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AnWanAuthor6yr
2019-02-02 18:29

I've already got an Editor and updated the chapters. ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿจ๐Ÿฐ๐Ÿฎ๐Ÿฐ๐Ÿพ๐Ÿฐ๐Ÿฎ๐Ÿฐ๐Ÿก๐Ÿพ๐Ÿฐ๐Ÿญ๐Ÿก๐Ÿฉ๐Ÿก๐Ÿซ๐Ÿพ๐Ÿซ๐Ÿจ๐Ÿซ๐Ÿฎ๐Ÿซ๐Ÿพ๐Ÿซ๐Ÿบ๐Ÿด๐Ÿบ๐Ÿณ๐Ÿบ๐Ÿ–๐Ÿ๐ŸŒ๐Ÿž๐Ÿ–๐Ÿ”๐Ÿ๐Ÿ–๐Ÿ—บ๐Ÿ–๐Ÿš๐Ÿ–๐Ÿ๐Ÿ–๐Ÿ๐ŸŒ๐Ÿ—บ๐ŸŒŽ๐Ÿš๐Ÿฆ๐Ÿข๐Ÿจ๐Ÿฃ๐Ÿ—ผ๐Ÿซ๐Ÿจ๐Ÿซ๐ŸŒ‰๐ŸŽ ๐ŸŒ‰๐ŸŽ ๐ŸŒ‰๐ŸŽ ๐ŸŒ‰๐ŸŽ ๐ŸŒ‰๐ŸŽ ๐ŸŽช๐ŸšŒ๐Ÿš๐ŸšŒ๐Ÿš๐Ÿš“๐Ÿš๐ŸšŒ๐Ÿš๐Ÿš‡๐Ÿš๐ŸšŒ๐Ÿš๐Ÿš๐Ÿšˆ๐Ÿš๐Ÿšˆ๐Ÿš๐Ÿšˆ๐Ÿš๐Ÿš‡๐Ÿš๐Ÿšˆโ›ฝ๐Ÿššโ›ฝ๐Ÿšจโ›ฝ๐Ÿšš๐Ÿšคโ›ฝ๐Ÿšจ๐Ÿšจโ›ฝ๐Ÿšš

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WolfytopiaLv6

thanks! Looks like I need to wait for a week before reading it

EddictedLv5

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NewNEETLv5

Story with first perspective alway

AnAxeToGrindLv5

If your consider those chapters to be edited then your understanding of english is even worse than i thought.

AnWanAuthor

Some are edited while some are not

AnAxeToGrind:If your consider those chapters to be edited then your understanding of english is even worse than i thought.
HuoHaiGegeLv10

Bro, we'll edit the previous chapters for you. For free. If you want. It's just that the unedited chapters are spoiling the whole thing.

AnWan:Some are edited while some are not
AnWanAuthor

Ok

HuoHaiGege:Bro, we'll edit the previous chapters for you. For free. If you want. It's just that the unedited chapters are spoiling the whole thing.
MysteryOriginalLv11

Lmao ikr exactly what i was thinking

AnAxeToGrind:If your consider those chapters to be edited then your understanding of english is even worse than i thought.
CrycksLv14

Definitely need to re edit the 40 first chapters ... i saw a comment telling that it get better at 36... but for now i cant read farther than chapter 4. The story looks good and there is a lot of work, its sad to loose so many reader because of just some chapters

WatermelonBanditLv5

Keep to your word, start the editing process and we shall see at the bottom of the chapters you have fixed your name and a special shoutout, I look forward to seeing it.

