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Mr_parsaLv44yr
2020-05-02 14:18

This novel has a pretty interesting story so I gave it a read. After reading 70 chapters, this is what I have to say. Keep in mind that this is my personal opinion and some of you may not agree with my point. I can tell that the author is writing what comes to his mind and isn't trying to write something perfect. Although this kind of writing is the most easy and the most fun, it will make some loopholes in the story. And those are the exact things that made me drop it. The characters are pretty good and the dialogues aren't bad. But I felt a lot of small problems that bothered me and that made me drop it. For starters, the MC doesn't feel like an old dragon at all. We weren't given much information about the time that he was a dragon anyway. But still, doesn't act mature at all. Take the hole dragon story away and just say that he was an elf child that lost his hole family to humans and it will still make perfect sense for the most of the story. The point of the story is that he was an old dragon that lost all his friends and family to the humans and fought with them and finally got killed by them. But he just feels like the demon lord loli from some comedy anime if you get what I'm meaning. Of course this gets much better as it goes further so, that's not a big problem. But I have to say, there will be a lot of place that you might think "wait, why didn't he just do this?" or "Wasn't he like this? Then why did he do that?" Or something similar. And one of the things that annoyed me was the so called 'beast form' of his. I think it was a very impractical and stupid idea that I hoped would end after learning Ki and martial arts, but it didn't. If you are like me and things like these annoy you, then this isn't for you. But if you don't care, then this is a pretty good read.

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So I should leave a review since I had great hope for this novel, but was disappointed. I will list the problems: 1. Grammar ...simply, it sucks. I can understand that English is not the author's first language, but there are like 10 grammar mistakes each chapter. Please, use a proofreader it's really distracting from the story. There, they're and their are different. Please learn it. 2. Writing style The limites of the language hits hard in the style department. Since the author doesn't master the language, phrases are always linear and simple, concepts are expressed one at a time etc... This impacts the story since it seems the actors themselves are basic. 3. Plot holes, world building, etc I understand you don't want infodumps, and you also don't want to spoiler the story but... Seriously, try to give a reason for things happening, and not at chapter 1000 since people will not arrive there. Sen is acting like a true 5 yo even being a 1000 yo dragon. Is there a good reason? Maybe. Without explaining, or even an hypotesis, this is simply a plot hole. Whatever is inside the mind of the author doesn't count, only what is written. And don't go "but normal books can explain after 200 pages, why can't I?" Normal books are supposed to be perfect in language use, have been read and revisited multiple time by the author and the editor team, so the reader is somewhat assured that the story is somewhat decent. On webnovel the author publishes BEFORE finishing the story and often before checking for errors. Maybe in chapter 300 the author is like "oooops for plot reason I need this in chapter 30... Too bad it's already published. Let's hope nobody notices" while in a normal book you would go and modify chapter 30 to be coherent. Now, I have gone for a bit of a rant here. TL;DR: the story is simple but ha potential... Wasted because of poor English and oversimplification

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