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IncrediblyDumb
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2023-09-22 10:57

Are you an under age boy that idolizes people like that bald cockroach-looking dude that got arrested for human trafficking? Are you someone that thinks that a man showing any emotions that may be considered “soft” automatically makes that man a f*g? (Author’s words). Do you like reading about an MC that is completely psychotic with absolutely no redeeming qualities? Do you want to read chapters that are 95 percent monologue? Even later, after the author says he “learned and changed the format so you just have to get through the first 45 chapters” probably around 70 to 80 percent of the chapters are still the MC’s vomit inducing thoughts. Wanna read a harem where the only purpose of it is to have as many members as possible so a lot of the girls only get a summary from the MC “I like her body so I made her go through some horrendous events so that she gets traumatized and ends up depending on me ;) now she loves me, yipee”! Then this story is your braindead mind’s ultimate dream. Some words to the author. Hermanó perdón por ser tan brusco, yo asumo que creciste alrededor de una cultura similar como en la que yo crecí. En donde los hombres tienen metido en la cabeza ciertas ideas de machismo, y lo que significa ser un hombre. Si tu creaste el protagonista usando tu propia mentalidad, busca ayuda o trata de cultivar una mente mas aceptante porque este protagonista es absolutamente horroroso.

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Translation for the last part?

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Yuri_is_Ntr
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Now I remember why I dislike your first novel. You ask me what this novel about : Well... Something like this. 30 percent of mc thinking about how shit his personality is. 30 percent of mc thinking what girls personality is. 30 percent of thinking about his future plans. 10 percent of actual actions or dialogs between characters. You see a problem here? Maina characters thought is 90 % narrated what happens in retrospective or bitching about girls/his own problems /his future plans. That's not a novel. That's fucking diary. Of bipolar main character. Why I call him bipolar? He doesn't actually comes to conclusions. Develop over times. He switches opinion. If at first he was against long term relationships. He then just accept it. Without actually liking shigure in that moment. Harem? He likes only shigure but started to make plans. Why and how? I don't know. He doesn't actually receive any stimulus to think that way. System quest doesn't actually give him anything noteworthy. He doesn't come to like any others girls. He just wants to make harem now. Great. That's not a character development, mate. That's an illness. Changing you mindset without any reason - is literally bipolarity. Of course before you need to bitch about it. Half a chapter, minimum. Of course. His constant bitching is what get me mad. In first chapters we see someone who have obvious flaws but have a strong character - now he just a bitch who afraid of anything. And like to bash himself and talk how evil he is and how evil he's plans. Without actually showing it. Perfecto, comrade. I don't if his promised character development would actually make it more tolerated. But 10 chapters in, and all I see is nagging . It's like swimming in hot pot that every time keeps rising temperature. It's painful.

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