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The story's eye-catching and most of all, thrilling. The flow is not too slow, and also not too fast. Just the right speed for the readers to enjoy. It's slightly difficult to predict how the plot is going to be because there's only a few chapters, but I see that there's definitely some plots within plots, and with more plots. I'm looking forward for more updates. To improve the novel more, I think that adding commas in between the long and tricky sentences would be a good idea so that the readers could understand more.
The story is just starting, so it’s hard to predict how the plot will go and how detailed it could be. But I’d say that the punctuation and grammar does make me confused sometimes. If you need any help, I’ll try to point out some things. Although, don’t get discouraged ! We all start from somewhere, and I think you have a very good world build, which was my weakest point when I first starting writing. So keep up the good work author !
Overall pretty good. Writing quality was okay; punctuation could use a little work as well as capitalization. I would mainly use more commas to separate phrases. The author has created a vivid and interesting MC, and the story has a cool premise. Keep writing author! Looking forward to seeing you and the story grow!
I like this type of story with detectives, cases, and a spice of supernatural, so this story is right up my alley. The beginning is well written, and I have a good impression of the characters so far. The world background still hasn't been uncovered much, but I think it won't be bad so I'm giving it 5 stars in advance (I have high hopes for the author). The only thing that's bothering me is the writing quality. At most I can say it's average and it's good, but I think it's better to find an editor/proofreader or use a software to help fix some mistakes. That's all. In the end, I DO recommend this story because it will be a good read once it has more chapters.
Your concept piqued my interest! It's hard writing detective stories so I hope you keep it up! The plot is like any other investigation novels but it's clearly different since the overall vibe of the MC is very different compared to them. I mean, I can't review anything more since there was just one chapter but I hope you continue venturing in this genre :)) Something to watch out for is your lack of article usage. Sometimes it gets confusing which was which if you don't use articles. Also, some of your verbs would be better if you left them on present perfect tenses since it will sound better than present tense, or just use infinitives... or so that's what I think after seeing the whole picture of the first chapter. We authors have a lot of things to improve on phew~! All I know is that this book is going places! Do continue it since I want to read more of these ^ ^
Ahh....this one give me a true meaning of life...after graduating and all. the true battle is not at school, you will see the true meaning of life once you face out the out side world alone striving hard to reach where you want to be. I love this thank you for this, Keep it up I will look forward to this more.
This is my first time reading a story that starts with someone graduating from Harvard. I'm already impressed with Alastair for successfully making it through such a competitive place. But to him my amazement wouldn't even be worth noting cause he has got more important things to focus on and even a few skeletons in his closet. The story has just begun and there's already a lot of stuff that catches the readers interest. Also as someone who kind of isn't very good at dressing up for university related events, I can relate to his lack of care on this matter.