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Wallabalooza
WallabaloozaLv35yr
2020-01-06 09:01

Zero-effort story. Complete rubbish writing. No attempt at even properly formatting or making it readable after 95+ chapters of nonsense. Characters are incredibly unrealistic and their behavior makes no sense for anyone who's made the journey out of their parents' doorway. Story is only at the top of Fanfics list because of spam reviews and stones. A perfect example of how garbage can be elevated and presented as something worth caring about in a broken system like Webnovel's. Complete waste of time for everyone involved.

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EvilWolf
EvilWolfLv12

Ikr it feels like author-san is pulling **** outta his a$$/ dose not even know what hes writing about and when girls see him they fall for him instantly like yeah thats cool but that would never happen

PUERKO_Senpai
PUERKO_SenpaiLv4

Tienes razón hasta cierto punto, pero aún así es te ff es muy bueno

Fellbane
FellbaneLv11

Did we read the same story? I am not convinced you read what I read after seeing your review

Wallabalooza
WallabaloozaLv3

Are you really coming in here 11 months after my review to proudly show off your terrible standards? I checked a few chapters because of your comment and everything is still the same. Enjoy what you like, but accept reality: this is garbage, both formatting and content.

Fellbane:Did we read the same story? I am not convinced you read what I read after seeing your review
Fellbane
FellbaneLv11

Nah i just knew that based on your review i could get a rise out of you no matter how long it had been so thanks for giving me a chuckle. Also a little bit of advice, dont take harem collecting fanfics based on DxD seriously and expect them to be masterpieces

Wallabalooza:Are you really coming in here 11 months after my review to proudly show off your terrible standards? I checked a few chapters because of your comment and everything is still the same. Enjoy what you like, but accept reality: this is garbage, both formatting and content.
Wallabalooza
WallabaloozaLv3

guyz i was only pretending to be rétarded lulz!11!!1 No one's asking for a masterpiece, just for the basics to be in order so it's readable. You're a móron.

Fellbane:Nah i just knew that based on your review i could get a rise out of you no matter how long it had been so thanks for giving me a chuckle. Also a little bit of advice, dont take harem collecting fanfics based on DxD seriously and expect them to be masterpieces
SCP3812
SCP3812Lv3

very confusing

Wallabalooza:guyz i was only pretending to be rétarded lulz!11!!1 No one's asking for a masterpiece, just for the basics to be in order so it's readable. You're a móron.
Dreke_Garrett
Dreke_GarrettLv1

bruh

Fachi
FachiLv1

Yeah, I agree but it doesn't matter how long it was up, you put it there and it doesn't matter if someone comments a year later or 3 minutes.

Wallabalooza:Are you really coming in here 11 months after my review to proudly show off your terrible standards? I checked a few chapters because of your comment and everything is still the same. Enjoy what you like, but accept reality: this is garbage, both formatting and content.
Literopat
LiteropatLv2

In general, I agree. You can read only out of despair or boredom. I myself have read up to chapter 94, I can’t go on, such nonsense. Too much unnecessary drama and inappropriate theatricality. And too stretched out. What could be done in 10 chapters stretched out to almost a hundred chapters. A lot of unnecessary words, unnecessary dialogues, in one word - water. Lots and lots of water.

LightNeyer
LightNeyerLv1

I see, a fellow chad

OVERKILL
OVERKILLLv14

only read 9 chapter, not interesting for me , i can't connect to these character and story and MC

StarVenerable
StarVenerableLv3

Doesn't help that in the middle of the novel, a maturely and articulately crafted excerpt is put in from the reference that inspired the author. After that, the horrible writing and vocabulary is made apparent in full clarity. Despite this, I also respect, that despite horrible writing quality, the author actually completed what he set out to do, no matter how bad.

Subsy
SubsyLv12

Salt water :|

Literopat:In general, I agree. You can read only out of despair or boredom. I myself have read up to chapter 94, I can’t go on, such nonsense. Too much unnecessary drama and inappropriate theatricality. And too stretched out. What could be done in 10 chapters stretched out to almost a hundred chapters. A lot of unnecessary words, unnecessary dialogues, in one word - water. Lots and lots of water.
ChikinBorger
ChikinBorgerLv4

I mean, the synopsis being nearly illegible from how badly written it is kinda tipped me off.

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AsianLadyBoy
AsianLadyBoyLv13

I love this fanfic. For those of you guys that are hesitating because it has NTR in the description, don't. Like the author said the girls don't f*** the other guys, so it's not that bad. Think of this fanfic as an alternate reality/alternate universe. In the original they lived happily ever after, and in this one they just didn't. If you don't want to hate the original girls, then you should probably not read it because you will. The MC will rebuild his Harem with different women from different worlds. As he trains to get stronger and stronger. The only thing I don't like about the novel. Is when he goes to different worlds, it just takes too got dam long. I understand that the author is trying to build relationships with the future harem members. And like the author said, hes trying not to make it look like the MC is a Pokemon Master. That's just throwing poke balls at the women in capturing them. It's just that he's in a different world chapter after chapter after chapter. Overtime it just doesn't feel like a DxD fanfic anymore. As soon as he starts traveling to different worlds, he goes to one world after another and never really goes back. The author was doing a good job at throwing in dialogue of the DxD world. Like updating us on what was going on with in the DxD world with the MC's disappearance. But so far it seems like he's just hasn't done it since the past couple chapters, and it has sort of lost the DxD fanfic Vibe for me. For me personally I would love less erotic chapters like describing how they're having *** for a whole two chapters. And have less chapters of each World he's traveling to. And throw in more information on whats going on in the DxD world. Another thing is that I don't like that the other DxD characters know about what happened and they hate what the girls did to the MC. But they don't want to punish the girls because they don't want them to suffer, punish them a little bit. Like make the angle a fallen angle. That would have been great. But not much punishment has happened, which is BS in my book. But other than that I love it.

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