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2019-05-18 13:50

First of all, I really like the setup of the Story. I think its brilliantly done. One of the best of all original Novels I've read. SPOILERS starting here. My short summary of the main points: The MC grows up in a world where people are able to bond with monsters upon graduation from school to increase their own powers. Even though he was offered a monster with high potential due to his academic achievements, he chose one raised by his own family with less potential and weaker ability's as he did not want to join an Organisation. He starts to cultivate the "supreme combat exercise", strengthening his own body to overcome the lacking potential of his bonded monster while enduring the pain that comes together with using this technique. His monster gets stronger as he levels up the "supreme combat exercise" as they share a symbiotic relationship. He travels to the most dangerous city of the continent after graduation to quicken up his cultivation to achieve his goal, which is to participate in a tournament five years later. From that point on until the most recent chapters he starts to regularly hunt monsters to increase his strength and accumulate wealth, with some twists happening while hunting those monsters. The bonded monster of the MC, while weak, turns out to possess the ability to identify natural treasures while adventuring, giving hope that those treasures can be used to power them up. There are a few points stopping me from enjoying the novel fully. The grammar is really bad. Even though there is a proofreader starting from chapter 36 (not sure which chapter it was exactly), the quality of the story does not go up substantially. The storyline is nicely thought through but the character growth in terms of power is lacking. When it seems that MC grew substantially, all the other characters that he is currently interacting with seem to have grown even more, resulting in a seemingly weak MC that is depending on the protection of the other characters. The novel has gone premium yesterday which I can completely understand because it is a great story and good performance should be rewarded. But the quality of writing needs to go up steeply to justify fee-based chapters. For those that read up until here: All in all a great story with potential but held back by the bad grammar, nonetheless worth reading.

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YarcazzLv14

Thanks for the in depth review

daoist_lazLv10

forgot to add that MC has a woman'o'culture (ツ) as his bestie.. Would there be an arc on it or it'll end as a forgotten plot ? Been on the path of monster integration for awhile n I'm quite hooked, need to know if it'll be worth it to spend some coins on... spoilers accepted too my gratitudes fellow daoists☺️

ChrisakoLv4

hope that the grammar will improve. i noticed that chapters are becoming shorter. i love the plot but kindly remove the cooking and eating part in every chapter. its frustrating, honestly. keep it up and good job

ReverseMangaBrozLv1

Of course the MC will be weaker than his friends. Considering, the fact that he chosed a monster with low talent/potential. Plus, he’s not in any organization. So, he cant get the materails or money he needs in his disposal. He has to works hard to get it: Nearly dying because of it. (But plot armor), Asking his friends or just never getting it. The only reason he can boost his potential by tons is the poses he uses and his engine. Thats still not enough so the story has to go on by him being stronger. How do you do that? By making the MC do their daily task and by unfortunate Circumstances, find a treasure/skill thats powerful but with some risk. Either fighting a powerful moster or human. Meanwhile, his friends will train with the materails, treasures, training scriptures, and Etc. Provided by their safe organization with someone strong backing them. Of course, its not free. In which they have to do missions. albeit, with some risk. They might not gain as much battle exprience as the MC but they’re much powerful than him. Which, can be use as their advantage. Of course, the MC might find a way to defeat them by a “risky move” that “might cost his life” again, plot armor. Would I recommend you guys to read it? Read around 30ish chapters and drop it if you don’t like it.

ReverseMangaBrozLv1

Also, In many novels the MC is backed by someone strong in which the MC is allowed to do more things. So, having his friends protect him isnt a bad thing. But he needs to know that he can’t rely on one person for every conflict (which he does sometimes) in other novels the MC trains for some years and becomes stronger than their gurdian/protecter. In which the MC repays them in one way. I know that in the future the MC will become stronger than his friends (in some bizarre way) and probably benifit them.

ReverseMangaBroz:Of course the MC will be weaker than his friends. Considering, the fact that he chosed a monster with low talent/potential. Plus, he’s not in any organization. So, he cant get the materails or money he needs in his disposal. He has to works hard to get it: Nearly dying because of it. (But plot armor), Asking his friends or just never getting it. The only reason he can boost his potential by tons is the poses he uses and his engine. Thats still not enough so the story has to go on by him being stronger. How do you do that? By making the MC do their daily task and by unfortunate Circumstances, find a treasure/skill thats powerful but with some risk. Either fighting a powerful moster or human. Meanwhile, his friends will train with the materails, treasures, training scriptures, and Etc. Provided by their safe organization with someone strong backing them. Of course, its not free. In which they have to do missions. albeit, with some risk. They might not gain as much battle exprience as the MC but they’re much powerful than him. Which, can be use as their advantage. Of course, the MC might find a way to defeat them by a “risky move” that “might cost his life” again, plot armor. Would I recommend you guys to read it? Read around 30ish chapters and drop it if you don’t like it.
BaulpenLv15

does he get other monsters or is it only ashlyn? i am torn between reading this book further mostly due to the translation XD

ImmortallordLv12

Try out the novel. Eradawn: Mythos Unveiled. This is really a great and awesome novel. Truly one of a kind that I believe is unfair for others nit to see. I hope we can all support this novel. You will all love it without a doubt, just give it a chance. I really love this novel, and I think the author has more greater things installed for us. Thanks a lot.

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AzureWolfLv5

This story has interesting concepts but, the grammar is really atrocious. There are other stories on this site that are even worse then this, however, I'm not going to be nice because of this. I understand that some people keep saying in the comments that the writing quality gets better at ch 18 or around ch 32. In the end I could not drag my self across the floor to reach such chapters. One of the main points I don't understand about the author is why if he has an editor already, just ask him to redo all your previous chapters. The author is dragging away potential readers due to not editing his starting chapters. Point 2. I feel like I'm reading a children's book due to all the sound effects. These sound effects take away from a story unless a child is reading them because most children don't know what most stuff sound like. That is why most children's books have the cow goes "moo" or the sheep goes "baa". It gives kids a 3 in 1 training. Training their vocals, reading comprehension and their understanding of what stuff sounds like. Point 2b. As an ***** with the understanding of the English language and sounds. I feel offended when I see a written sound effect. I know what a sword sound makes when it hits something with different densities. It just irks me because its like the author is saying "This is what it sound like to me and you should believe me." No... I don't believe sirens go "siren...siren" or swords go "slice" like their talking. Even the sound effects are off putting. Point 3: The cultivation is strange. I understand that being Original in concept is what authors should do. However, the cultivation with the steam punk vib (engine) and cultivation just don't mix well. I like the part about the soul-bonding, but, it could have been better executed. Point 4: The animals are puppets as far as I can tell. The start of the novel it shows the personality of the creatures and that was a good start, however, right as the soul binding was completed It was like the creatures them selves don't have their own thoughts anymore. It is more along the line as the people turn them into puppets then project their emotions into their soul-bonded puppet to be more like the host. Point 5: The MC does not have a solid goal. Yes, he wants to be in that championship thing but that does not make him insane about doing the most efficient cultivation training which most people fail at. The reason I do not believe this is due to the fact he lived a very normal life with his family. No sane person would tarnish such a thing. If the story showed he had a desire to be recognized due to certain bad pasts then I would believe it more. There are other points I could point out. But I don't know if the author can even read English so adding anymore would just be a waste of time for me and the reader of this wall of text.

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