Item: My Vampire System: A Dragon's Revenge
Rating: 3.2
Author: DeMolay

DeMolayLv114yr

2020-05-12 11:49

This novel is good, but it has a serious flaw: The MC is a child with a draconic system, not a reincarnated Dragon. The MC has 0% of the wisdom of a millennial dragon.

My Vampire System: A Dragon's Revenge

JKSManga

4.4

533 Chs

Liked by 62 people

Replies10

Daoist498887Lv11

You really arent good at comprehension. If u read more u will learn that yes he is a reincarnated dragon The system isnt his doing nor is it under his control. Second. The "flaw" as u so called it is literally the hole premise behind the story. Its not called reincarnated dragon its called reincarnated into a human. He not only has memories of being a dragon and recognizes his own name from legends but as the title says he is now a human. No proper reincarnation story starts with the mc as an *****. The author has to build up the mc give them a trial by fire of some sort which we get quickly. They need a motive for their journey. We got that. We need a love interest. We go that. We also need an end goal in mind. We were given that. We also need plot twists. Oh boy have gotten those. Many. Its hard to grasp my attention with this kind of story since I've seen so many but this one is leagues above what i have read. Also remember this platform is typically a starting point for these authors to refine their style. I have only ever seen a series this good and well thought out right off the bat from one other person. I know its not him cuz i keep track of his notes and timeline cuz of the sheer idea vomit he has .I can tell cuz as i read their are spelling and context errors showing this isn't even a final draft. So to sumarrize. The author has done a splendid job and i can see them going far.

4yr

ultimatecoomLv3

What the man was saying is he has a millenial worth of memories even if all he did was sleep all day which he didn't he would still have great wisdom from his life as a dragon but in the story he shows none of this and just acts cringey as hell

Daoist498887:You really arent good at comprehension. If u read more u will learn that yes he is a reincarnated dragon The system isnt his doing nor is it under his control. Second. The "flaw" as u so called it is literally the hole premise behind the story. Its not called reincarnated dragon its called reincarnated into a human. He not only has memories of being a dragon and recognizes his own name from legends but as the title says he is now a human. No proper reincarnation story starts with the mc as an *****. The author has to build up the mc give them a trial by fire of some sort which we get quickly. They need a motive for their journey. We got that. We need a love interest. We go that. We also need an end goal in mind. We were given that. We also need plot twists. Oh boy have gotten those. Many. Its hard to grasp my attention with this kind of story since I've seen so many but this one is leagues above what i have read. Also remember this platform is typically a starting point for these authors to refine their style. I have only ever seen a series this good and well thought out right off the bat from one other person. I know its not him cuz i keep track of his notes and timeline cuz of the sheer idea vomit he has .I can tell cuz as i read their are spelling and context errors showing this isn't even a final draft. So to sumarrize. The author has done a splendid job and i can see them going far.

4yr

DudianLv13

ur stupid ngl

4yr

wajoli_zakoLv4

i thought his initial goal was to avenge his dragon kin i guess he will forget about it and start living a human life.

4yr

OrcasWelpLv5

You're right

3yr

Jay_8793Lv11

Dude he kind of forgot about how humans committed genocide on his race, and then starts to become friends with the humans so easily.

wajoli_zako:i thought his initial goal was to avenge his dragon kin i guess he will forget about it and start living a human life.

3yr

ray_bumLv1

Well, the dragons technically started the genocide on the humans first, only viewing them as prey. That was why he was saying at the start that he couldn't believe the humans would eventually turn that around and completely obliterate them.

Jay_8793:Dude he kind of forgot about how humans committed genocide on his race, and then starts to become friends with the humans so easily.

3yr

ray_bumLv1

You're wrong if you think there's only one 'correct comprehension', excessively so. Just as you have the right to incorporate your own 'comprehension' in your *own review*, they have the right to incorporate theirs. Your comment read like a personal attack, and a really crude one at that--just letting you know that I reported it as such.

3yr

Daoist88uht5Lv1

who told you millenia old dragons have to be wise. Go read vainquer knightsbane. The average human intelligence is 10 there. The dragons have averages of between 7 and 9 or as they like to think, square root of 49 and 64( they don't know what square root means). Anyway, I don't think Ray was ever wise. He was arrogant and powerful but wise? He might have been though.

3yr

ultimatecoomLv3

Wisdom is diffrent from intelligence if you live for a millenia you have worldly experience you understand the world and should not act like a cringy teenager. I read a lot of cultivation novels and there is lots of crazy old men who are millions of years old who act like 16 year olds and it seems stupid to me and that applies here too.

Daoist88uht5:who told you millenia old dragons have to be wise. Go read vainquer knightsbane. The average human intelligence is 10 there. The dragons have averages of between 7 and 9 or as they like to think, square root of 49 and 64( they don't know what square root means). Anyway, I don't think Ray was ever wise. He was arrogant and powerful but wise? He might have been though.

3yr

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Ga Ga Ga!!!" This is how the main character laughs, right? Just a joke. Anyway, please don't expect expert advice from someone like me. Because I'm not an expert editor, so I'll tell you my honest feelings. At the first chapter, I thought that I'm reading a typical reincarnation novel. But there's something more to it. As you read it further, you will be slowly attracted by it. Seriously, no joke! Before I knew it, I'm already at Chapter 5! Although, I read your story for the review swap, I'm going to continue reading it now. Keep up the good work!!!

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SilverArcsLv4

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