Review Detail of Mike_Smith in One Step At A Time (DanMachi)
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the main character i hated from the start. the author wrote a main characters to be hated on. it was obvious written that way on purpose. the detail and thought shown in the rest of the story. reaffirms that belief. while I unfortunately did not seem much world building what little I did see was good. the author used the readers foreknowledge of danmichi universe. and only added minor details. however if this was the first time you read a fantasy novel.. it would suck. kind of a moot point. your on webnovel in the fanfiction section. its doubtful anyone would read a fanfiction with out at least checking out the original verse. I like the power set never heard of the game. however the careful detail the author used to describe the game mechanics. made it easy to understand. It was very easy for me to picture the powers in my head. while in action. I do not know the update stability. the story had a lot of chapters when I came across it. so I did not subtract points. I should point out that my dislike for the main characters is not stopping the points for character design. the author designed him well. so well if I meet the mc in person I would want to stab him immediately. I absolutely hate the mc. and I do not feel the mc had any character growth to make me like him less. my guess was. that most r.o.b.s. would not send truck kun to hit the mc. so one rob in a fit of pique decided to send this mc to another robs home world to pick a fight. because no lottery would make this loser a winner. and thats the mc best chance.
One Step At A Time (DanMachi)
An_Imperfectionist
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Yes, he is hateful... This Fic is basically a practice run, or say a test for an original I have in mind. If I can make such a hateful guy loveable through sheer character development and story progression, and make it sell... Then I guess I'm more than qualified to write a decent original. -As for Argus(MC) himself I used the initial chapters and half of the first arc (Lili's Arc) to establish him as solidly and clearly as I can. To let the readers understand what kind of person they're reading about... before the actual story begins. I figured only then the character arcs will make sense. - Not detailing the basic workings of the system of the world. I'm planning on doing this as the story progresses. The reason is that... The anime described very little about the world of DanMachi itself... specially Falna or the Blessing of the Gods. Basically, there are too many factors to mention even in a 'Major Info Dump' about just the working and logic on which the Falna runs. And I'm not even including the other stuff. The world will... let's say, will get unlocked after the Lili's Arc. But, yours is a fair point nonetheless. But, hey... I'm just a newbie. So cut me some slack. -Update stability. Well, things haven't been stable so far and I'm doing my best to get it together. I have 6 hours of college classes daily, plus 2 hours of tuition, plus an hour of self-study. And I also just so happen to have a life... at least I think I do. -What to expect from Argus's story? Well, the latest chapter was {Chapter 23} and Lili's arc will end in a couple of next chapters... This is where you'll get to see Argus taking first real actions. I'll do my best to make them as satisfying as possible. This is also where the actual story will begin... because I would've established Argus by then. Your trail of comments ended in Chapter 5... So, I'd suggest you read the whole thing if you haven't already. And thanks for taking the write a review. I really appreciate that! That's
I felt i was coming across as to nasty. so I stopped commenting. I am caught up on your story. I like commenting. but hating on a character to much. often makes authors think I am hating on the author. and with your forethought. I didn't want a good author to drop a story. I'm making a distinction between the main character. and the author because it is obviously not a self insert. power fantasy.
An_Imperfectionist:Yes, he is hateful... This Fic is basically a practice run, or say a test for an original I have in mind. If I can make such a hateful guy loveable through sheer character development and story progression, and make it sell... Then I guess I'm more than qualified to write a decent original. -As for Argus(MC) himself I used the initial chapters and half of the first arc (Lili's Arc) to establish him as solidly and clearly as I can. To let the readers understand what kind of person they're reading about... before the actual story begins. I figured only then the character arcs will make sense. - Not detailing the basic workings of the system of the world. I'm planning on doing this as the story progresses. The reason is that... The anime described very little about the world of DanMachi itself... specially Falna or the Blessing of the Gods. Basically, there are too many factors to mention even in a 'Major Info Dump' about just the working and logic on which the Falna runs. And I'm not even including the other stuff. The world will... let's say, will get unlocked after the Lili's Arc. But, yours is a fair point nonetheless. But, hey... I'm just a newbie. So cut me some slack. -Update stability. Well, things haven't been stable so far and I'm doing my best to get it together. I have 6 hours of college classes daily, plus 2 hours of tuition, plus an hour of self-study. And I also just so happen to have a life... at least I think I do. -What to expect from Argus's story? Well, the latest chapter was {Chapter 23} and Lili's arc will end in a couple of next chapters... This is where you'll get to see Argus taking first real actions. I'll do my best to make them as satisfying as possible. This is also where the actual story will begin... because I would've established Argus by then. Your trail of comments ended in Chapter 5... So, I'd suggest you read the whole thing if you haven't already. And thanks for taking the write a review. I really appreciate that! That's
So long it's constructive... I'm happy. I learned a lot from your review... So keep up... I can take some, and surely Argus wouldn't mind some hate. Comments makes me feel like my novel is getting recognised and strives me to do better... To prove that... you can go back and read the previous chapters... then come back and read the latest. You'll see the difference.
Mike_Smith:I felt i was coming across as to nasty. so I stopped commenting. I am caught up on your story. I like commenting. but hating on a character to much. often makes authors think I am hating on the author. and with your forethought. I didn't want a good author to drop a story. I'm making a distinction between the main character. and the author because it is obviously not a self insert. power fantasy.