoming a King of the Harem. "King of the Harem sounds troublesome" "Hey Listen! You can get a lot of money and power!" "What are you waiting for ?! Let's go for that harem !!" ---------- ---------- I don't speak English and I am using Google Translate with Grammarly to translate my novel. I accept corrections in the comments paragraph Warning: The first 45 chapters are a lot of internal monologues since it was my beginnings writing a novel, I'm sorry if it's annoying for some readers but I hope you can give my work a chance after that point. I hope you enjoy my work ---------- ---------- www. patreon.com / Bukaro For advanced chapters. ----------------- https: // ko-fi.com / bukaro If you like my work, support me with a small donation

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Volumen 0 :Auxiliary Volume
Volumen 1
Volumen 2 :Gaia
Volumen 3 :Waifus Multiverse
Volumen 4 :Vacation (?)

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Yuri_is_Ntr
Yuri_is_NtrLv5

Now I remember why I dislike your first novel. You ask me what this novel about : Well... Something like this. 30 percent of mc thinking about how shit his personality is. 30 percent of mc thinking what girls personality is. 30 percent of thinking about his future plans. 10 percent of actual actions or dialogs between characters. You see a problem here? Maina characters thought is 90 % narrated what happens in retrospective or bitching about girls/his own problems /his future plans. That's not a novel. That's fucking diary. Of bipolar main character. Why I call him bipolar? He doesn't actually comes to conclusions. Develop over times. He switches opinion. If at first he was against long term relationships. He then just accept it. Without actually liking shigure in that moment. Harem? He likes only shigure but started to make plans. Why and how? I don't know. He doesn't actually receive any stimulus to think that way. System quest doesn't actually give him anything noteworthy. He doesn't come to like any others girls. He just wants to make harem now. Great. That's not a character development, mate. That's an illness. Changing you mindset without any reason - is literally bipolarity. Of course before you need to bitch about it. Half a chapter, minimum. Of course. His constant bitching is what get me mad. In first chapters we see someone who have obvious flaws but have a strong character - now he just a bitch who afraid of anything. And like to bash himself and talk how evil he is and how evil he's plans. Without actually showing it. Perfecto, comrade. I don't if his promised character development would actually make it more tolerated. But 10 chapters in, and all I see is nagging . It's like swimming in hot pot that every time keeps rising temperature. It's painful.

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TheLonelyGod
TheLonelyGodLv14

I honestly think this is interesting, but there are some flaws that bugs me. One, Mc whines about his evil plans and how he is going to get a harem but not like all the girls, like he takes favoritism and I think it was mentioned in the sypnosis or thr Auxiliar chapter but I can't remember. Second, the chapters are long, that's a plus but not when 95% of the chapters are pure monologue. I understand he is an angst guy to talk to other people but the fic progresses but there are barely any conversation between charactes only hinself talking about the progress he's made with the characters, we don't actually see the progress so that is fustrating and since the chapters are long like this, it becomes, sorry to say this but it becomes boring, I rather have a 700 words chapter with 70% conversations and 30% monologues than a long chapter with 95% monologue and 5% conversations. I am not saying the fanfic is bad, I'm just stating what I think are the flaws of this fanfic. Sorry, Author. As an author myself, I felt intertained to such an extent the first two chapter were awsome than his whining began and well, we don't like to hear about whining MCs now do we, so as a reader I have to tell you what I think about this book. I like the idea but not how it was presented, I'm not even angry about the gender mixups, that doesn't bother me because I understand as a nonenglish speaker you won't know the rules of Grammar but what I did not like most was the no conversations, I am in Chapter 11 and I think it has become a bit boring with just inner talks, tell me author, does this continues? and for how long? until what chapter does conversations start getting better? I want to start reading from there. Anyways, I hope you don't take this the wrong way like I said, I like the fanfic it's just the MC isn't what I call an MC😅

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