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Hawkkkkkkkkkk
HawkkkkkkkkkkLv105yr
2019-07-19 16:28

It's way too cliche and constantly breaking the fourth wall in a bad way. With that also come constant Meta references like Truck-kun that litter the pages. It just feels like pandering to the obsessive audience that loves this kind of thing. Just the mere mention of Truck-kun is enough to make them jitter with pleasure. There's also constant editor and author notes which only serve to pull you out of the story, ruining your immersion. Considering the author constantly rambles on and on about immersion in the story, it's quite shocking that he doesn't recognize this fatal flaw. On the positive side, they're mostly present in the first chapter and seem to decrease heavily from there. But first impressions are everything, and my impression is already ruined. Both sentence structure and grammar are also nothing to write home about. Unfortunately, the story is written in a (hopefully) unintentional mix of present tense and past tense. As expected, it doesn't work out very well and severely detracts from the story. I really dislike present tense, so for me, this dislike is only made stronger each time the author mixes up his tenses, switching back and forth. I want to give this novel a better chance, but the chapters are a chore to read so I don't see how I ever possibly could.

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james0sjr
james0sjrLv14

You forgot the constant misspelling of the same words over and over again, constant misuse of the same words over and over again, and then the incomplete sentences. The story starts out like 90% Skyrim and that remaining 10% is author contribution to the story. And to be honest, it isn't that good. He uses the same tropes as every other author but what pisses me off the most is his completely inconsistent character psychology/mentality. It is bad. In the later stages of the story, he starts stripping away the parts that made it what its and started forcing pieces of eastern fantasy in the story turning it into yet another cliche cultivation novel which wouldn't be that bad if the author were decent. I don't know if I will be able to finish this novel/keep reading it after 400 chapters but I won't have any regrets about dropping it.

NulZilch
NulZilchLv5

The story was going good but then it started slipping off with MC constantly harping about being from another world and dragons attacking soon. If that was supposed to be a joke than it was unfunny and way too overused one. But that cat obsession bit threw me off and convinced me to drop this novel. Who the hell likes to read about a MC who goes full retard seeing a kitty? Not like, not love just a full on retard mode. These constant story immersion bits made it pain in the ass to read the story. Lots of people like this story. If it has any charm, i don't see it.

james0sjr:You forgot the constant misspelling of the same words over and over again, constant misuse of the same words over and over again, and then the incomplete sentences. The story starts out like 90% Skyrim and that remaining 10% is author contribution to the story. And to be honest, it isn't that good. He uses the same tropes as every other author but what pisses me off the most is his completely inconsistent character psychology/mentality. It is bad. In the later stages of the story, he starts stripping away the parts that made it what its and started forcing pieces of eastern fantasy in the story turning it into yet another cliche cultivation novel which wouldn't be that bad if the author were decent. I don't know if I will be able to finish this novel/keep reading it after 400 chapters but I won't have any regrets about dropping it.
Viincentt
ViincenttLv13

it's awful I agree

Gilgamesh_Of_Uruk
Gilgamesh_Of_UrukLv4

Mongrel, You Have This King's Thanks For Saving His Time, Here Is A Small Reward:

Gilgamesh_Of_Uruk
Gilgamesh_Of_UrukLv4

You Too mongrel:

NulZilch:The story was going good but then it started slipping off with MC constantly harping about being from another world and dragons attacking soon. If that was supposed to be a joke than it was unfunny and way too overused one. But that cat obsession bit threw me off and convinced me to drop this novel. Who the hell likes to read about a MC who goes full retard seeing a kitty? Not like, not love just a full on retard mode. These constant story immersion bits made it pain in the ass to read the story. Lots of people like this story. If it has any charm, i don't see it.
Mordekkai
MordekkaiLv1

Thank you, friend, you're a friend.

BoredDaemonGod
BoredDaemonGodLv4

yeah, MC obsession with cat is just disgusting

NulZilch:The story was going good but then it started slipping off with MC constantly harping about being from another world and dragons attacking soon. If that was supposed to be a joke than it was unfunny and way too overused one. But that cat obsession bit threw me off and convinced me to drop this novel. Who the hell likes to read about a MC who goes full retard seeing a kitty? Not like, not love just a full on retard mode. These constant story immersion bits made it pain in the ass to read the story. Lots of people like this story. If it has any charm, i don't see it.
jamwerewolf
jamwerewolfLv4

He's from Egypt if you knew their history you would know how they feel about cats

NulZilch:The story was going good but then it started slipping off with MC constantly harping about being from another world and dragons attacking soon. If that was supposed to be a joke than it was unfunny and way too overused one. But that cat obsession bit threw me off and convinced me to drop this novel. Who the hell likes to read about a MC who goes full retard seeing a kitty? Not like, not love just a full on retard mode. These constant story immersion bits made it pain in the ass to read the story. Lots of people like this story. If it has any charm, i don't see it.
NOIR_THE_PROMODIAL
NOIR_THE_PROMODIALLv4

cat!? 😏.

BoredDaemonGod:yeah, MC obsession with cat is just disgusting
Daoist825PDv
Daoist825PDvLv13

Gilgamesh_Of_Uruk:Mongrel, You Have This King's Thanks For Saving His Time, Here Is A Small Reward:
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