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LastGod
LastGodLv51yr
2024-02-02 16:20

Two stars is the rating I give every fan fiction. That does the immortal sin Of not describing your main character. Then you have him given his hero. Costume, and you don't describe that. You just say it looks like his normal clothes and you don't describe those. Literally brain dead stuff.

Fate/DC Universe

Gilgamesh9669
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Gilgamesh9669
Gilgamesh9669Author

I said he looked like the Poster of the fanfic, that's why i never bothered describing him with details

1yr
Aaden_
Aaden_Lv3

Thats not writing 💀

Gilgamesh9669:I said he looked like the Poster of the fanfic, that's why i never bothered describing him with details
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Alfiemooon
AlfiemooonLv4

So you were lazy? 🤨 Don't expect people to bother with your story when you don't.

Gilgamesh9669:I said he looked like the Poster of the fanfic, that's why i never bothered describing him with details
1yr
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Gilgamesh9669
Gilgamesh9669Author

No if i was Lazy, i wouldn't be Writing 2K chapters every two days, rather it was more of i judged that if i were to describe him, i'd confuse the reader of how he looked, so i just explained that he looked more like the pic so people could visualize it better, however i did realize later that it was a mistake on my part, and i have described his appearance later on in the story when he grows up, i go to the length of describing each of his transformations in detail, describing him felt wrong because i wanted to the readers to put themselves in his chose i guess (I realize now, that it was a bad idea)

Alfiemooon:So you were lazy? 🤨 Don't expect people to bother with your story when you don't.
1yr
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Santy_Melay
Santy_MelayLv1

You are, describing a character is essential to be able to visualize the scene.

Gilgamesh9669:No if i was Lazy, i wouldn't be Writing 2K chapters every two days, rather it was more of i judged that if i were to describe him, i'd confuse the reader of how he looked, so i just explained that he looked more like the pic so people could visualize it better, however i did realize later that it was a mistake on my part, and i have described his appearance later on in the story when he grows up, i go to the length of describing each of his transformations in detail, describing him felt wrong because i wanted to the readers to put themselves in his chose i guess (I realize now, that it was a bad idea)
9mth
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Daoist_Dan
Daoist_DanLv10

That is a feature not a mistake imo. I prefer it to be more vague than not.

3mth
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Gilgamesh9669
Gilgamesh9669Author

that typical Author's Review of his own fanfic . . . IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully

1yr

Kurama24
Kurama24Lv4

This fanfic isn't meant for special snowflakes so if u are one then don't read it. 1) The mc is semi-op, he's like a ben 10 of fate but with some rng for who he gets. 2) The writing overall is good and clear with few mistakes. 3) The mc ain't mister perfect so he has some shortcomings like his temper when it's related to certain topics. 4) Sooo far it's a single LI and i didn't see a harem tag, but the romance execution was bland like u hardly see them interact. Imo it should've been given a few more months for them to interact and deepen their relationship. 5) The Mc joins the YJL and semi-explained how his power works which isn't much of an issue except to the snowflakes (that 1 star reviewer😂) since they are the GOOD guys and would provide him help and protection due to his unique situation not to mention u can't just accept someone without having a basic idea of what they're capable of. Overall it's an enjoyable and unique fanfic and i hope it won't get dropped soon.

1yr
BlackFox_Memorys
BlackFox_MemorysLv11

There are simply a lot of frustrating things, the MC is very weak and a hostage, I'm still in the first mission chapter, and it's simply frustrating that he acts so emotionally, simply idiotic.He knows he is weak, and practically useless without a heroic spirit, if time runs out he becomes more useless than he already is, he will be easily captured, besides those S+ gifts he received? Where did they go? Any place? Simply edit that chapter and remove that information.

1yr
EndofTimez_25
EndofTimez_25Lv4

Reveal spoiler

1yr
Arslan_Aly
Arslan_AlyLv2

The idea is good but the execution is bad. Actually the fic started off well, I read a few episodes and I didn't understand why they rated it so low, but then it went downhill after the episode with the Justice League came. MC is very pure and honest for a reincarnator who was experimented on in the laboratory. And this makes the fic pointless in my opinion. After suffering so much, a person does not trust everyone easily and does not want to play hero with them. Anyway, I ignored this error and continued reading. Then I encountered a logical error again. While Artemis and our MC were fighting, MC was defeated by Artemis. MC physical stats are C level and he is at least as strong as Spider-Man. Not only his strength but also its other features such as speed and durability are at C level. A normal person is F level in fate statistics. In FGO, Bedivere was human and several of his stats are F rank. Now, would you believe this if I told you when the MC with C level stats lost to Artemis, who has E level stats? If MC stood where he was and Artemis punched and kicked him repeatedly, nothing would happen to MC. Anyway, the idea is good, but the execution is very bad. It's a readable fic if you don't pay too much attention to logical errors. My score for this is 3.4 (translated by Google translate)

1yr
Austin_oates
Austin_oatesLv15

I don't understand fanfic authors that torment their Mc. the books is are interesting, but all the bad stuff that's happened to the Mc is so cliche. the main reason I read it is ilike the prospect of his powers in the dc verse but he's so nerfed that it ruins the enjoyment.And he doesn't take advantage of the wisdom that the heros poses. he's copied 1 spell from madea and that's it so far. had the power for months and didn't learn anything from fighting or magic from the heros it's such a waist.

10mth
FoolishPanda_25
FoolishPanda_25Lv15

I am generally not a fan of fate, but stories like this make me have to rethink that decision. The story I feel has improved a lot compared to your other story. Great job.

1yr
Heroic_Spirit23
Heroic_Spirit23Lv4

feels rushed ngl, like the way it was written is comparable to someone who's in a hurry. you might wanna slow down the pace/ rhythm, cuz it feels weird reading it. im only at the first 10+ chapters so im not judging all the chapters you've written, else i'll just update this if the writing improves in the later chapters.

8mth
Zekril
ZekrilLv4

Too Dramatic. Why don't you just write a korean drama Manhwa fanfic it might sound better than reading these cringy lines.

1yr
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