Gonna give a quick honest review of this one, Comencemos.
Writing Quality: Average, I don't see many typos but there are very few dialogues, a lot of words in every paragraph, make it a little loaded and not a fresh reading experience.
Stability of Updates: Can't really tell since I haven't even caught up yet, but almost there, however, I'm betting on 4 stars with this one.
Story Development: Lackluster, don't really see much development in be it power, romance or any other area, I will explain further below.
World Background: Decent, I can't really give a detailed score regarding this one because I've never seen or read Twilight but I bet the official ones' background should be better than this one, further explanation below.
Now I'll explain why this novel is 'average' to me.
First, I don't know anything about twilight and I almost never read any fanfic that has less than 40 or 50 chapters in this site but this is the first Twilight one I've actually seen in the rankings and gave it a try thinking 'maybe this one will give me a better impression of the story than what I have heard from the original'
Well... I'm totally disappointed at the fact that I see almost no influence of 'Twilight' in this fanfic except for a few characters and that's it, I mean it has only been 19 chapters, 15 for me, and yet there is a total lack of any major event in the series or anything that might actually give characters or even the MC a purpose.
The only good thing I can say thus far is that I love Alice and I don't know if I should attribute that to the original Twilight or to you author. I think she would've done a better heroine than Rosalie and mind me I don't hate Rosalie, it is just my opinion, her character just has more 'personality' than Rosalie's
Second, you mixed Solo Leveling's power but failed to understand what actually makes Solo Leveling amazing which is not just the necromancer like power but the actual battles and the brutality of MC actually leading all his freaking 'diverse' entourage into epic battles.
I've yet to see the first thrilling battle here.
I don't really like the desition of MC involving his family, can't really understand people's fixation with immortality and living forever with the same person, he and Rosalie don't have a choice but why involve his parents? Immortality is a curse, not a blessing.
His parents have a very peaceful life not being involved with the magic world after escaping, why would you involve them in all that mess again? for the sake of what? I don't really see the point in them battling any enemy if there was really one when he has his GF/Wife with him and a possible legion of shadows as well...
And last, I see you have the intention of making it a Harem, a small harem...
I don't hate harems, I actually love them but I hate harems where the girls in it aren't properly developed. And let me tell you even if this was not a harem Rosalie wasn't properly developed.
There weren't really moments, battles, strifes, discussions, etc etc... That made me think 'I like this Rosalie' if this was some other author I'd think that poor Jasper is going to get a Green Hat.
That's a mistake a lot of authors commit, and that's the reason you yourself are thinking of involving another girl in this.
For there to be only one heroine, the romance must be developed slowly but not in a physical way but in an emotional way. You could even make a Heroine and an MC that fk each other on a daily basis three times a day but don't have feelings for each other, and slowly make them develop those feelings and that would be a fairly good romance to write, the opposite is also true.
But in this case, I only see a guy that fell for some girl he has only known for a week without any reason whatsoever and a girl who fell for a guy at first sight also without any reason.
As for the world background, I don't political, geographic, weather or any other background points of view taken into consideration a lot in the writing.
For this and many other reasons, in my humble opinion, this fanfic is just 'average' but being in its early stages I believe it can still be redirected to a proper place.
I like the idea a lot that's what drew me here. I was thinking of something like this when I came:
"Fking Jing woo summoning hundreds of monsters to fight a war against an alliance of werewolves and vampires after freaking stealing the Werewolf Queen and the Vampire Queen from their Kings, everything unleashed in an Epic Battle where he fought those two kings alone, his two queens fought the generals and his undead army fought the mobs..."
Alas, that's more Underworld than Twilight but well one can dream. Hopefully someone reads this and makes a fanfic like that.
Greetings.
