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AshWritesThings
AshWritesThingsLv24yr
2020-03-17 19:30

I have been loving this story so much. I mean, at the start, Ray acted like he did as a dragon. But as the story has progressed, he has learned about and felt human emotion. He’s made his own family, and I’m exited to see where this is headed!

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I_nobody_
I_nobody_Lv5

He was a retard as dragon just as he was as human. There was no emotion other then anger and stupidly explained other feelings. He made his own family of other retards that were painted to be special and smart but they are just as stupid as the “dragon”.

Caden_Chan
Caden_ChanLv4

This story is amazing

Caden_Chan
Caden_ChanLv4

This story is amazing

DaoistmfbjiR
DaoistmfbjiRLv2

In the beginning it seemed he wouldn’t even act as a dragon I would be reading and completely forget he was a dragon

Little_J8
Little_J8Lv2

Dwagon go roar

SayberLynx
SayberLynxLv2

Quite accurate

Poet_Bakerr
Poet_BakerrLv4

I would argue that the story itself is an idea of simplicity, but used in an unothodox fashion that "wows" the reader(s) into a feeling of the extraordinary.

ray_bum
ray_bumLv1

Agreed.

Poet_Bakerr:I would argue that the story itself is an idea of simplicity, but used in an unothodox fashion that "wows" the reader(s) into a feeling of the extraordinary.
5U5P3NC3R
5U5P3NC3RLv2

Ga Ga Ga, me too

Mamba_Down
Mamba_DownLv14

I actually disagree with the Grammer issue .it's honestly not bad because it's not Grammer that's ever the issue but occasional misspelling of words. I noticed it looked like the author was using a voice to text service to write the novel and that's why there's misspellings. It's not unbearable at all since the story isn't structured around changlish. Love the book; just wish you could have had the chance to flesh out the ending

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TheGoodAce
TheGoodAceLv11
GianP
GianPLv6

So I should leave a review since I had great hope for this novel, but was disappointed. I will list the problems: 1. Grammar ...simply, it sucks. I can understand that English is not the author's first language, but there are like 10 grammar mistakes each chapter. Please, use a proofreader it's really distracting from the story. There, they're and their are different. Please learn it. 2. Writing style The limites of the language hits hard in the style department. Since the author doesn't master the language, phrases are always linear and simple, concepts are expressed one at a time etc... This impacts the story since it seems the actors themselves are basic. 3. Plot holes, world building, etc I understand you don't want infodumps, and you also don't want to spoiler the story but... Seriously, try to give a reason for things happening, and not at chapter 1000 since people will not arrive there. Sen is acting like a true 5 yo even being a 1000 yo dragon. Is there a good reason? Maybe. Without explaining, or even an hypotesis, this is simply a plot hole. Whatever is inside the mind of the author doesn't count, only what is written. And don't go "but normal books can explain after 200 pages, why can't I?" Normal books are supposed to be perfect in language use, have been read and revisited multiple time by the author and the editor team, so the reader is somewhat assured that the story is somewhat decent. On webnovel the author publishes BEFORE finishing the story and often before checking for errors. Maybe in chapter 300 the author is like "oooops for plot reason I need this in chapter 30... Too bad it's already published. Let's hope nobody notices" while in a normal book you would go and modify chapter 30 to be coherent. Now, I have gone for a bit of a rant here. TL;DR: the story is simple but ha potential... Wasted because of poor English and oversimplification

El_Shadi
El_ShadiLv13
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