Reviews of One Step At A Time (DanMachi)
One Step At A Time (DanMachi)
An_Imperfectionist
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It has good elements to it....just cant seem to enjoy it cause its edgelord,cringy mc....i mean get it has trauma dies...but its exatly the fun part in reincarnation novels that they can begin with clean state of life and do grand or not so grand things...an mc that doubts every move he/she makes is unappiling , deterring get it that someone doesnt just forget everything bad ...but in this premise mc should have improved because less expectation in other world 1st wish compensated parents so even if he doesnt forget them doesnt have to feel guilty for something that was not his fault....and with nk one to answer to in the otherworld it would be more of a freed bird personality in my opinion ,not this emo wannabee...sry for blabering :P
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Damn! It's becoming typical nowadays of making MC broken in danmachi fanfic. Every fanfic I read of danmachi it has same background more or less. Why does everyone makes MC the most broken person there is in world?? I don't understand what would you achieve with having sympathy because MC would gain power over the time( this make him most lucky person out there)not everyone can travel to anime verse and get strong 🤥
Alright, it is time for another one of my detailed reviews, you guys know the drills, first I will explain what is going on in the novel, and then I will rate it. Okay, this is your typical transmigration novel, Mc was a rich kid who couldn't complete his diploma and committed suicide because of all the disdain and disappointment he was feeling. The prologue is well written and makes sense, the Mc gets powers which are apparently from some game, he gets about 6 to 7 abilities but can only use two currently. The game element is very, and I mean VERY well explained and portrayed, consider me impressed. He also suffers from a kind of mental disorder, he has an imaginary friend in his mind who he blames for committing suicide, don't misunderstand though, the author has written the imaginary friend portion quite nicely, it doesn't feel bland or boring but rather interesting and logical. The story progression is good, not a wish-fulfillment novel but a logical and realistic novel, props to the author for that even though not many people here like it. He is currently teamed up with Lilli or whatever her name is, the interaction between them is quite realistic and nicely done, not on a high level but appreciable considering the author is a newbie. He is a non-adventurer yet, he hasn't joined any faction until now but is interested in joining the Loki faction. The interaction between the other people and Mc is nicely written, there are few grammatical errors within the chapters but nothing major. The story is still new so nothing much going on right now. Alright, so with this out of the way, we can move to the stats for the novel. Update Stability:-5/5 Nice, though the pace of the story seems a bit inconsistent, nothing bad though consider the author is new to this. People think the progression of the story is slow, for me it is good, making a good novel takes time, the plot shouldn't be rushed. Character design:-4.2/5 Alright, the character development of Mc needs work, like a lot of work. He needs to grow up and learn to examine the situation. He seems to be a bit too carefree at the moment even after knowing the potential dangers of the world. He also needs to be consistent when talking with his imaginary friend. People who think that he is too trusting are wrong, he was a loner in the previous life who craved acknowledgment, thus he comes off a bit desperate to have a friend. It is annoying indeed but that is also a part of character development, this is how he will grow. Overall, the author needs to focus more on building his character and write more detailed paragraphs on his thoughts so that the base for improvement can be formed. Lilli also needs to be a bit more real, we all know that she had betrayed people before so making friends with someone because of a similar past is expected but you need to highlight the points due to which she trusts the Mc, he hasn't really done much for her rather she is the one taking care of him. World-building:-3.7/5 The author is new to writing, I want him to keep in mind that some people may not know of Damachi or the stuff in the world, you should explain what is falna and what is the system placed within the city. World building is very important for a good novel, basically add more details to these things and you are good to go. Story development:-4.1/5 Not bad at all, the plot is quite nice and refreshing, though there are things that I don't like, I am not a fan of romance in Damachi and there is no romance up until now which is good but Mc should get to know more people, basically interact more. I don't have a problem with the plot just get rid of Mc's rashness as soon as possible. Overall rating:-4.2/5 This novel deserves a 4.4 or 4.3-star rating in the app, just because people don't have the habit of reading something realistic doesn't mean that the novel is bad or not worth your time, you should give this a try, and it's quite nice to read. You guys know that I only review a novel with potential, this one has it, check it out. Reader's maturity rate:-4.8/5 The reader must be mature and not suffering from hormonal changes to enjoy this novel because it contains struggle and is a bit realistic. If you are suffering from being addicted to the vast waste of novels on this platform then you will not like this novel, as you can see with the other review. Now I am not saying that this novel is very good, but it's not bad either, if the author refines his writing more and edits the previous chapters, it will be a refreshing read. My thoughts:-I am not a fan of damachi and don't usually read fanfictions related to it but this one is good, there are things I like and things I find annoying but nevertheless, this is worth your time and stones. ~peace
I really like this novel, I especially like that the MC has a past and room for growth. He's not perfect as no one should be at the start. I am looking forward to seeing him grow and I'm not gonna say he's OP at the start but he kind of is? Anyway he is kind of already OP but still finding his way. A very weird balance that you've created perfectly. All I ask is please dont make this a harem. I find his shyness cute and adorable but I do not like harems at all and I find that they often ruin good stories for me. If I could vote with power stone I would but for some reason the feature isnt there yet? Anyways it's a good read and I encourage everyone to give it a try.
this is my opinion of this novel. I get what you're trying to do here I really appreciate it but it's fiction for a reason. fanfiction to boot. why add the negativity and realism bullshit. we already have all that in real life and more. if you're looking to do that make an original sappy shit not take an existing fantasy world and make it about your shitty life representation.
story? great, actually author? agreeable protagonist? trashman hotel? trivago The only problem of the story is MC, so before starting to read ask yourself "am I willing to tolerate him for 30 chapters straight before character development kicks in?". If you are, then you are in for a pleasant ride. If not, save your nerves and don't even start.
