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SilverArcs
SilverArcsLv44yr
2020-06-20 16:23

Author makes an effort but the story has little internal consistency. The main character is an ancient dragon reincarnated as a human. He also has a system. He basically doesn't use either. It's fine and good that he has difficulty understanding humans and human emotion, but it's not okay to give him a clear path via the system to increase his strength, even assuming he can't apply any of his dragon knowledge to strengthening himself as a human, then let him spend no time training during a ten year timeskip. Especially when he desperately needs to improve his strength to save someone. The author claims from the start the MC wants to get stronger, but the MC keeps doing things ineffectually with out any in world justification. Any average isekai from our world would be a 100 times stronger than this MC by chapter 50.

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JKSManga
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Hy just a little bti off when he starts getting more stronger form the Chapter you stopped at. the system isn't a regular system like other novels so you can;t really compare them, but yeah if you just read on until the latest chapter before it goes premium you will see the change, but thanks for giving the story a review.

Deadauthor
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So your saying he didn't use it out of suspicion? yeah right I'd believe sooner he was just lazy. It's a plot hole admit it, change it or leave it don't care your story is actually pretty good either way.

JKSManga:Hy just a little bti off when he starts getting more stronger form the Chapter you stopped at. the system isn't a regular system like other novels so you can;t really compare them, but yeah if you just read on until the latest chapter before it goes premium you will see the change, but thanks for giving the story a review.
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