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tt_gLv41yr
2023-06-10 10:57

Honestly disappointed. Law is one of my favorite characters, but some parts seem straight out of chatgpt. I’m guessing the author is close to 12 years old since he has a Pokémon as his username. That would explain the writing quality. Might be a personal preference, but I hate it when authors speedrun the reincarnation. I’d rather you take it slow and explain everything or don’t do the whole reincarnation with wishes at all. I hate it when it’s somewhere in the middle when they rush through the wishes. As long as you say what wishes the mc got, we can just search it up. The whole talking to god thing is just a waste of time. Also the mc isn’t really developed well. It’s not that I want him to be a lone wolf or smth but you should develope the mc first before introducing new characters. I’ve read all the current chapters so far and the mc’s personality still screams generic. That’s one of the problems with the talking to god trope I think, cause usually you develop your mc in the first few chapters but you can’t do that here cause he’s talking to god.

Marvel: The Death Surgeon

Charizard6
3.9
106 Chs

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ThongLover
ThongLoverLv4

thanks for warning mate, gonna try it

1yr
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mow
mowLv4

Let me know how it goes

ThongLover:thanks for warning mate, gonna try it
1yr
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tt_g
tt_gLv4

How was it?

ThongLover:thanks for warning mate, gonna try it
1yr
3
ThongLover
ThongLoverLv4

bland, generic, like most fic in here and quite cringe dialog too

1yr
40
mow
mowLv4

Thanks for the sacrifice

ThongLover:bland, generic, like most fic in here and quite cringe dialog too
1yr
33
DragonslayerKnight
DragonslayerKnightLv5

crash and burn

mow:Let me know how it goes
1yr
4
mow
mowLv4

What?

DragonslayerKnight:crash and burn
1yr
1
BoredCrow
BoredCrowLv4

Is it on the level of the esteemed mtl?

ThongLover:bland, generic, like most fic in here and quite cringe dialog too
1yr
_VOIDLESS_
_VOIDLESS_Lv12

Ahh that makes sense

BoredCrow:Is it on the level of the esteemed mtl?
1yr
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Morning_Fragrance
Morning_FragranceLv14

If you want to die from cringe, this is your poison. Remember kids, bullying is bad and you should go out of your way to possibly create issues for yourself in order to help strangers you'll only see occasionally.

1yr

Apex_Predator_420
Apex_Predator_420Lv1

Reveal spoiler

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Angelixion
AngelixionLv15

Devil fruit's are associated with the soul, its canon, you got rid of the spiritual pressure without research. Additionaly a lot of paragraphs you write start with "I (something)". You need to stop before making it public and to read your own chapters in one go to see the flow, and to start writing with realism and inmersion in mind, for the characters, that is real life for them. If a bully comes to hit me, and suddenly a guy full of tattoos comes and hits him, that does not make it a good guy, it just makes two bad guys in that moment, nobody will become "inspired" or "change a little" because of "something" that persons says, and more ridiculous, you think that in a fight in a highschool, the students in the hallway will not be screaming allowing the MC to "monologue" and listen, teachers will not meddle, parents will not get involved and things like that. Absurd.

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Sesbian_Lex
Sesbian_LexLv3

Horrible and boring character even for a fanfic[img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

1yr
The_Best_3329
The_Best_3329Lv4

Fun read then came the Virus of a d driven mc to create a harem so I’m out.

1yr
Crackers_Syndrome
Crackers_SyndromeLv4

This story just keeps getting worse and worse as time passes.

1yr
Sebastiean
SebastieanLv5

It was fine until he made the MC stupid and not funny rip off of the bad Deadpool comics it’s honestly disappointing because the story was doing fine but the MC’s personality ruins it like if he was actually funny it’d be fine but it’s like he’s trying too hard

1yr
PhoenixNT
PhoenixNTLv12

Um bom livro ATE AGORA. MAS EU ESPERO QUE NAO TENHA HAREM NESSA HISTORIA...Mas até agora esta top [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

1yr
Zed1_Eren_
Zed1_Eren_Lv4

when i started reading it it's first chapter was good and 2nd was a little bad but it was of but after it it becomes a mess and after the time skip yeah it becomes total trash saying I Fear shield and not killing anyone in the entire time skip and saying i became happy after saying a person and using his power for such trifle things u know even Avengers did not interfere in those trifle things in movies who not even had about half of power of law or urahara and here our mc doing such meaningless things it's like author just wants to write something even if it's just trash and yeah power levels is a mess so don't read it it's total trash here is an illogical character living in an illusion of goody goody thing with op power so it's trash

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