Fate/DC Universe

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This fanfic isn't meant for special snowflakes so if u are one then don't read it. 1) The mc is semi-op, he's like a ben 10 of fate but with some rng for who he gets. 2) The writing overall is good and clear with few mistakes. 3) The mc ain't mister perfect so he has some shortcomings like his temper when it's related to certain topics. 4) Sooo far it's a single LI and i didn't see a harem tag, but the romance execution was bland like u hardly see them interact. Imo it should've been given a few more months for them to interact and deepen their relationship. 5) The Mc joins the YJL and semi-explained how his power works which isn't much of an issue except to the snowflakes (that 1 star reviewer😂) since they are the GOOD guys and would provide him help and protection due to his unique situation not to mention u can't just accept someone without having a basic idea of what they're capable of. Overall it's an enjoyable and unique fanfic and i hope it won't get dropped soon.

There are simply a lot of frustrating things, the MC is very weak and a hostage, I'm still in the first mission chapter, and it's simply frustrating that he acts so emotionally, simply idiotic.He knows he is weak, and practically useless without a heroic spirit, if time runs out he becomes more useless than he already is, he will be easily captured, besides those S+ gifts he received? Where did they go? Any place? Simply edit that chapter and remove that information.

Two stars is the rating I give every fan fiction. That does the immortal sin Of not describing your main character. Then you have him given his hero. Costume, and you don't describe that. You just say it looks like his normal clothes and you don't describe those. Literally brain dead stuff.

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The idea is good but the execution is bad. Actually the fic started off well, I read a few episodes and I didn't understand why they rated it so low, but then it went downhill after the episode with the Justice League came. MC is very pure and honest for a reincarnator who was experimented on in the laboratory. And this makes the fic pointless in my opinion. After suffering so much, a person does not trust everyone easily and does not want to play hero with them. Anyway, I ignored this error and continued reading. Then I encountered a logical error again. While Artemis and our MC were fighting, MC was defeated by Artemis. MC physical stats are C level and he is at least as strong as Spider-Man. Not only his strength but also its other features such as speed and durability are at C level. A normal person is F level in fate statistics. In FGO, Bedivere was human and several of his stats are F rank. Now, would you believe this if I told you when the MC with C level stats lost to Artemis, who has E level stats? If MC stood where he was and Artemis punched and kicked him repeatedly, nothing would happen to MC. Anyway, the idea is good, but the execution is very bad. It's a readable fic if you don't pay too much attention to logical errors. My score for this is 3.4 (translated by Google translate)

I am generally not a fan of fate, but stories like this make me have to rethink that decision. The story I feel has improved a lot compared to your other story. Great job.

I don't understand fanfic authors that torment their Mc. the books is are interesting, but all the bad stuff that's happened to the Mc is so cliche. the main reason I read it is ilike the prospect of his powers in the dc verse but he's so nerfed that it ruins the enjoyment.And he doesn't take advantage of the wisdom that the heros poses. he's copied 1 spell from madea and that's it so far. had the power for months and didn't learn anything from fighting or magic from the heros it's such a waist.

feels rushed ngl, like the way it was written is comparable to someone who's in a hurry. you might wanna slow down the pace/ rhythm, cuz it feels weird reading it. im only at the first 10+ chapters so im not judging all the chapters you've written, else i'll just update this if the writing improves in the later chapters.

Too Dramatic. Why don't you just write a korean drama Manhwa fanfic it might sound better than reading these cringy lines.

I've only read to chapter six, but I find myself enjoying the story and the mechanics of his powers so far. I did more than once consider turning of paragraph comments because almost everyone acts like the extras from a summoned class isekai, which ruins the mood. In the end, I kept them on for servant images and people like the guy who posted the attribute explanation. I hope the author isn't discouraged by them and can laugh at their idiocy using my comparison together with me. Once more, I enjoy your story's far and hope to see it get better

My opinion about the novel is actually good with a system that I like the direction of but he is too honest and worships the justice league like a fanboy which is very unpleasant when he is interrogated with him.he honestly told his power to the members of the justice league, that's stupid, bro, you should have kept the card, instead you wasted it on a group of hypocrites, this justice league is really ridiculous stupid

I'm not trusting reviews from now on, this story was something I've been a bit hesitant to read cause 1 I'm that invested in DC (hell i only watched teen titans) and some of the movies, and the reviews were low BUT this isn't bad at all, so for believing other's bullshit I deeply apologize.

solo leí 3 capítulos pero con eso puedo decir que será una mierda 💩, porque te preguntaras, simple por que tiene un sistema de Fate, no digo que no me guste fate pero cuando es un sistema con esa temática siempre son una mierda, porque siempre hacen lo mismo...... quisiera explicar más pero se me hace una perdida de tiempo explicar esta mierda, aparte y la actitud del prota me parece una mierda, aunque no a hablado mucho, entonces como puedo decir que es una mierda porque en esos poco diálogos a demostrado una actitud Infantil, impulsiva que no piensa antes de actuar. en resumen una mierda evitence esta perdida de tiempo, a menos que seas alguien con malos gustos.

Even though the start of the story was a little cliché and felt a little bit rushed, the last chapters have developed the MC much more; one of the weaknesses this novel had. However, characters other than the MC still feel bland due to poor descriptions of their mannerisms, emotions and reasoning. The novel would be better if the hard work that the MC would be emphasized more. After all, right now it feels like power comes too easily for him. The system is basically a Deus ex machina that gets him out of any problem without consequences. I would really appreciate it if less powerful servants appear and the MC has to improvise or show his creativity with them. Moreover, I think he should be allowed to fail. All his missions end up with little to no consequences; even his first mission, where he was really inexperienced.It would also help if you could add a little introduction to the servant's abilities. For example, after so many chapters we still don't have a description of the ability that he gained from Merlin.

Amazing story. In recent chapters (17) the suspense is almost unbearable, wich is really good. Thr only flaw is that the mc is somewhat of a fix-all, but I enjoy it so no problem

The writing could be better. The mc literally transforms into the heroic spirit unfortunately it would’ve been nice to know before reading that the MC doesn’t actually get the powers but gets genderbent into the heroic spirit with the powers honestly its a bit disappointing .

Realistically, no fanfic deserves a five, but I’m giving this story a five to boost it’s rating. This fanfic is better than most dc fanfics.

it so far it's a pretty solid story. mc is pretty likable. my only pet peeve is that he passes out too much from that ability, but all in all a fun read.

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