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Ordinary_joe
Ordinary_joeLv12yr
2022-05-23 13:54

Interesting read and I love it so far. A S-I Obito as the main character is something that I always want to read and interested in. I hope it gets better and better [img=recommend]

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Fallen_Crown
Fallen_CrownAuthor

Thanks man I really appreciate it 🥰

0_0Tang_Sileima33
0_0Tang_Sileima33Lv3

what is si

0_0Tang_Sileima33
0_0Tang_Sileima33Lv3

oh self insert

PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

romance?

Aedan
AedanLv6

So far (100+) not yet, the only thing that have showed so far related to romance was Minato×Kushina ship and Rin having a crush on Kakashi and Obito

PsyLoRD:romance?
PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

Thanks, i was expecting Obito x Rin...

Aedan:So far (100+) not yet, the only thing that have showed so far related to romance was Minato×Kushina ship and Rin having a crush on Kakashi and Obito
Aedan
AedanLv6

Honestly in my opinion I really doubt it will be that ship for Obito tho, at least with everything so far

PsyLoRD:Thanks, i was expecting Obito x Rin...
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PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

Oh, okay... i was only gonna read for that, sad.

Aedan:Honestly in my opinion I really doubt it will be that ship for Obito tho, at least with everything so far
Aedan
AedanLv6

U should, it's the beast Naruto Fancfic that come out in like the past 3 months by a long shot The only other one that is in the same "realm" is 'Naruto: Uchiha Genjutsu Demon' and this one for me is still way better

PsyLoRD:Oh, okay... i was only gonna read for that, sad.
PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

Not really for me, the fact that it is a novel about Obito (one of my fav) and he is not with Rin botters me, but thanks for the recommendation.

Aedan:U should, it's the beast Naruto Fancfic that come out in like the past 3 months by a long shot The only other one that is in the same "realm" is 'Naruto: Uchiha Genjutsu Demon' and this one for me is still way better
_ZypHer_
_ZypHer_Lv12

so who's the fmc??

PsyLoRD:Not really for me, the fact that it is a novel about Obito (one of my fav) and he is not with Rin botters me, but thanks for the recommendation.
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PsyLoRD
PsyLoRDLv5

idk, i also want to know.

_ZypHer_:so who's the fmc??
OshinoAi
OshinoAiLv4

I want to know too!

Aedan
AedanLv6

No clue so far xD Spoiler Alert . . . . . . . . . . Pakura just got saved by Elder Bat so maybe her?

_ZypHer_:so who's the fmc??
Aedan
AedanLv6

No clue so far xD Spoiler Alert . . . . . . . . . . Pakura just got saved by Elder Bat so maybe her?

PsyLoRD:idk, i also want to know.
Aedan
AedanLv6

No clue so far xD Spoiler Alert . . . . . . . . . . Pakura just got saved by Elder Bat so maybe her?

OshinoAi:I want to know too!
Thelemonjuice
ThelemonjuiceLv4

What happen? It got deleted

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Anas_Nazim
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So yeah, I have been reading your story from basically the start. And I like what you did with it. The first few chapters (around 20 to 25) weren’t the best. It was good, as you explained about the world building, the different political factions that the MC needs to look out for, the introduction of other characters (That are not cardboard cut outs, and have their own lives and problems.), explaining why he thinks he could start training later (cause of still feeling that Naruto world works like the real world, of course, we won’t see five-year-old training themselves in the gym.) The later chapters, even the recent ones are just gold. Obito changes quite a lot after the Hospital Incident… he doesn’t want to help people at first… as he wants to survive, but then he looks at all the things that they did for him. And gets grips with the situation and goes for it. Sure he had help for the goat Kagami. I like the character development. How he sees his own flaws in thinking. I really like how you made a believable character. One who does mistakes and learns from them. It was great. And then later on, (after awakening his Sharingan) how people mainly the village and Uchiha clan start treating him differently. How clans that aren’t Uchiha are also expanded on. And I also like what you are doing with the Rokushiki techniques. Not just learning it by yourself, as you are making Might Duy and Guy rework the technique. (Of course, One Piece techniques shouldn't work perfectly right off the bat in the Naruto world, things should be different. And a good fighter can rework it. And I like the concept) All in all a great story. The grammar needs a bit of work. But I can see you fixing things here and there. As a writer myself, I kinda know how it’s hard to fix grammar issues when you are not a native speaker. Anyway, I will like the story to be a non-harm. But you can add two or even three wifus, I don’t think that counts as being in the haram category. But meh… your choice.

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