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bringer_of_Dusk
bringer_of_DuskLv22yr
2022-05-23 22:44

I'm giving your fanfic 5 stars just 'cause you said "NO ALIENS" i f*king hate it when some author add aliens, new clans and they really add some new kind of dojutsu?! they seriously gets annoying as no author bothers explaining too much about the new types of powers they add to AU and How the heck are we readers supposed to know how those powers work i hope that it will be a good one...

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Madara_Otsutsuki_
Madara_Otsutsuki_Lv4

you seems misunderstood something, he means by "no alien" is that no Otsutsuki clan itself! i don't even know if I'm going to continue reading this, i just hope it's still good even without the main villains 😑

DarkKnight32
DarkKnight32Lv6

like they dont exist at all but mc is a uchiha and they are decended from them? does this also mean no six path or rinnegan

Madara_Otsutsuki_:you seems misunderstood something, he means by "no alien" is that no Otsutsuki clan itself! i don't even know if I'm going to continue reading this, i just hope it's still good even without the main villains 😑
Madara_Otsutsuki_
Madara_Otsutsuki_Lv4

yes

DarkKnight32:like they dont exist at all but mc is a uchiha and they are decended from them? does this also mean no six path or rinnegan
TheViciousVillain
TheViciousVillainLv2

he said that there would be no otsutuki clan but kaguya would still be there, so there is rinnegan and six path stuff too

SucktiferDSucky
SucktiferDSuckyLv2

he said he will explain later in the story like in chapters 200-300 maybe 400 we never know

DarkKnight32:like they dont exist at all but mc is a uchiha and they are decended from them? does this also mean no six path or rinnegan
Raptor2244
Raptor2244Lv13

Idk man from what I remember of naruto, the otstutsuki only existed to give Boruto an enemy in the Boruto anime. They came out of nowhere at the very end of the series.

Madara_Otsutsuki_:you seems misunderstood something, he means by "no alien" is that no Otsutsuki clan itself! i don't even know if I'm going to continue reading this, i just hope it's still good even without the main villains 😑
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Anas_Nazim
Anas_NazimLv4

So yeah, I have been reading your story from basically the start. And I like what you did with it. The first few chapters (around 20 to 25) weren’t the best. It was good, as you explained about the world building, the different political factions that the MC needs to look out for, the introduction of other characters (That are not cardboard cut outs, and have their own lives and problems.), explaining why he thinks he could start training later (cause of still feeling that Naruto world works like the real world, of course, we won’t see five-year-old training themselves in the gym.) The later chapters, even the recent ones are just gold. Obito changes quite a lot after the Hospital Incident… he doesn’t want to help people at first… as he wants to survive, but then he looks at all the things that they did for him. And gets grips with the situation and goes for it. Sure he had help for the goat Kagami. I like the character development. How he sees his own flaws in thinking. I really like how you made a believable character. One who does mistakes and learns from them. It was great. And then later on, (after awakening his Sharingan) how people mainly the village and Uchiha clan start treating him differently. How clans that aren’t Uchiha are also expanded on. And I also like what you are doing with the Rokushiki techniques. Not just learning it by yourself, as you are making Might Duy and Guy rework the technique. (Of course, One Piece techniques shouldn't work perfectly right off the bat in the Naruto world, things should be different. And a good fighter can rework it. And I like the concept) All in all a great story. The grammar needs a bit of work. But I can see you fixing things here and there. As a writer myself, I kinda know how it’s hard to fix grammar issues when you are not a native speaker. Anyway, I will like the story to be a non-harm. But you can add two or even three wifus, I don’t think that counts as being in the haram category. But meh… your choice.

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