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AoalbjornLv34yr
2020-06-08 16:19

MC is naive and foolish for someone who lived for so long. MC is weak. He doesn't have Magic. Dude I m not some fan of swordmanship. Theres no way A MC doesn't have Magical power. bull****

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JKSMangaAuthor

he does have magic haha you only read the beginning chapters

JKSMangaAuthor

and does get extremely strong in latest chapters, he's literally at a magic academy right now in latest chapters

JKSMangaAuthor

and does get extremely strong in latest chapters, he's literally at a magic academy right now in latest chapters

JKSMangaAuthor

and does get extremely strong in latest chapters, he's literally at a magic academy right now in latest chapters

AoalbjornLv3

He wasted 10 years doing nothing. very bad time skip. all those ten years of training just made him able to compete with a wild boar? I love weak to strong. But I hate when i know that MC can't use his cheat properly and efficiently.He trained for nearly his whole sixteen years of life but only got a little strong. where as after sixteen years he would progress in very fast speed. which is really unrealistic. why not go in steady pace! neither too slow in early childhood years nor too fast in later **** years. why must it be sometimes as slow as snails. and sometimes as fast as rabbit.

JKSManga:and does get extremely strong in latest chapters, he's literally at a magic academy right now in latest chapters
AoalbjornLv3

fast power progression in childhood years is more realistic than fast progression in ***** years. A child has less impurities in their body, helping them breakthrough in ranks in fastpace. A child has more adaption ability than an ***** making him able to learn anything. A child's brain and body keeps growing. So stretching them to the limit would improve their magic talent. this is psedo-science or mythical science. A fantasy book should rely on pseudo science. Then again you can make totally different law in your own book. Such as making fire cold and water hot. But they have to have half-logic behind them.

AoalbjornLv3

you should've said that he will have magic later in synopsis.

AoalbjornLv3

the censored word is A)D)U)L)T. webnovel is really censoring everything

Aoalbjorn:fast power progression in childhood years is more realistic than fast progression in ***** years. A child has less impurities in their body, helping them breakthrough in ranks in fastpace. A child has more adaption ability than an ***** making him able to learn anything. A child's brain and body keeps growing. So stretching them to the limit would improve their magic talent. this is psedo-science or mythical science. A fantasy book should rely on pseudo science. Then again you can make totally different law in your own book. Such as making fire cold and water hot. But they have to have half-logic behind them.
JKSMangaAuthor

sorry just read this, lol can't believe they censor that, but in the story its because spoiler, his powers are not linked to his body or anything like that but he unlocks his abilities and such through a system by completing tasks and eating other beasts crystals to power his body. When he finds out how to complete these tasks he unlocks more abilities magic etc.. along the way

Aoalbjorn:the censored word is A)D)U)L)T. webnovel is really censoring everything
AoalbjornLv3

pity that you din't give even a hint in prologue. though what you said is seemed spoiler. its an important information to be said in prologue instead of later in story. Prologue should have 20% spoiler in a book. Now that you say it, its an interesting ability to be able to get powerful by eating crystals. But the quest completing thing is not Realistic. System Can be realistic if the "quest " function is removed. Killing animals to become stronger can be realistic too. However there should be like- after killing others part of their soul would be devoured and be converted into energy and make MC stronger. Something like that.

JKSManga:sorry just read this, lol can't believe they censor that, but in the story its because spoiler, his powers are not linked to his body or anything like that but he unlocks his abilities and such through a system by completing tasks and eating other beasts crystals to power his body. When he finds out how to complete these tasks he unlocks more abilities magic etc.. along the way
AoalbjornLv3

It would be more fun if instead of just becoming stronger MC can gain the ability of other best by eating their crystals.

JKSManga:sorry just read this, lol can't believe they censor that, but in the story its because spoiler, his powers are not linked to his body or anything like that but he unlocks his abilities and such through a system by completing tasks and eating other beasts crystals to power his body. When he finds out how to complete these tasks he unlocks more abilities magic etc.. along the way
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