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KoFu_Lv66yr
2018-06-22 17:58

Chapter 11. Don't worry guys the MC will not be OP. Chapter 12. "I basically don't lack talent in anyway, I can master everything if I put enough time to it. I can master archery, carry a huge hammer, do any kind of magic and also activate my War Cry that only 2 people on the game could use." If that's not OP I don't know what is it. Your aim is to make him a master of all trades? Also the first 5 chapters could be just 1 chapter prologue and could display the same kind of information of his past life. Also, if you are a hard core skyrim player where are the BUG EXPLOITS?? I would try to increse my manipulation level casting on a dead body (I think it was like that, I played many years ago). They aren't even mentioned. A shame. 3, 5 Stars.

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El_DonAuthor

Seriously now, if you read novels like Death Mage and 'my entire class was summoned to another except me' you will see how op truly feels. I want to make a genius protagonist who can make use of everything in a world too immersive that Todd Howard doesn't make it just works. And no BUG EXPLOITS. This is a story not bound to the game rules. the MC doesn't rely on common sense either and he have to get powerful before the actual game events start. That's all there is to it now Also about the first 5 chapters, the ideas were mostly rough and that's my first time writing these many words in one thing so I can be considered a beginner. Plus this is the MC, if he can't kick ass then who can?

KoFu_Lv6

Making him getting all skills and attacks possibles is not a requisite to be able to kick ass. You could make him a hammer welding mage and that would be stretching of reasonable possible if he is talented enough. Basically he could became a strong paladin. But you choose him to level all the skills balanced. Is there anything he couldn't do? If there isn't why is the necessity of the companions? His blacksmith friend is the only necessity enough because he doesn't LIKE to be a blacksmith. He doesn't see a worthy profession, not like enchanter. And the cat girl? Harem. The rest doesn't even matter. I see this master of all thing like an indecision of path. Like they told him before, he doesn't have a concrete goal set. Only to be strong enough to steal all the artifacts before the supposed player appears. My advice is to cap his growing skills at an average level to make him make a decision of the path to follow. A more solid goal could be cool, like founding a kingdom and introduce the modern world commodities (if they are not yet implemented by a weird mod) or ****** enough to avoid world calamities and became a hero. Also it would be a TERRIBLE idea to introduce firearms to this medieval society. If you don't belive me do a little research. Changes need to be gradually. Anyway, you are the author. But the non-stop grow of skills is making him a God and the only thing that stopping from that happening is the effort he makes. I just don't want you to fall on the cookie cutter op mc before even reaching a proper story development. Ps:You can use all the things on the world with his followers or allies. Or even enemies, he can learn from them. The MC is not required to do all the things to shine. And even that, he doesn't require to shine all the time. Is my pitch of salt, I hope you take my suggestion from the good side, this is a good novel but is being led to an generic end.

El_Don:Seriously now, if you read novels like Death Mage and 'my entire class was summoned to another except me' you will see how op truly feels. I want to make a genius protagonist who can make use of everything in a world too immersive that Todd Howard doesn't make it just works. And no BUG EXPLOITS. This is a story not bound to the game rules. the MC doesn't rely on common sense either and he have to get powerful before the actual game events start. That's all there is to it now Also about the first 5 chapters, the ideas were mostly rough and that's my first time writing these many words in one thing so I can be considered a beginner. Plus this is the MC, if he can't kick ass then who can?
Kaiser0000Lv6

He's destined for 3 prophecies, that's what's expected of him and when you compare him to alduin the world eater he's an ant right now. But he really should specialize in one weapon and have a good understanding of the rest. And for magic i really liked your mysticism idea :)

El_DonAuthor

I plan to make strong enemies though, He's a genius in magic yet his control is not that good resulting him not to be able to use Adept magic yet. The Hammer wielder has its use later. Followers will be included of course but I am not that good with romance, so I plan to make a painful experience at some point. And the no firearms don't worry.

KoFu_:Making him getting all skills and attacks possibles is not a requisite to be able to kick ass. You could make him a hammer welding mage and that would be stretching of reasonable possible if he is talented enough. Basically he could became a strong paladin. But you choose him to level all the skills balanced. Is there anything he couldn't do? If there isn't why is the necessity of the companions? His blacksmith friend is the only necessity enough because he doesn't LIKE to be a blacksmith. He doesn't see a worthy profession, not like enchanter. And the cat girl? Harem. The rest doesn't even matter. I see this master of all thing like an indecision of path. Like they told him before, he doesn't have a concrete goal set. Only to be strong enough to steal all the artifacts before the supposed player appears. My advice is to cap his growing skills at an average level to make him make a decision of the path to follow. A more solid goal could be cool, like founding a kingdom and introduce the modern world commodities (if they are not yet implemented by a weird mod) or ****** enough to avoid world calamities and became a hero. Also it would be a TERRIBLE idea to introduce firearms to this medieval society. If you don't belive me do a little research. Changes need to be gradually. Anyway, you are the author. But the non-stop grow of skills is making him a God and the only thing that stopping from that happening is the effort he makes. I just don't want you to fall on the cookie cutter op mc before even reaching a proper story development. Ps:You can use all the things on the world with his followers or allies. Or even enemies, he can learn from them. The MC is not required to do all the things to shine. And even that, he doesn't require to shine all the time. Is my pitch of salt, I hope you take my suggestion from the good side, this is a good novel but is being led to an generic end.
MatrixshadoLv5

from my understanding i think since he's in a real world and is not limited to classes like the game he should be an arcane warrior balanced between spells and martial arts with thuum as his specialty and one or two supporting jobs ( enchanter and alchemist) nothing more also he int op when it comes to spells he cant compare in level or technique with rusnig and the others he only has denser mana and a lager pool when it comes to armed combet he's slightly below or at most on par with argir and the others. he only seems op because he has a combination of skills and is very adaptive to combat he is not greater in any specialized field against his peers at the top except for his boxing/mixed martial arts remember all he is armed with is knowledge of future events and so on that doesn't mean he is op he still have to work from scratch to get there not because you know where legendary treauser is means you will get it and are op if you are too weak to get it and it guarded by a legendary foe it will forever not be yours remember he is training from scratch and has to learn everything like a normal person his accomplishments are his hardwork

