Marvel: The Death Surgeon

Honestly disappointed. Law is one of my favorite characters, but some parts seem straight out of chatgpt. I’m guessing the author is close to 12 years old since he has a Pokémon as his username. That would explain the writing quality. Might be a personal preference, but I hate it when authors speedrun the reincarnation. I’d rather you take it slow and explain everything or don’t do the whole reincarnation with wishes at all. I hate it when it’s somewhere in the middle when they rush through the wishes. As long as you say what wishes the mc got, we can just search it up. The whole talking to god thing is just a waste of time. Also the mc isn’t really developed well. It’s not that I want him to be a lone wolf or smth but you should develope the mc first before introducing new characters. I’ve read all the current chapters so far and the mc’s personality still screams generic. That’s one of the problems with the talking to god trope I think, cause usually you develop your mc in the first few chapters but you can’t do that here cause he’s talking to god.

If you want to die from cringe, this is your poison. Remember kids, bullying is bad and you should go out of your way to possibly create issues for yourself in order to help strangers you'll only see occasionally.

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Devil fruit's are associated with the soul, its canon, you got rid of the spiritual pressure without research. Additionaly a lot of paragraphs you write start with "I (something)". You need to stop before making it public and to read your own chapters in one go to see the flow, and to start writing with realism and inmersion in mind, for the characters, that is real life for them. If a bully comes to hit me, and suddenly a guy full of tattoos comes and hits him, that does not make it a good guy, it just makes two bad guys in that moment, nobody will become "inspired" or "change a little" because of "something" that persons says, and more ridiculous, you think that in a fight in a highschool, the students in the hallway will not be screaming allowing the MC to "monologue" and listen, teachers will not meddle, parents will not get involved and things like that. Absurd.

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Fun read then came the Virus of a d driven mc to create a harem so I’m out.

This story just keeps getting worse and worse as time passes.

It was fine until he made the MC stupid and not funny rip off of the bad Deadpool comics it’s honestly disappointing because the story was doing fine but the MC’s personality ruins it like if he was actually funny it’d be fine but it’s like he’s trying too hard

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when i started reading it it's first chapter was good and 2nd was a little bad but it was of but after it it becomes a mess and after the time skip yeah it becomes total trash saying I Fear shield and not killing anyone in the entire time skip and saying i became happy after saying a person and using his power for such trifle things u know even Avengers did not interfere in those trifle things in movies who not even had about half of power of law or urahara and here our mc doing such meaningless things it's like author just wants to write something even if it's just trash and yeah power levels is a mess so don't read it it's total trash here is an illogical character living in an illusion of goody goody thing with op power so it's trash

So I just want to say I like the story. It’s still really early so some “smoothing out” is needed in my opinion. I have already commented on some things in the story itself. I’m doing this not to bash the story/author I really do like the premise and think the idea is super cool. I just don’t want the author to get bashed for dumb and relatively minor things because the story is so new and only has a few chapters. I really hope the author takes any criticism I have as constructive because I think this could be successful and I don’t want it to be one of the 100s of dropped stories that could’ve been awesome.

As of chapter 5, this looks like a promising story. Mc has, what I would consider, a realistic personality, not a knight in shining armor nor does he have the pride of manhua mc. Can’t wait to see how this story progresses.

It doesn't feel like a novel. It's like you're talking to your chaotic friend who recounts his day."I eat this for breakfastafter that, I brush my teethI go to schoolI stop a bully and make left a cringe worthy remark only an absolute weeb can sayI go to classI think about the worldI listen to lectures. "The novel literally goes like that, with no description of the surroundings, feelings, random timeskip, etc. Great idea, terrible, terrible execution.

Good Job Brother Keep Up The Good Work. . . .

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Too much potential ruined by stupidity. The mc actually believed that there was no mutant after one google session. Also He is a complete noob at combat. He got the ability but had no equivalent mindset . He thinks that Fighting while holding back would train you to fight stronhger opponent. Its like fighting a mid boss with max lvl + Full build gear and thinking it will him fight ths last boss.

It's a great Marvel fanfiction!! I like it!!! 😁👍👍 It have a great plot/story and great translate/english.. I like MC/Law have Urahara and Law templete, that two is one of the smartest people in their own world (Bleach and One Piece).. So, don't that make MC soooo smart with their combined brains?? I think it was overkill.. Just one of templete is already so good (either Urahara or Law is have so great power).. I like how he recruit Emma Frost and Gambit, they're one of my favorites Mutant.. Can't wait to see next chapter.. Love your story.. Keep up the great work author sama 😁👍😍😍😍

Really like where you are going but chapters are to short it's like just scroll once and the chapter is finished. Appreciate the work Author

Really liked the idea of the story. Also I don't think it's cringe to stand up to your bullies. MC did the right thing and said the right thing. It might sound cringe but it's the truth that he said. Don't listen to others speaking ill about it.

Pretty good start. Keep it up author!