Interesting read and I love it so far. A S-I Obito as the main character is something that I always want to read and interested in. I hope it gets better and better [img=recommend]

So yeah, I have been reading your story from basically the start. And I like what you did with it. The first few chapters (around 20 to 25) weren’t the best. It was good, as you explained about the world building, the different political factions that the MC needs to look out for, the introduction of other characters (That are not cardboard cut outs, and have their own lives and problems.), explaining why he thinks he could start training later (cause of still feeling that Naruto world works like the real world, of course, we won’t see five-year-old training themselves in the gym.) The later chapters, even the recent ones are just gold. Obito changes quite a lot after the Hospital Incident… he doesn’t want to help people at first… as he wants to survive, but then he looks at all the things that they did for him. And gets grips with the situation and goes for it. Sure he had help for the goat Kagami. I like the character development. How he sees his own flaws in thinking. I really like how you made a believable character. One who does mistakes and learns from them. It was great. And then later on, (after awakening his Sharingan) how people mainly the village and Uchiha clan start treating him differently. How clans that aren’t Uchiha are also expanded on. And I also like what you are doing with the Rokushiki techniques. Not just learning it by yourself, as you are making Might Duy and Guy rework the technique. (Of course, One Piece techniques shouldn't work perfectly right off the bat in the Naruto world, things should be different. And a good fighter can rework it. And I like the concept) All in all a great story. The grammar needs a bit of work. But I can see you fixing things here and there. As a writer myself, I kinda know how it’s hard to fix grammar issues when you are not a native speaker. Anyway, I will like the story to be a non-harm. But you can add two or even three wifus, I don’t think that counts as being in the haram category. But meh… your choice.

It's filler. At least the first 30 chapters or so. Author says they want to set up a few things but it is just repeating the same few things over and over again. Nothing happens. Nothing is set up. Well, a few things are set up, but it could have been done in like 10 chapters instead of 30. So, most of the fanfic is filler. at least in the beginning. might edit the review if things change.

I'm giving your fanfic 5 stars just 'cause you said "NO ALIENS" i f*king hate it when some author add aliens, new clans and they really add some new kind of dojutsu?! they seriously gets annoying as no author bothers explaining too much about the new types of powers they add to AU and How the heck are we readers supposed to know how those powers work i hope that it will be a good one...

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Good story. Don't see that many grammer mistakes. A slow paced story, with MC who seems real. It's a bit of slow, but the new chapters had good actions. And I already love Kagami's character, a laid back my type of guy. Gives me Nara vibes. And who's Kunia? A swordswoman? lol, but yeah... she's also good character. Best of all is Grandma Mai, a grandma that's worried about his grandson. So yeah, looking forward to the story.

The story is good. Once you get past chapter 30 the monologues drop considerably so if that's annoying you then just power through. While the sentence structure is fine the author has a habit of butchering words/names or just using completely wrong words throughout the story. So you'll have to decide if that's something you want to deal with.

im dropping at chapter 24. for naruto fanfic, the pace of the story just ain't for me (more slice of life rather than action) another thing is monologue is just to much (imbalance for how little the interaction). anything else is good -4.8 rating cus NO ALIENS

Man, I love this story. The way it's see the world like animated and it's help me imagine action scene in animation in my mind. 🍥🍥🍥🎊🎊🎊