I quite like this. Its a Bit slower than usual wich is nice, since theres an actual pace to the Story. The characters Seem thoughtfull, its not a ****story wich is nice. And its well written so far, apart from smileyfaces,which are an aquired taste im willing to overlook due to corvos powers being cool. Really wish je had corvos mask though. Its really bada**.
Story is really good so far looking forward for next updates about the details of the character emotional state i don't have any problems with that..... and i don't want to see another story of over 1900 chapter in which almost half of chapter are only about character emotional state *cough**cough* Endless path *cough*
— This is a good book with little to no grammar mistakes — The upload stability is good-ish sometimes frequent chapters other times there is a while between them but the quality is worth the wait — The story development is good and it makes u emotional — The character design is complex and we still are learning nee things about the MC — The wolrd background is good as it’s darker and more realistic than the anime/manga — The only fault i can find is that lily is still alive but thats my personal opinion i just hate her character but the author has done a great job with everything
the main character i hated from the start. the author wrote a main characters to be hated on. it was obvious written that way on purpose. the detail and thought shown in the rest of the story. reaffirms that belief. while I unfortunately did not seem much world building what little I did see was good. the author used the readers foreknowledge of danmichi universe. and only added minor details. however if this was the first time you read a fantasy novel.. it would suck. kind of a moot point. your on webnovel in the fanfiction section. its doubtful anyone would read a fanfiction with out at least checking out the original verse. I like the power set never heard of the game. however the careful detail the author used to describe the game mechanics. made it easy to understand. It was very easy for me to picture the powers in my head. while in action. I do not know the update stability. the story had a lot of chapters when I came across it. so I did not subtract points. I should point out that my dislike for the main characters is not stopping the points for character design. the author designed him well. so well if I meet the mc in person I would want to stab him immediately. I absolutely hate the mc. and I do not feel the mc had any character growth to make me like him less. my guess was. that most r.o.b.s. would not send truck kun to hit the mc. so one rob in a fit of pique decided to send this mc to another robs home world to pick a fight. because no lottery would make this loser a winner. and thats the mc best chance.
An overall good story, this is the first story since a lot of time that focus itself on a normal guy, not those badass unrealistic mc that are always unbending and unforgiving even when they are roadside pebbles, let's focus on the rated aspects: -the grammar can be better, don't misunderstand, it's good and clear but there are the always present typos and rare disordered line (RARE) 4 -as of stability so far is good let's hope that the cult of badass cliche op mc doesn't crush author's hopes -maybe it's a bit soon to judge the story development, I' ve yet to discern big differences from the canon (there are some interesting differences though) , but it's a slow paced story in its early chapters, understable, 5 -character design is good and I want encourage the ideas about the mc, it's not everyday that you see a character that is not a god mastermind of schemes in this type of novel, a welcomed change of pace, with also a good character development, also the other characters are well written (but author always strive for better remember 😉👍) 5 -for world building I thought of rating it 4 as I always do for every fanfic, after all in ff no one invented any good world, just took it from the original, but then I thought about cigarettes (why? Read the story), the people around the mc and main characters as a whole are quite alive, with thoughts about matters regarding mc or other non specified interactions (see the chapter about Soma Familia, where 2 side characters talked about thigs of other members etc.) It feels rather alive so I'll put a good 5 It's a good novel to read (if you aren't the boring wishwashy reader that only wants tough MCs, I really question your tastes)
I generally feel this is one of the best danmachi… no, fan fiction I’ve ever read, I truly believe that this could become an anime and is truly a master piece. I only have good things to say exsept for the fact it’s been three years and no uplodes. I was generally disappointed when I saw that it’s been three years since you posted and strongly beleve you should continue writing. I’ve read some of your comments and It seems you acctually like writing this story, so I don’t know why you would stop. You don’t need to keep writing but I just want to know the real reason you’ve stopped writing. All I can think of is you died, and that’s not a joke and could actually be what happened. Anyway defiantly recommend this novel.
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hello author, i truly like your novel and its very special. i like to tell you that i am not good with speaking and often write stupid things. But this novel of yours is truly wonderful. A very rare factor in fan fic reality and logical factor. it is blend in very well with fantasy and it hits every mark. mc has a love hate personality and i like it. Story development is fine, good. Character introduction is good. has the shadow of a real novel, not fan fic. Still a long way before reaching Grand master level but way above of low or average due to some quirks/specialit in your writing. Let me tell you i am one of those waste fan fic reader that never stick long till end. And from my experience i can sniff out some shitty smell and that what drew me in. Then the reality crash in making me feel frustration anger dislike, but i swallow down and completed and i feel a sense of achievement. And from my perspective i see no future in the story, i could only see a different story , from the second arc. I feel the transition will not be smooth and story will surely change. from reality tragic to romance fantasy. As danmachi has no large plot, new oc, new background, new logic and story fail. As this is a trial story, i feel the quality will not be the same. And it seem like a one shot end on character introduction and romance. Well let's leave my rant , i hope you don't blew a fuse or what ever but instead prove me wrong . one think i notice reading the story it lacked flow, which some good story has, the felling of reading and not knowing when it ended. which can be from bad transition or phasing . Second the story is a mess, i like mess but not a proper way for a story. like when i see the title and cover, i think it's harem girl conquering, when start reading you just hit the reader with a hard slam making there interest lost as well as capturing there intress, don't know iits your charm or talent or what you were aiming. third it good and not suitable for hormonal reader and danmachi is such story of fantasy, so good and bad choice. i don't know how to judge but love it hate it and understand it , so do your best don't mind my rambling
