Faysal_Ahmed_5058
Hello, author here. First, I want to thank all of you for the support and the good feedbacks that you are giving me. I plan to write a long story and to review it bit by bit to correct any grammatical mistakes that I find. For now, you have my gratitude for sticking to my novel and I hope to keep seeing you all in the future. Have a nice day.
interesting idea for a system. I first was interested by reading the synopsis (I eman, what's a lust king system XD) but I have to say, I quite like the novel. The Mc makes me feel bad for him, and the system is quite well made. What I might suggest is adding some originality in the worldbuiling, like a new kind of race or smth
Interesting Book. Well done Author The novel has a good plot and is promising. I love the pacing of the novel and the way writer writes the story. The writer is successful in appealing to the readers . At last the novel is overall nice and will desperately wait for the next chapters to release And hope that the writer will continue this awesome work and will evolve even more with time . Mine best wishes are always with you .
By King Arthur, I was expecting some Arthurian setting but is another guy that happens to be called Arthur. At first, I thought would be unlikable, but didn't do anything that would botter me. The game system and the worldbuilding it's just great I need to say that I liked it very much, until what I read I enjoyed. A funny fantasy world with magic and enjoyable characters. Warning: A little smut in some chapters, If you don´t like it's warned.
An interesting view in a retelling of King Arthur. Though a little sarcasm and black comedy here and there, the initian is superb. A gratitude from me to you, this is actually quite comedic. Writing quality is as follows a good one. Volume, detail and also tenses are better and more responsive here. Stability of updates is decent as well, better than the other stories. Character design wise a little here and there of flaws but pretty good in my opinion. The MC is literally King Arthur but with a twist. A more child-like and rather silly personality than its original archetype. World background has a little bit of a problem but slowly gets to the point, though a little lagging behind. Pretty good effort and also a slow increase in detailling is nice. An honest opinion, keep up the good work Author!
The story flowed nicely. I know the author was not a native english speaker but he was doing extremely well despite his obstacles. I have seen few typos but the author can edit it! So far the story has a good detailed narration, story to tell, and a creative story. It was what was important so good luck author! You will improve later on as the time goes by and I know it! Have a good day and write more!
Honestly, the plot seems interesting and the humor is pretty decent so far. Synopsis is quite interesting as well but I had a few issues. I'm not sure if you're a native English speaker so I don't want to mark you too hard for it but the grammar needs some improvement. Just the capitalizations, spacings and punctuations. Otherwise great start to the story and I'd say keep at it. I'll keep my eye out for this book in hopes you fix the minor problems. Adding to collections too. Keep at it author.
You have an interesting idea for your story! I would like to know what will happen to your main character in the future... ;) You're doing a good job in creating the world. I'll keep an eye on your story. Pay more attention to quaity of writing, to punctuation. The text is missing periods, commas, etc. All the best!
It is a curious and quite original story about a young man who wants to be coveted by all women. It is supported by a system that sticks to him after his death and gives him ways to achieve his goal. For those who like the harem and the R-18 it becomes entertaining and intriguing, wanting to know what will happen to the protagonist and how he will reach his goal.