Review Detail of DaisukiDayoSenpai in For the Betterment of the World

Your concept piqued my interest! It's hard writing detective stories so I hope you keep it up! The plot is like any other investigation novels but it's clearly different since the overall vibe of the MC is very different compared to them. I mean, I can't review anything more since there was just one chapter but I hope you continue venturing in this genre :)) Something to watch out for is your lack of article usage. Sometimes it gets confusing which was which if you don't use articles. Also, some of your verbs would be better if you left them on present perfect tenses since it will sound better than present tense, or just use infinitives... or so that's what I think after seeing the whole picture of the first chapter. We authors have a lot of things to improve on phew~! All I know is that this book is going places! Do continue it since I want to read more of these ^ ^