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ArtoriaPendragon_
ArtoriaPendragon_Lv141yr
2023-03-21 12:13

The story overall is pretty decent, but it has a major flaw that makes it hard for me to want to read. It’s overly descriptive, and by that I mean 99% of the chapters are descriptions about certain things. As well as Harry constantly thinking, which make sure fic a chore to read as it gets boring fast. It took like 15-16 chapters just for him to get the his first class at Hogwarts. And like 13-14 to actually get to Hogwarts itself. The other fanfic this author has suffers from this same problem, which is just a lot (and I mean a LOT) of descriptions, thinking, and world background without anything truly happening. Not to mention the fact that Harry seems like your cliche Emo/loner Mc who is always quiet and super smart and all that. Overall I might continue reading, but if it’s anything like their other fic (which was definitely worse than this one) I probably will not.

Enchanting Melodies (HP SI)

athass_prkr
4.5
405 Chs

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ArtoriaPendragon_
ArtoriaPendragon_Lv14

Makes your fic*

1yr
Juhiko
JuhikoLv6

good description 👌

1yr
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Daoist_Dan
Daoist_DanLv10

My advice is to skip right to chapter 7 as that's where he begins buying his stuff for school. No need to experience all the Dursley drama and bashing. Simply assume Harry gained his SI memories at some point and carry on.

1yr
23
ArtoriaPendragon_
ArtoriaPendragon_Lv14

I read to like chapter 15-20, and it really doesn’t get better. The fact that 90% of each chapter Is just Harry thinking, or descriptions ruins the fanfic for me. The author just has an issue with being over descriptive, they have the same issue on all their other fanfics. And I doubt they will ever change this because they don’t really pay attention to any criticism.

Daoist_Dan:My advice is to skip right to chapter 7 as that's where he begins buying his stuff for school. No need to experience all the Dursley drama and bashing. Simply assume Harry gained his SI memories at some point and carry on.
1yr
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Roktah
RoktahLv15

what annoyed me the most is how he walked knowingly into avoidable situations. the forest of death for example, he knew voldemort was in there and he still enterd, like why? or when he was singled out by quirrel for his exams, he knew voldi was up to something and yet instead of using his cloak to hide, he just walked in.

1yr
22
ArtoriaPendragon_
ArtoriaPendragon_Lv14

The author just really wants canon to remain the same I guess😂

Roktah:what annoyed me the most is how he walked knowingly into avoidable situations. the forest of death for example, he knew voldemort was in there and he still enterd, like why? or when he was singled out by quirrel for his exams, he knew voldi was up to something and yet instead of using his cloak to hide, he just walked in.
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1yr
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Daoist_Dan
Daoist_DanLv10

I really didn't get far. Between the bashing, the world being built on so much headcanon, every background note the author made being used so it wouldn't go to waste, and the mc being a "cringe smart" that has him monologing his intelligence at people... Not a quality story. This would be my review.

ArtoriaPendragon_:I read to like chapter 15-20, and it really doesn’t get better. The fact that 90% of each chapter Is just Harry thinking, or descriptions ruins the fanfic for me. The author just has an issue with being over descriptive, they have the same issue on all their other fanfics. And I doubt they will ever change this because they don’t really pay attention to any criticism.
1yr
4
ArtoriaPendragon_
ArtoriaPendragon_Lv14

Pretty much the same reason I dropped it

Daoist_Dan:I really didn't get far. Between the bashing, the world being built on so much headcanon, every background note the author made being used so it wouldn't go to waste, and the mc being a "cringe smart" that has him monologing his intelligence at people... Not a quality story. This would be my review.
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1yr
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_Kioshi_Michio_
_Kioshi_Michio_Lv3

Apparently you have not seen such a novel as "War and Peace

1yr
ArtoriaPendragon_
ArtoriaPendragon_Lv14

No, no I have not

_Kioshi_Michio_:Apparently you have not seen such a novel as "War and Peace
1yr
fowlerdd
fowlerddLv14

Yeah a lot of these self insert fics go into way too much detail and characters get stuck in their own heads. Personally I think it’s because authors tend to get a little nervous when canon events approach and then proceed to stall as longs as possible.

