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Most of the story was rushed causing skme of the information to be terribly inaccurate. example of this is in chapter 8 where the author stated that kakashi's father is dead but in chapter 26, kakashi's father somehow alive. We dont mind you chnage the original plots as long as the story is consistent.
Honestly it's bad in every way. Dead Characters suddenly being alive (and not in the way you guys thinking) like the author just forgets they're dead. The main character is Retarded oh sorry "mentally challenged" he forgets to copy skills? and so often? If i were you I'd waste my time jerking off to 325547 instead. Also you're welcome.
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what the fact chapter 8 kakashi's father is dead but chapter 26 he's now alive what stupidity is this what the fact chapter 8 kakashi's father is dead but chapter 26 he's now alive what stupidity is this what the fact chapter 8 kakashi's father is dead but chapter 26 he's now alive what stupidity is this what the fact chapter 8 kakashi's father is dead but chapter 26 he's now alive what stupidity is this
It seemed fun at first and the writing isn't too bad, and I even ignored the inconsistent timeline at first, but I don't like the MC, so the story isn't worth the time for me. Inconsistency comes in what looks like the author fusing the 2nd and 3rd wars together. First battlefield that MC is part of is against Suna, which is the 2nd war, and Sakumo Hatake who was already told was dead is alive and even has the event where he becomes hated by Chiyo for killing her kid. Then instantly there is the war against Iwa and Kiri which is the 3rd war. I don't like the MC because he has no goal besides growing stronger. He constantly notes how lazy he is. It's understandable for him to not want to draw attention, but he does it anyway because he wants to grow stronger. And there's no motive for growing stronger. If he just wanted to be left alone, he could've been a civilian. He has practically no people he cares for and avoids most interactions... He's just kinda there.
this is real good stuff read if you are a fan of OP MC, OP System, OP Cheat genre. MC has shown quick development while not showing anything for 8 years of his past life without system, and it was accepted by the village and he considers everyone he meets a Friend rather quickly is one of the few potholes also if he isn't going to trust the Anime or Manga description of characters then why does he not question that things are still moving as per the Anime or Manga descriptions... otherwise the novel is quite well written , except for some minor spell mistakes sometimes.
This fanfic does have few plot-holes, but if you ignore those then the story is overall great. The author updates more than once daily, and the character design is pretty fleshed out. Although I am worried about the mc becoming TOO overpowered. Overall, I HIGHLY recommend this fanfic as its better than some of the reborn stuff on this website.
Good story, but it lacks coherence and logic, the schedule is wrong in some things, not to mention that in an hour it presents a character as dead, that's how he spoke about the father of kakashi, and I set chapters later, it shows this character alive, I know that the author is more concerned with the quality of writing and fluency of development, but a friend of the author, he cannot sacrifice logic and coherence for this reason, otherwise he will spoil the story in part, and that is why my note is just that, but in general it is worth reading.
Sakumo hatake is kakasi father and he deat before war. *********************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************************
Can't wait for Kaguya! Just imagine she is released from her seal just to be outmatched at that point! Please at least finish till the end of naruto, I'm begging! The fast pace and all the skills are exciting! The battles are fantastic, and his actions are well in line with his personality. Not only that, the training in itself is fantastic. Realistic considering all the knowledge and bloodlines he acquires. Keep doing awesome work! Personal request... if there is romance, let it be Kaguya. She's underrated despite being a beauty. Something about the eyebrows, white skin, and princess clothes is just really attractive.
This story has a lot of potential and could be really good but idk if its because the author is lazy but he doesn't respond to any comments or criticism and doesn't even try to fix his mistakes or says it's a multiverse novel but so far he is only in naruto so idk why it says multiverse and on chapter 8 it say sakumo died but by chapter 26 he is alive so I do recommend if you can push through the mistakes and the author stops being a bad author and fix his mistakes.