MatrixshadoLv5

from my understanding i think since he's in a real world and is not limited to classes like the game he should be an arcane warrior balanced between spells and martial arts with thuum as his specialty and one or two supporting jobs ( enchanter and alchemist) nothing more also he int op when it comes to spells he cant compare in level or technique with rusnig and the others he only has denser mana and a lager pool when it comes to armed combet he's slightly below or at most on par with argir and the others. he only seems op because he has a combination of skills and is very adaptive to combat he is not greater in any specialized field against his peers at the top except for his boxing/mixed martial arts remember all he is armed with is knowledge of future events and so on that doesn't mean he is op he still have to work from scratch to get there not because you know where legendary treauser is means you will get it and are op if you are too weak to get it and it guarded by a legendary foe it will forever not be yours remember he is training from scratch and has to learn everything like a normal person his accomplishments are his hardwork great work by the way looking forward for the greatness of skyrim to be expressed in your work

El_Don:I plan to make strong enemies though, He's a genius in magic yet his control is not that good resulting him not to be able to use Adept magic yet. The Hammer wielder has its use later. Followers will be included of course but I am not that good with romance, so I plan to make a painful experience at some point. And the no firearms don't worry.
El_DonAuthor

What a great analysis, I finally know the feeling that there us someone who is really reading the novel and thinking about it in such a way. It feels so satisfying for a beginner author such as myself. and thank you for the review ^_^

Matrixshado:from my understanding i think since he's in a real world and is not limited to classes like the game he should be an arcane warrior balanced between spells and martial arts with thuum as his specialty and one or two supporting jobs ( enchanter and alchemist) nothing more also he int op when it comes to spells he cant compare in level or technique with rusnig and the others he only has denser mana and a lager pool when it comes to armed combet he's slightly below or at most on par with argir and the others. he only seems op because he has a combination of skills and is very adaptive to combat he is not greater in any specialized field against his peers at the top except for his boxing/mixed martial arts remember all he is armed with is knowledge of future events and so on that doesn't mean he is op he still have to work from scratch to get there not because you know where legendary treauser is means you will get it and are op if you are too weak to get it and it guarded by a legendary foe it will forever not be yours remember he is training from scratch and has to learn everything like a normal person his accomplishments are his hardwork great work by the way looking forward for the greatness of skyrim to be expressed in your work
MatrixshadoLv5

no problem just doing my duty as an avid reader of your work keep up the good work one of the reasons the top books are on top is because they have a significant amount of chapters compared to the other books along with good content which equals more materials to read and critique because there is a lot of readers who look at chapter count decide on if they read a book or not. so try to catch up with them andthe ranking will raise but do not sacrifice quality for update speed good work

El_Don:What a great analysis, I finally know the feeling that there us someone who is really reading the novel and thinking about it in such a way. It feels so satisfying for a beginner author such as myself. and thank you for the review ^_^
El_DonAuthor

Thank you.

Matrixshado:no problem just doing my duty as an avid reader of your work keep up the good work one of the reasons the top books are on top is because they have a significant amount of chapters compared to the other books along with good content which equals more materials to read and critique because there is a lot of readers who look at chapter count decide on if they read a book or not. so try to catch up with them andthe ranking will raise but do not sacrifice quality for update speed good work
Vampwalker709Lv4

What why would he not wanna learn all he can if he has the talent it is unrealistic for him to suddenly have caps on skills he is the god damned dragon born really tired of you readers who constantly want a struggle bust so you then try an force reality on a fantasy world the dragon born will always be op it is what the dragon born does.

KoFu_:Making him getting all skills and attacks possibles is not a requisite to be able to kick ass. You could make him a hammer welding mage and that would be stretching of reasonable possible if he is talented enough. Basically he could became a strong paladin. But you choose him to level all the skills balanced. Is there anything he couldn't do? If there isn't why is the necessity of the companions? His blacksmith friend is the only necessity enough because he doesn't LIKE to be a blacksmith. He doesn't see a worthy profession, not like enchanter. And the cat girl? Harem. The rest doesn't even matter. I see this master of all thing like an indecision of path. Like they told him before, he doesn't have a concrete goal set. Only to be strong enough to steal all the artifacts before the supposed player appears. My advice is to cap his growing skills at an average level to make him make a decision of the path to follow. A more solid goal could be cool, like founding a kingdom and introduce the modern world commodities (if they are not yet implemented by a weird mod) or ****** enough to avoid world calamities and became a hero. Also it would be a TERRIBLE idea to introduce firearms to this medieval society. If you don't belive me do a little research. Changes need to be gradually. Anyway, you are the author. But the non-stop grow of skills is making him a God and the only thing that stopping from that happening is the effort he makes. I just don't want you to fall on the cookie cutter op mc before even reaching a proper story development. Ps:You can use all the things on the world with his followers or allies. Or even enemies, he can learn from them. The MC is not required to do all the things to shine. And even that, he doesn't require to shine all the time. Is my pitch of salt, I hope you take my suggestion from the good side, this is a good novel but is being led to an generic end.
noobageddon_Lv14

So in the end did he get op? Cuz i kinda stop when i read that the author will nog makr mc op and im been thinking of reading this again for months now.

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