Sam0207
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Sam02079hCommentedMy god, please punctuate this. My soul and heart just hurts reading this without punctuation.
"It was me I broke the globe"Gloria said to everyone's surprise.I saw that cam was going to say something as well but he stopped mid way and looked Gloria with surprise.- Sam020710hCommented
Ayo what did I miss?
Mary sat nervously in the waiting room of the hospital, twisting her hands on her lap. Nathan stood beside her, his face also etched with concern. - Sam020710hCommented
Sigh. There should be a period (.) after "Mrs" instead of "Miss".
Chris nodded."Thank you Mrs Wallace, Miss.Adler" - Sam020710hCommented
What show is it? Is it a simple morning program? A late night show? Or some novelty show? Who's the large personality? Does this person have a name? So much things ignored.
TV Host: Good evening, folks! Today, we have an extraordinary guest joining us on our show. He is the author of the recent best seller 'Toy Story' but there one thing; he's not your typical author because, believe it or not, he's just 10 years old! Please welcome Daniel Adler! - Sam020710hCommented
Well yeah.
Mom and Alexandra were surprised by me taking control of the negotiations. - Sam020710hCommented
These dialogues really should be said by the Lawyer. I was so happy, that the author started kinda small and logical...but this is just..
Firmly standing my ground, I insisted, "I believe in my story, and I want the terms to reflect its value. Let's find a middle ground." - Sam020710hCommented
I feel like some dialogues should be given to lawyer and his mom..
"Well, you know, I've been approached by a few other publishers who seem interested in my work." I added, subtly alluding to having other offers on the table. - Sam020710hCommented
*me Not "him". While writing, if you're distracted, once again read your sentences. Always keep the tense, POV and tone of your writing in mind.
While John and Lucy heaped praise upon him and presented the offer, I couldn't ignore the power dynamic at play. I was a young, new author, and they could try to take advantage of that. So I needed time to negotiate with them on equal standing. If this company liked my story, others might like it too. I also needed get a good deal and not get the short end of the stick. - Sam020711hCommented
If you're typing out Miss completely, there's no need for the use of period (.). It's just used when we use short forms... Example: Hello, Ms. Adler. Here: Hello, Mister Adler. Notice the difference. Just helping out btw.
John acknowledged her concern. "Miss. Adler, our intention is to nurture Daniel's talent, not overwhelm him. We understand the balance needed for someone his age. Our meeting today is just an exploration, a chance to discuss possibilities. If, at any point, you feel it's not the right time or direction, we respect that decision." - Sam020711hCommented
While use of semi colon is appropriate, you don't need to use it every other paragraph. A simple comma will do.
"Thank you; today has been a roller coaster of emotions for me. When I met you before, I was so sure I would at least make the final list, but not making it was unexpected." - Sam020711hCommented
I would suggest using a synonym for "talent". At times, it feels repetitive.
She turned to my mother. "You must be very proud, Miss Adler, to have such a talented son." - Sam020711hCommented
I saw* Why shift the POV constantly?
He saw Emily approaching them. "Daniel, I was so sure your story would make it to the final list. What happened?" Emily asked, genuine surprise etched on her face. - Sam020711hCommented
Aiyo what happened to the punctuation? đ
The mature part of me could handle it because i knew the story wasn;t mine i just 'borrowed' it,but the ten-year-old was upset. It was like a punch in the gut for my younger mind. - Sam020711hCommented
Thank you. Finally someone understands. There has to be steps. Again, thank you.
I needed to get start on my plans, so I decided to begin by writing novels to dip my toes into the entertainment industry and gain some recognition. However, being a child, I couldn't just write anything; I had to start small. That's when I realized I could write children's movies as short stories. The problem was, I didn't know how to publish them, and I wondered if anyone would believe that I wrote them. - Sam020711hReplied to Kratos_theLycaon
Nightmares? We've got em aplenty!
Arched eyebrows and a mix of curiosity and amusement met my announcement. - Sam020712hCommentedCh 594 Chapter 588 : Medical Ninjutsu
- Sam02071dReplied to Blackstar2710
I thought the same. I mean they were the ones who had the dojutsu first. And this level of advance seals could be from them. As they know better than anyone else...about their own abilities đ . But the Jashin theory that's brewing is also interesting. I mean it opened up a pretty unexplored route.
Suddenly, Fujin's eyes widened temporarily as he wondered, 'Wait a minute. Lunatics⌠High level of Fuinjutsu⌠Sacrifices⌠Don't tell me the Hyuga who created this seal was a follower of Jashin⌠With the help of a Bishop, creating such a seal isn't an impossibility. - Sam02071dReplied to Blackstar2710
I'm glad.
Suddenly, Fujin's eyes widened temporarily as he wondered, 'Wait a minute. Lunatics⌠High level of Fuinjutsu⌠Sacrifices⌠Don't tell me the Hyuga who created this seal was a follower of Jashin⌠With the help of a Bishop, creating such a seal isn't an impossibility. - Sam02071dCommentedCh 593 Chapter 587 : Suspicion!