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Kamatis
KamatisLv35yr
2019-12-29 10:22

Ga Ga Ga!!!" This is how the main character laughs, right? Just a joke. Anyway, please don't expect expert advice from someone like me. Because I'm not an expert editor, so I'll tell you my honest feelings. At the first chapter, I thought that I'm reading a typical reincarnation novel. But there's something more to it. As you read it further, you will be slowly attracted by it. Seriously, no joke! Before I knew it, I'm already at Chapter 5! Although, I read your story for the review swap, I'm going to continue reading it now. Keep up the good work!!!

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Hilers
HilersLv14

Reminds me of how mr krabs laughs

DaoistKappapride
DaoistKappaprideLv12

Ga ga ga, pathetic humans.

Ethan_Hunt_3723
Ethan_Hunt_3723Lv11

Ikr

Daku_Doragon
Daku_DoragonLv13

Before I knew it I was at 120, then I've been reading every day since.

Alex_Mace
Alex_MaceLv2

Mr. Kraaaaaaaaaabs

Mohamed_Keita_4462
Mohamed_Keita_4462Lv1

Pathetic human mortals !hah hah hah!

Gintoki_Sakata_8001
Gintoki_Sakata_8001Lv1

K...

Gintoki_Sakata_8001
Gintoki_Sakata_8001Lv1

K...

Mortenlor
MortenlorLv5

Ok

Mortenlor
MortenlorLv5

Delete this comment. Xp comment.

Mortenlor
MortenlorLv5

Delete this post. Xp post.

Mortenlor
MortenlorLv5

Delete this post. Xp posts.

Mortenlor
MortenlorLv5

Delete this post. Xp posts.

egg_man_9654
egg_man_9654Lv1

A

thumb
thumbLv12

The laugh is probably one of my fav things

moodycrowl
moodycrowlLv1

Can you please check my novel "Rise of Void Dragons"? It'll be good if you like it and vote for it as it's participating in WPC.

Levi_Stephens_4962
Levi_Stephens_4962Lv11

nice

meraj_panahande
meraj_panahandeLv4

Gvh

meraj_panahande
meraj_panahandeLv4

Gvh

Gargor
GargorLv15

Can't beat a good old evil laugh Ga Ga Ga

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TheGoodAce
TheGoodAceLv11
GianP
GianPLv6

So I should leave a review since I had great hope for this novel, but was disappointed. I will list the problems: 1. Grammar ...simply, it sucks. I can understand that English is not the author's first language, but there are like 10 grammar mistakes each chapter. Please, use a proofreader it's really distracting from the story. There, they're and their are different. Please learn it. 2. Writing style The limites of the language hits hard in the style department. Since the author doesn't master the language, phrases are always linear and simple, concepts are expressed one at a time etc... This impacts the story since it seems the actors themselves are basic. 3. Plot holes, world building, etc I understand you don't want infodumps, and you also don't want to spoiler the story but... Seriously, try to give a reason for things happening, and not at chapter 1000 since people will not arrive there. Sen is acting like a true 5 yo even being a 1000 yo dragon. Is there a good reason? Maybe. Without explaining, or even an hypotesis, this is simply a plot hole. Whatever is inside the mind of the author doesn't count, only what is written. And don't go "but normal books can explain after 200 pages, why can't I?" Normal books are supposed to be perfect in language use, have been read and revisited multiple time by the author and the editor team, so the reader is somewhat assured that the story is somewhat decent. On webnovel the author publishes BEFORE finishing the story and often before checking for errors. Maybe in chapter 300 the author is like "oooops for plot reason I need this in chapter 30... Too bad it's already published. Let's hope nobody notices" while in a normal book you would go and modify chapter 30 to be coherent. Now, I have gone for a bit of a rant here. TL;DR: the story is simple but ha potential... Wasted because of poor English and oversimplification

El_Shadi
El_ShadiLv13
AshWritesThings
AshWritesThingsLv2
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