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Seth_ToneyLv154yr
2020-08-01 03:40

The story is decent, pokemon themed concept but the author hates the MC something fierce, kid made a down right stupid choice that from the world perspective makes NO sense. MC also chooses 'the road less traveled' to help fix his obviously bad choice in starting partners this would have been fine if the author had left the MC average or above somewhere else but NO. Mana capacity, refining, everything that defines this worlds cultivation cycle literally laughs at the kid. Yes he has exceptional willpower and discipline but gets him no better than last place. As the story progresses you realize that many of the decisions he makes confuse people, because from their worlds perspective it makes no fucking sense, why would you give up a MUCH better monster, try to overcome their peak by cultivating yourself so that Ashlyn can benefit from your symbiotic relationship, and deliberately hamstring yourself every chance you get? Next the romance tag, who the HELL lied to you and told you ANY part of your story was romantic or even implied the potential for romance when every female character either makes a smarter life choice and thus gets better opportunities, realizes this man has no life ahead of him since both he and his partner have no talent, or hate him for the very choices he makes? Okay so the premise is good, I love the life partners, the power structure, the female characters and other social interactions, the detailed and refined world setting, even the struggle the MC faces. But the impossible circumstance, tue severe lack of power progression, the lack of romantic progress, and the POS excuse for editing... I can understand that the writers first or even second or third language wasn't English but the editor has NO excuse for this horrendous attempt at a translation. Even after they took over it wasnt a substantial improvement as depicted by the difference between the first 10 chapters and the 11+, I personally took the time out to 'edit' the chapters and Google translate, my dog, and grammar lyrics ALL did a better job... constant changes in tense, consistent changes in gender, little or NO punctuation, inability to maintain proper names, completely mistranslating entire sentences, I mean come on really? Yes I've read worse translated novels on this site however my review of them was just as bad, if not worse, than this one is. The regular mistakes every once in a while like Solo Leveling are acceptable, but we now pay for this novel which means we expect better quality, congrats you finally get paid for your writing, oh **** now they expect better quality ๐Ÿ‘Œ your failing friend. All-in-all the only reason this novel is even in the top 100 is because of the pokemon ripoff, the only reason its in the top 50 is because of its stable story progression, and the only reason I kept reading was its potential. From me? 2.6 at best ~

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BeziikLv14

Forgot to mention another really annoying thing. EVERY SINGLE TIME the MC sees someone or something that did better life choices than him WILL lament and praise how that path is so much better but he stubbornly continues on his own repeatedly saying that he doesn't regret his life choices ... like seriously? Can you at least make the MC sto ranting every single fking time for stuff that HE HIMSELF choose ...

Zennon725Lv14

You are 100% correct

WanderingimmortalLv12

the mc is not tired of overthinking even the most generic may know this after 200 chapters๐Ÿ˜‚

Beziik:Forgot to mention another really annoying thing. EVERY SINGLE TIME the MC sees someone or something that did better life choices than him WILL lament and praise how that path is so much better but he stubbornly continues on his own repeatedly saying that he doesn't regret his life choices ... like seriously? Can you at least make the MC sto ranting every single fking time for stuff that HE HIMSELF choose ...
ImmortallordLv12

Try out the novel. Eradawn: Mythos Unveiled. This is really a great and awesome novel. Truly one of a kind that I believe is unfair for others nit to see. I hope we can all support this novel. You will all love it without a doubt, just give it a chance. I really love this novel, and I think the author has more greater things installed for us. Thanks a lot.

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AzureWolfLv5

This story has interesting concepts but, the grammar is really atrocious. There are other stories on this site that are even worse then this, however, I'm not going to be nice because of this. I understand that some people keep saying in the comments that the writing quality gets better at ch 18 or around ch 32. In the end I could not drag my self across the floor to reach such chapters. One of the main points I don't understand about the author is why if he has an editor already, just ask him to redo all your previous chapters. The author is dragging away potential readers due to not editing his starting chapters. Point 2. I feel like I'm reading a children's book due to all the sound effects. These sound effects take away from a story unless a child is reading them because most children don't know what most stuff sound like. That is why most children's books have the cow goes "moo" or the sheep goes "baa". It gives kids a 3 in 1 training. Training their vocals, reading comprehension and their understanding of what stuff sounds like. Point 2b. As an ***** with the understanding of the English language and sounds. I feel offended when I see a written sound effect. I know what a sword sound makes when it hits something with different densities. It just irks me because its like the author is saying "This is what it sound like to me and you should believe me." No... I don't believe sirens go "siren...siren" or swords go "slice" like their talking. Even the sound effects are off putting. Point 3: The cultivation is strange. I understand that being Original in concept is what authors should do. However, the cultivation with the steam punk vib (engine) and cultivation just don't mix well. I like the part about the soul-bonding, but, it could have been better executed. Point 4: The animals are puppets as far as I can tell. The start of the novel it shows the personality of the creatures and that was a good start, however, right as the soul binding was completed It was like the creatures them selves don't have their own thoughts anymore. It is more along the line as the people turn them into puppets then project their emotions into their soul-bonded puppet to be more like the host. Point 5: The MC does not have a solid goal. Yes, he wants to be in that championship thing but that does not make him insane about doing the most efficient cultivation training which most people fail at. The reason I do not believe this is due to the fact he lived a very normal life with his family. No sane person would tarnish such a thing. If the story showed he had a desire to be recognized due to certain bad pasts then I would believe it more. There are other points I could point out. But I don't know if the author can even read English so adding anymore would just be a waste of time for me and the reader of this wall of text.

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