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athass_prkr
athass_prkrAuthor1yr
2023-03-04 02:27

I am giving the story five stars because ... well everybody seems to do it, and I did it in my last story. Anyway, if you have any comments or criticism let me know. I hope you enjoy this fic...

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Jacob_Hobbs_7913
Jacob_Hobbs_7913Lv4

Cool cover 👍

Jacob_Hobbs_7913
Jacob_Hobbs_7913Lv4

I just realized that I found this almost at the same time I found it on fanfiction and did not connect the dots until today 🤣

Rillik
RillikLv4

harem or single romance?

LesendeTaube
LesendeTaubeLv4

Harem?

LesendeTaube
LesendeTaubeLv4

Pls not

LesendeTaube:Harem?
magnetrelease
magnetreleaseLv4

Harem ou romance célibataire ?

Wesley_Hylry
Wesley_HylryLv14

please harem.. but from what i saw it seems without harem

Sam0207
Sam0207Lv4

hello Author. I really loved the story. All of it is very interesting. And I just can't wait to see next chapters. Will the release frequency in future? Please do consider it.

Sleeping_Owl_00
Sleeping_Owl_00Lv1

Do you have any plans to add music element in deep in the story? It seems a nice fit with name of the story and it's theme.

timepiece94
timepiece94Lv14

Does this have anything to do with melodious of the 7 deadly sins?

Tyler_Baker_3884
Tyler_Baker_3884Lv4

so I've just read the chapter Silent Night on here and after this I'm very hesitant it's making me very uneasy of Dumbledore because he's already put a compulsion for him to even look at the mirror of arisit so hit him sitting there trying to dodge it it's completely right I don't trust him at this point it seems like he's trying to get him under his thumb to me Dumbledore as always been a person that I would just not fully trust you know reading back on the books especially when you read towards the end I understand what had to happen to Harry Potter had to happen but my question why couldn't another race help Harry because I never thought I thought it was stupid that he was always trying to find the answers in book but goblins are streaming knowledgeable so I don't think that they wouldn't know the answer to help Perry my other question is is I hope you do make kids in a Vegas at least an a bird of some type that would be nice not something magical cuz it just doesn't really make sense because I don't know but I will say this after this interaction I would hold Dumbledore and Snape with Extreme Caution because you know snakes under Dumbledore's thumb also I think it would be really cool for him to buy a house in the Muggle world and it would be a cottage really good idea for him to have like a place to go to that would be that way and it would be really cool for it to be somewhere close to a beach

God_of_hentai
God_of_hentaiLv14

is there romance

Tony_Marks
Tony_MarksLv14

you have got to be one of the best story writers on this platform... please keep up the good work... thank you 😊

SMomoTempest
SMomoTempestLv14

I read that as Meliodas lol

spiderman3_4
spiderman3_4Lv13

Me too

SMomoTempest:I read that as Meliodas lol
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Vansmoke
VansmokeLv5

So it is Evil/Manipulative!Dumbledore and other cliche-bashing?

HangerBaby
HangerBabyLv4

did you actually write this yourself? cause people give you tips and kind corrections but you ignore everything making me think that this isnt yours so you arent going to fix anything

priyanshu_tak
priyanshu_takLv4

bro I love the way you are making the world it seems real keep going and after completing exploring the world can you add the the multiverses as a lot of them have magic, i want the mc to travel and explore those world specially verse like mcu

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maskhara
maskharaLv13

im leaving a mixed review here hoping the author reads it. so far the story seems well paced and well written in terms of language and structure. im pointing out the things marring my reading experiance hoping it helps dont let it detract from your enjoyment of what seems to be a well written tale. however reading up to chapter 15 the story has a distinct feeling of condecension, towards the established lore, world building and plot. instead of just changing what the author wants they keep criticizing the established world building and stating that their version is the one that makes sense over the original. that may not be the intent but it certainly seems to be the effect. another thing that i mind is that the protagonist seems to be one of those transmigrators who looks down upon all the plot and conflicts as a high and mighty voice of reason that cant be bothered with childish politics and looks at all the mysteries and norms of the world as senseless and beneath them. and the character seems to hold most other characters in disdain and acts haughtyt and rude but is facing absolutely no consequences for it. it seems that the author intends for them to be this way. this however conflicts directly with how the author describes the character. on the whole the character seems unconcerned with the world and events and just wants to be a research hobo who is power hungry... to sum ot up this story has forspoken syndrome.... where the protagonists personality ruins your immersion and enjoyment of an otherwise likeable and well made world

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