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TruckkunJr
TruckkunJrLv134yr
2021-03-30 16:35

Currently a very good Fanfic that I would recommend to any person that believes themselves to be a man/woman of Culture. There is a very good develop going on with the relationships of the MC's. They don't immediately become head over heels for him because he's handsome. All that I hope for is possible Lemons in the Future even if it just describes what they are doing. My degenerate side is showing and who do I card! Please don't drop the Fanfic, it has soo much talent to be great!

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Bukaro
BukaroAuthor

The R18 and the action scenes are difficult for me, I enjoy doing character development but the above is difficult for me and I don't know if it will be of the right quality

TruckkunJr
TruckkunJrLv13

Their actually fairly simple. When I made my first one I believed it to be bad but to only get good reviews. You will get better the more you try. Plus Idm if the scenes isn't that good, because you can improve on them.

Bukaro:The R18 and the action scenes are difficult for me, I enjoy doing character development but the above is difficult for me and I don't know if it will be of the right quality
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Bukaro
BukaroAuthor

I don't know, personally, I don't feel very comfortable writing H scenes unless it's a parody ... I'll see if at some point I do it but I don't promise anything

TruckkunJr:Their actually fairly simple. When I made my first one I believed it to be bad but to only get good reviews. You will get better the more you try. Plus Idm if the scenes isn't that good, because you can improve on them.
TruckkunJr
TruckkunJrLv13

Yh it gets kind of weird while making them but makes it more 'enjoyable' for the readers. You decide if you want to write them.

Bukaro:I don't know, personally, I don't feel very comfortable writing H scenes unless it's a parody ... I'll see if at some point I do it but I don't promise anything
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Bukaro
BukaroAuthor

Thanks for the tip <3

TruckkunJr:Yh it gets kind of weird while making them but makes it more 'enjoyable' for the readers. You decide if you want to write them.
TruckkunJr
TruckkunJrLv13

I love giving advices to fellow writers. Hope you keep the fanfic going, I don't wanna see another good FF drop.

Bukaro:Thanks for the tip <3
Pervert_In_Net
Pervert_In_NetLv6

I would also like to see some limons in the story, it's the icing on the cake after all! if you're not really going to write, then a tip, don't mention anything to understand that they did it or create a perverted character that keeps teasing and touching the girls it will only leave readers frustrated.

Bukaro:The R18 and the action scenes are difficult for me, I enjoy doing character development but the above is difficult for me and I don't know if it will be of the right quality
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Bukaro
BukaroAuthor

Emmmm, I sorry

Pervert_In_Net:I would also like to see some limons in the story, it's the icing on the cake after all! if you're not really going to write, then a tip, don't mention anything to understand that they did it or create a perverted character that keeps teasing and touching the girls it will only leave readers frustrated.
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Yuri_is_Ntr
Yuri_is_NtrLv5

Now I remember why I dislike your first novel. You ask me what this novel about : Well... Something like this. 30 percent of mc thinking about how shit his personality is. 30 percent of mc thinking what girls personality is. 30 percent of thinking about his future plans. 10 percent of actual actions or dialogs between characters. You see a problem here? Maina characters thought is 90 % narrated what happens in retrospective or bitching about girls/his own problems /his future plans. That's not a novel. That's fucking diary. Of bipolar main character. Why I call him bipolar? He doesn't actually comes to conclusions. Develop over times. He switches opinion. If at first he was against long term relationships. He then just accept it. Without actually liking shigure in that moment. Harem? He likes only shigure but started to make plans. Why and how? I don't know. He doesn't actually receive any stimulus to think that way. System quest doesn't actually give him anything noteworthy. He doesn't come to like any others girls. He just wants to make harem now. Great. That's not a character development, mate. That's an illness. Changing you mindset without any reason - is literally bipolarity. Of course before you need to bitch about it. Half a chapter, minimum. Of course. His constant bitching is what get me mad. In first chapters we see someone who have obvious flaws but have a strong character - now he just a bitch who afraid of anything. And like to bash himself and talk how evil he is and how evil he's plans. Without actually showing it. Perfecto, comrade. I don't if his promised character development would actually make it more tolerated. But 10 chapters in, and all I see is nagging . It's like swimming in hot pot that every time keeps rising temperature. It's painful.

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