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"Life without passion is tasteless..."... “There is no greater agony than bearing an untold story inside you.” /Maya Angelou/ <3

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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J6d
    Commented

    Dear Author, We are waiting for more... ;)

    Ch 618 Someone...
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    Wild Young Miss: Mister, Let's Kiss!
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J6d
    Replied to edsj

    but his is ;)

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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J28d
    Commented

    she had feelings for him.

    Seeing how she sported a strong and light smile, his guilt slowly kicked in. Even though Sarah never professed her feelings, Zachery knew that she had feelings for her. The reason Zachery tried to reciprocate it.
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Posted

    I love the idea of the cover page! It's so catchy and original! The concept for the story is really great and the plot is very interesting. You're doing well! The language needs some polishing. Think that your story is read also by non-English speakers... please have that in your mind, especially when you use multiple sentences.

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    Team Alpha
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Replied to SeverusMagicus

    one day I will translate something written in Polish ;)

    Ch 16 Paris
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    Bet is Bet
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Commented

    as he loved her (not him)

    Beth loved this man as much as he loved him. She was sorry for hurting his wife, but she just couldn't stop. A terrible couple; people would see them as such, but that didn't matter to her.
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Commented

    Great twist of the action! Well done!!!

    Ch 588 Sixth Commandment
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Posted

    An interesting beginning! I like Arida, her determination to change the past, I mean the future ;) I miss descriptions of the background, I need more details, etc... but you are doing great! Well done! You don't with the language so it's your advantage over the rest (non-English speakers), use it well!

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    I Will Be Queen
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Replied to Mel_Aniv

    Hi, I will vote ;)

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    Bet is Bet
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Posted

    I am not really in vampire stories, but I have to admit that reading this story is a pleasure. The writing quality is excellent, the text is nicely polished. The storyline is interesting and the characters are expressive. Well done!

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    When Blood Runs Cold
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Posted

    The picture for the cover page is great! A very good material for an original and catchy cover page ;) The plot of your story is captivating and the characters expressive. Nicely written descriptions. You don't really struggle with tenses, style, or grammar. It's your advantage over the rest (non-English speakers), use it well!

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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Commented

    nicely written

    Ch 9 Night Of Horrors
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Commented

    hmm... sounds gooood

    Nevertheless, the first time it happened to Cyrus it was not all sunshine and rainbows. No, it was especially awful because his vision went dark and his thoughts, against his will, slowed down. His consciousness felt like it was gradually seeping into a deep quagmire with no path of return. But as he sank further in, that 'vision' returned in a x-ray like projection of his body.
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Replied to Paulina_B

    after all, he is the prototype of the character :D

    "Damn! Matthew, you have the perfect trap muscles! The ideal abs and beautifully built quadriceps and calves." Shamelessly she looked up and down his body very slowly. She was about to watch him from behind, but she stopped herself in time and summed up her observations. "Actually your whole body is perfect!"
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    Bet is Bet
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Replied to Jo_J

    or you can use real city names, even if the story is fiction

    Gea's office and apartment are in S city because most of her patient lives there, but she usually likes to spend most of her spare time in B city that usually takes a 2-hour drive by car and 45 minutes if you use the train from S city.
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    His mom fall in love with me at first sight
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Replied to Izmi_Gea

    that's what a real friendship is :D

    Hearing her, Matthew knew that he had a very long day ahead of him. He wished he had slept last night. Now he had no choice, he had to pretend.
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Posted

    The story is different from most of the stories on WN, There is no CEO's, system, vampires and another monster so that's something the readers should treasure. The Gea's character is nicely-created. The storyline is interesting. Well done!

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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Commented

    the dot at the end not necessary

    "I do not know, maybe watch some old movies again, why you asked?".
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Commented

    a capital letter at the beginning of the sentence

    " hey, whats movie you plan to watch?" her assistant called, knowing that she'll spend her day off watching movies all alone tonight.
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  • Jo_J
    Jo_J1mth
    Commented

    said

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