HuoHaiGege:Bro, we'll edit the previous chapters for you. For free. If you want. It's just that the unedited chapters are spoiling the whole thing.
HuoHaiGegeLv10

I'll start from next week. In middle of finals right now๐Ÿ˜… As soon as I'm done with em, I'll start editing em and posting in comments section. Ciao

WatermelonBandit:Keep to your word, start the editing process and we shall see at the bottom of the chapters you have fixed your name and a special shoutout, I look forward to seeing it.
NibleeLv12

I'm enjoying the Story and the Content. I will admit I am struggling a great deal with what I think is grammar. Here is a tip I got in school have your work read out loud (there are app you can use to have things read to you) to you if it dosen't sound like something some one is talking it Probably needs more editing.

chamellystaLv10

,๐Ÿ˜‚

noobageddon_Lv14

hi is this an op mc?

noobageddon_Lv14

hi is this an op mc?

LastearLv15

I'm afraid I need to agree with some of the other statements. Please find a different editor and get them to go over the first several chapters. I had to stop reading after the third time a 'he' pronoun was used for a 'she'

AnWanAuthor

Thank you for your comment. Would you mind telling me which chapters you have found these mistakes in?

Lastear:I'm afraid I need to agree with some of the other statements. Please find a different editor and get them to go over the first several chapters. I had to stop reading after the third time a 'he' pronoun was used for a 'she'
LastearLv15

Actually, I might have gotten you mixed up with someone else regarding pronouns, but as for which chapter needs edited for this particular work, all of them. Add me on discord Lastear#3196, and then send me, say, chapter 88. I'll proofread it for you and point out the most common mistakes and explain them so you can apply it to other chapters.

AnWan:Thank you for your comment. Would you mind telling me which chapters you have found these mistakes in?
LastearLv15

Or you can forward it to your editor to fix.

Lastear:Actually, I might have gotten you mixed up with someone else regarding pronouns, but as for which chapter needs edited for this particular work, all of them. Add me on discord Lastear#3196, and then send me, say, chapter 88. I'll proofread it for you and point out the most common mistakes and explain them so you can apply it to other chapters.
Scholar_AssassinLv5

Bro it is already a premium novel, you should find a good Editor soon... Even the edited ones are not that good, if you need a good one contact me..

AnWan:Some are edited while some are not
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AzureWolfLv5

This story has interesting concepts but, the grammar is really atrocious. There are other stories on this site that are even worse then this, however, I'm not going to be nice because of this. I understand that some people keep saying in the comments that the writing quality gets better at ch 18 or around ch 32. In the end I could not drag my self across the floor to reach such chapters. One of the main points I don't understand about the author is why if he has an editor already, just ask him to redo all your previous chapters. The author is dragging away potential readers due to not editing his starting chapters. Point 2. I feel like I'm reading a children's book due to all the sound effects. These sound effects take away from a story unless a child is reading them because most children don't know what most stuff sound like. That is why most children's books have the cow goes "moo" or the sheep goes "baa". It gives kids a 3 in 1 training. Training their vocals, reading comprehension and their understanding of what stuff sounds like. Point 2b. As an ***** with the understanding of the English language and sounds. I feel offended when I see a written sound effect. I know what a sword sound makes when it hits something with different densities. It just irks me because its like the author is saying "This is what it sound like to me and you should believe me." No... I don't believe sirens go "siren...siren" or swords go "slice" like their talking. Even the sound effects are off putting. Point 3: The cultivation is strange. I understand that being Original in concept is what authors should do. However, the cultivation with the steam punk vib (engine) and cultivation just don't mix well. I like the part about the soul-bonding, but, it could have been better executed. Point 4: The animals are puppets as far as I can tell. The start of the novel it shows the personality of the creatures and that was a good start, however, right as the soul binding was completed It was like the creatures them selves don't have their own thoughts anymore. It is more along the line as the people turn them into puppets then project their emotions into their soul-bonded puppet to be more like the host. Point 5: The MC does not have a solid goal. Yes, he wants to be in that championship thing but that does not make him insane about doing the most efficient cultivation training which most people fail at. The reason I do not believe this is due to the fact he lived a very normal life with his family. No sane person would tarnish such a thing. If the story showed he had a desire to be recognized due to certain bad pasts then I would believe it more. There are other points I could point out. But I don't know if the author can even read English so adding anymore would just be a waste of time for me and the reader of this wall of text.

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