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2022-08-08 23:03

the story is good only that the author exaggerates with the worlds by adding hundreds of characters and mixing completely different plots, the problem is that the author adds so many characters that even if we know them they only have secondary roles and are only there for few chapters and their addition to the story is useless, at the beginning the story is good but too much inner thoughts and then it has improved but now it is worsening especially the worlds that have now become completely animations instead of at the beginning they were real worlds, there are many skills with little sense, the power of the mc fluctuates at the beginning is weak it suddenly increases and then even more, mc created a universe but it barely destroys a continent (a few chapters before not even an island and it destroyed to the maximum a boat with spiraling energy when charging energy), the author mixes up too much random textures and abilities are created or enhanced suddenly when they are standing still for a long time, so if you want a story that has a minimum of logic this is not for you, there are also stupid moments like the world that resets itself because the plot ends but others not because they are of the mc, the characters have a deadline because they are destined for a certain kind of fate if they are not superior beings, it also seems that only mc and his companions are able to improve themselves, then some characters are stronger or weaker than the original plot without respecting the canon, mc continues to earn plot armor randomly and only him he can do it, it also seems that his abilities surpass all logic and definition and random things, it's okay that he is op but if you look for a balanced thing you don't find it, he is also stupid mc that he cannot develop other types of energy because he is limited and becomes garbage, in short, you find debuffs without logic only for the plot or for momentary fun, good story at the beginning but over time it got worse

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Now I remember why I dislike your first novel. You ask me what this novel about : Well... Something like this. 30 percent of mc thinking about how shit his personality is. 30 percent of mc thinking what girls personality is. 30 percent of thinking about his future plans. 10 percent of actual actions or dialogs between characters. You see a problem here? Maina characters thought is 90 % narrated what happens in retrospective or bitching about girls/his own problems /his future plans. That's not a novel. That's fucking diary. Of bipolar main character. Why I call him bipolar? He doesn't actually comes to conclusions. Develop over times. He switches opinion. If at first he was against long term relationships. He then just accept it. Without actually liking shigure in that moment. Harem? He likes only shigure but started to make plans. Why and how? I don't know. He doesn't actually receive any stimulus to think that way. System quest doesn't actually give him anything noteworthy. He doesn't come to like any others girls. He just wants to make harem now. Great. That's not a character development, mate. That's an illness. Changing you mindset without any reason - is literally bipolarity. Of course before you need to bitch about it. Half a chapter, minimum. Of course. His constant bitching is what get me mad. In first chapters we see someone who have obvious flaws but have a strong character - now he just a bitch who afraid of anything. And like to bash himself and talk how evil he is and how evil he's plans. Without actually showing it. Perfecto, comrade. I don't if his promised character development would actually make it more tolerated. But 10 chapters in, and all I see is nagging . It's like swimming in hot pot that every time keeps rising temperature. It's painful.

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