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THORN
THORNLv13yr
2021-04-21 08:51

From what I read, It's not really that bad as a fanfiction novel. Pretty funny at first but I dropped cause my patience ran out seeing MC acting like women are toys. I'm not some simp who's worshipping women but I just didn't like the way he's acting. Also, the guy keeps ignoring a girl who has a crush on him because it's INTERESTING. The author said MC is not evil but I don't see it. He could have just rejected her straight and done with it or take her in the harem but no. He's just acting like a stupid mother*cker who's annoyed of beautiful girls liking him. In conclusion, If any of you like a protagonist who acts like issei but in reality just a crazy jerk. This is your novel. Also warning, MC likes to get beaten by his women. He got that fetish from his parents who beat him up when he was young. Well, he's not that bad. The guy's supporting a sister who doesn't like him because he killed people who were trying to r*pe her.

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Time_Control
Time_ControlLv1

Bukaro
BukaroAuthor

When did I say that MC liked being hit? :c In another Fic, I did write about an MC masochistic but not here, at least not that I remember. As for the rest, if I admit that I have my flaws as a writer, I'm sorry.

Banana_Split_69
Banana_Split_69Lv4

I dont't even know if we are reading the same novel anymore, its like you are skimming trough the chapters. Pathetic

Vallandres
VallandresLv4

Author, I have questions. Will his personality get better? will he care about his harem in the future? please answer me, this novel sounds interesting but when I read the way he thinks, it makes me reluctant to continue. Please 🙏🙏🙏

Bukaro:When did I say that MC liked being hit? :c In another Fic, I did write about an MC masochistic but not here, at least not that I remember. As for the rest, if I admit that I have my flaws as a writer, I'm sorry.
Bukaro
BukaroAuthor

Ehhh, well, in summary: yes, the mc became completely mentally ill, but not in a Petelgeuse way, but in a Doomslayer yandere workaholic way with a wife-stealing fetish....... I can't say if it improves his personality since that depends on your perspective, but at least he learns to value and love his wives.

Vallandres:Author, I have questions. Will his personality get better? will he care about his harem in the future? please answer me, this novel sounds interesting but when I read the way he thinks, it makes me reluctant to continue. Please 🙏🙏🙏
Vallandres
VallandresLv4

Well, at least I'm glad he learned how to value all of his woman. Cuz I'm so afraid that he always thinks of women as a tool of pleasure. I always drop any story with that kind of MC cuz I can't stand it. By the way, thanks for answering me, I'll continue to read your story. Good luck author and have a nice day!!!!

Chummy
ChummyLv13

You good bro? you said you got drug last chapter and now you didn't upload, you ok?

Bukaro:Ehhh, well, in summary: yes, the mc became completely mentally ill, but not in a Petelgeuse way, but in a Doomslayer yandere workaholic way with a wife-stealing fetish....... I can't say if it improves his personality since that depends on your perspective, but at least he learns to value and love his wives.
Chaos_Order8
Chaos_Order8Lv5

When are you going to update author kun?

Bukaro:Ehhh, well, in summary: yes, the mc became completely mentally ill, but not in a Petelgeuse way, but in a Doomslayer yandere workaholic way with a wife-stealing fetish....... I can't say if it improves his personality since that depends on your perspective, but at least he learns to value and love his wives.
EdwardDragneel
EdwardDragneelLv1

What story have you read, it seems like you have only read a few words from different chapters Random and the protagonist never liked being hit your "review" that no one asked for is all pathetic

NULL_MONARCH
NULL_MONARCHLv4

are you alive author ?

Bukaro:When did I say that MC liked being hit? :c In another Fic, I did write about an MC masochistic but not here, at least not that I remember. As for the rest, if I admit that I have my flaws as a writer, I'm sorry.
Chaos_Order8
Chaos_Order8Lv5

Author where did u disappear, I hope u are well and kicking, I really miss thid FFif yours It's funnest FF I ever known so I really hope it's just temporarily stop and u will resume one day, even if it took another year just know there is huge fan here that will wait for your return

Bukaro:Ehhh, well, in summary: yes, the mc became completely mentally ill, but not in a Petelgeuse way, but in a Doomslayer yandere workaholic way with a wife-stealing fetish....... I can't say if it improves his personality since that depends on your perspective, but at least he learns to value and love his wives.
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Yuri_is_Ntr
Yuri_is_NtrLv5

Now I remember why I dislike your first novel. You ask me what this novel about : Well... Something like this. 30 percent of mc thinking about how shit his personality is. 30 percent of mc thinking what girls personality is. 30 percent of thinking about his future plans. 10 percent of actual actions or dialogs between characters. You see a problem here? Maina characters thought is 90 % narrated what happens in retrospective or bitching about girls/his own problems /his future plans. That's not a novel. That's fucking diary. Of bipolar main character. Why I call him bipolar? He doesn't actually comes to conclusions. Develop over times. He switches opinion. If at first he was against long term relationships. He then just accept it. Without actually liking shigure in that moment. Harem? He likes only shigure but started to make plans. Why and how? I don't know. He doesn't actually receive any stimulus to think that way. System quest doesn't actually give him anything noteworthy. He doesn't come to like any others girls. He just wants to make harem now. Great. That's not a character development, mate. That's an illness. Changing you mindset without any reason - is literally bipolarity. Of course before you need to bitch about it. Half a chapter, minimum. Of course. His constant bitching is what get me mad. In first chapters we see someone who have obvious flaws but have a strong character - now he just a bitch who afraid of anything. And like to bash himself and talk how evil he is and how evil he's plans. Without actually showing it. Perfecto, comrade. I don't if his promised character development would actually make it more tolerated. But 10 chapters in, and all I see is nagging . It's like swimming in hot pot that every time keeps rising temperature. It's painful.

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