8mth
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athass_prkr
athass_prkrAuthor

I am giving the story five stars because ... well everybody seems to do it, and I did it in my last story. Anyway, if you have any comments or criticism let me know. I hope you enjoy this fic...

1yr

AAAAAAAHHHHHHH
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1yr
hero4hire
hero4hireLv11

What happend to this novel? It had amazing start and was one of my favorite novel but suddenly mc seem to be a differnt person..his outburst at hermione incident, malfoy drama and now he want friendship and family. If this is just another harry craving for love and friendship then i'd rather just go read the cannon any day.

1yr
ArrogantYungMaster
ArrogantYungMasterLv4

I’m writing this review at Chp.22. Thus far the novel has proven to be well written and with a wonderful start to the story. The original canon has been altered, however it is still really good as you can see the original story happening yet our mc having his own adventure within the story. The melody’s of magic is an ingenious idea within this story and I’ve enjoyed it immensely. In regards to the MCs character, I’m still torn between despised and intrigued. You see, our mc is a pacifistic bookworm through and through. While I do enjoy an MC with a handle on his bloodlust and family murdering tendencies, it does get a bit odd when someone attacks you from behind and insults you at any given moment to not return the favour. In any case, there is still room for character development whether good or bad and I look forward to reading the upcoming chapters. Signed The most arrogant of all young masters.

1yr
maskhara
maskharaLv13

im leaving a mixed review here hoping the author reads it. so far the story seems well paced and well written in terms of language and structure. im pointing out the things marring my reading experiance hoping it helps dont let it detract from your enjoyment of what seems to be a well written tale. however reading up to chapter 15 the story has a distinct feeling of condecension, towards the established lore, world building and plot. instead of just changing what the author wants they keep criticizing the established world building and stating that their version is the one that makes sense over the original. that may not be the intent but it certainly seems to be the effect. another thing that i mind is that the protagonist seems to be one of those transmigrators who looks down upon all the plot and conflicts as a high and mighty voice of reason that cant be bothered with childish politics and looks at all the mysteries and norms of the world as senseless and beneath them. and the character seems to hold most other characters in disdain and acts haughtyt and rude but is facing absolutely no consequences for it. it seems that the author intends for them to be this way. this however conflicts directly with how the author describes the character. on the whole the character seems unconcerned with the world and events and just wants to be a research hobo who is power hungry... to sum ot up this story has forspoken syndrome.... where the protagonists personality ruins your immersion and enjoyment of an otherwise likeable and well made world

1yr
hero4hire
hero4hireLv11

Author it seems like you're trying to follow the framwork you set in the beginning and its stopping your novel into becoming something better. Constantly trying to force the cannon with such a big plot twist from the beginning doesnt make any sense when it could be so much better if you let the story progress organically. You have amazing take on magic and the unqiue power mc have, why not focus more on it with occational mix of cannon where he can just help if convinient or ignore it since dumby gonna control the narrative anyway. I'd recommend: Ancient rune professor, mythical journey if you wanna check out other novels that did following the cannon without letting it dictate the flow of story genre.

1yr
Mastersun
MastersunLv1

In this story, there are too many descriptions of what is happening around the main character, I have read all the available chapters at the moment and in this plot 80% of the description of the world background, which in fact is not necessary and only 20% of the plot, plus the main character seems to be some kind of emo loner who only does, that he reads books in a corner alone.

1yr
Lessar
LessarLv14

I tried reading this 3-4 times, but i can't do it.. The MC's personality is just so "irritating" to me he is pathetic for an "adult," a pushover, and i am so biased against him that he could just be breathing and i would be here in the comments section berating him for that lol

1yr
TinyBookDragon
TinyBookDragonLv4

Things went down hill the moment the diary came into play.

1yr
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