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El_Shadi
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2020-07-05 00:22

I don't know whether or not this is the author's first book or if they have lots of experience. I wouldn't necessarily say this book is bad. Because the concept is actually very good. And if this is the author's first or one of their first books, then they did a fantastic job. And I would tell them to keep writing. However there were some parts of this novel that I myself did not enjoy. And I frankly felt did not make sense. The mc, an old and experienced dragon, was reborn as a child. Makes sense how he acts and all that in the first half of the chapters. However then his father got sick and the book went down hill from there. The knight academy he went to for 10 years felt so forced. It was just an excuse for a time skip. And a terrible one at that seeing as he did not grow stronger at all in those 10 years EVEN THO he was supposed to be doing it to find the cure for his dad. Then, he finally leaves and goes to another academy where he hides his strength and all that. Here is where things get confusing for me. He has killed intermediate beasts before. That's a fact. And we were also told that average knights would not be able to defeat an intermediate beast . Ok. But then he enters a school and gets beat up by a second-year student who would technically only be 16. So, this 16 year old is better than all average knights? Ok, he must be the best of the best. Nope. Rank 50. And the match wasn't even close. Honestly, they're trying to make him struggle, which I understand, but they're focusing more on the physical struggle than the mental struggle which I believe is a mistake. as a former dragon even if he does not have magic in this current body he has been given the tools which would allow him to rule over everyone else quite easily if he would stop being forced to waste away his time in the academy learning almost nothing. To make up for his incredible skills, the author could have given him a greater mental and emotional struggle. The struggle between the mind of a beast in the heart of the human. Idk, there's honestly a lot of good concepts in this novel however I'm going to have to drop it because I just don't wanna read any more of a novel where the mc is forced to be weak when there is a clear path to strength. Keep trying Mr./Miss Author

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BrabbitX
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"He has killed intermediate beasts before. That's a fact. And we were also told that average knights would not be able to defeat an intermediate beast . Ok. But then he enters a school and gets beat up by a second-year student who would technically only be 16. So, this 16 year old is better than all average knights? Ok, he must be the best of the best. Nope. Rank 50." Lol, every review that is not 5 stars is so helpful to figure out if the novel is shit or not.

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So I should leave a review since I had great hope for this novel, but was disappointed. I will list the problems: 1. Grammar ...simply, it sucks. I can understand that English is not the author's first language, but there are like 10 grammar mistakes each chapter. Please, use a proofreader it's really distracting from the story. There, they're and their are different. Please learn it. 2. Writing style The limites of the language hits hard in the style department. Since the author doesn't master the language, phrases are always linear and simple, concepts are expressed one at a time etc... This impacts the story since it seems the actors themselves are basic. 3. Plot holes, world building, etc I understand you don't want infodumps, and you also don't want to spoiler the story but... Seriously, try to give a reason for things happening, and not at chapter 1000 since people will not arrive there. Sen is acting like a true 5 yo even being a 1000 yo dragon. Is there a good reason? Maybe. Without explaining, or even an hypotesis, this is simply a plot hole. Whatever is inside the mind of the author doesn't count, only what is written. And don't go "but normal books can explain after 200 pages, why can't I?" Normal books are supposed to be perfect in language use, have been read and revisited multiple time by the author and the editor team, so the reader is somewhat assured that the story is somewhat decent. On webnovel the author publishes BEFORE finishing the story and often before checking for errors. Maybe in chapter 300 the author is like "oooops for plot reason I need this in chapter 30... Too bad it's already published. Let's hope nobody notices" while in a normal book you would go and modify chapter 30 to be coherent. Now, I have gone for a bit of a rant here. TL;DR: the story is simple but ha potential... Wasted because of poor English and oversimplification

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