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2018-07-02 22:41

Writing quality is pretty bad. Feels like it isn't even checked by the writer. Character design is kinda flat. The good thing is that it's quite hilarious most of the time. 'What type of humour', you might ask. Well it feels written by a anime-Skyrim fan. So at least we got Truck-kun and MxR reference.

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El_Don
El_DonAuthor

Thanks for the review, I am working on the editing thing, I also started doing checks lately so some chapters are a bit bad and tiring to over. Anyway This is my first novel I write and it's actually not in my first language so I am having some hard time, I also write on phone. I will try to solve most of these problems and I hope you as well as the other readers keep supporting this work.

ToSuckmyBalls
ToSuckmyBallsLv4

good job

NecroticSimulacrum
NecroticSimulacrumLv5

I think that this is a amazing novel and it’s exactly what you would want in a Skyrim novel

rao3
rao3Lv1

I don't know what the fanfic is based on. Should i read it? Or there are too many references for a normal mortal like me to understand?

El_Don:Thanks for the review, I am working on the editing thing, I also started doing checks lately so some chapters are a bit bad and tiring to over. Anyway This is my first novel I write and it's actually not in my first language so I am having some hard time, I also write on phone. I will try to solve most of these problems and I hope you as well as the other readers keep supporting this work.
Elliora
EllioraLv6

its a game called the elder scroll V Skyrim, if u haven't played that game, well bruh u miss a really good game, I suggest u just download the game and play it, I'm 90% sure u will have 100+ hours of playtime xD

rao3:I don't know what the fanfic is based on. Should i read it? Or there are too many references for a normal mortal like me to understand?
A_reader_for_fun
A_reader_for_funLv12

If you haven’t played skyrim i can only pity you

rao3:I don't know what the fanfic is based on. Should i read it? Or there are too many references for a normal mortal like me to understand?
Evinitive
EvinitiveLv14

In all honesty, I feel the Author got cheated by his "Editor"- there's way too many mistakes that it feels like a crime to call him an Editor yk?

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