that typical Author's Review of his own fanfic . . . IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully IT'S GOOD Hopefully

This fanfic isn't meant for special snowflakes so if u are one then don't read it. 1) The mc is semi-op, he's like a ben 10 of fate but with some rng for who he gets. 2) The writing overall is good and clear with few mistakes. 3) The mc ain't mister perfect so he has some shortcomings like his temper when it's related to certain topics. 4) Sooo far it's a single LI and i didn't see a harem tag, but the romance execution was bland like u hardly see them interact. Imo it should've been given a few more months for them to interact and deepen their relationship. 5) The Mc joins the YJL and semi-explained how his power works which isn't much of an issue except to the snowflakes (that 1 star reviewer😂) since they are the GOOD guys and would provide him help and protection due to his unique situation not to mention u can't just accept someone without having a basic idea of what they're capable of. Overall it's an enjoyable and unique fanfic and i hope it won't get dropped soon.

There are simply a lot of frustrating things, the MC is very weak and a hostage, I'm still in the first mission chapter, and it's simply frustrating that he acts so emotionally, simply idiotic.He knows he is weak, and practically useless without a heroic spirit, if time runs out he becomes more useless than he already is, he will be easily captured, besides those S+ gifts he received? Where did they go? Any place? Simply edit that chapter and remove that information.

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Two stars is the rating I give every fan fiction. That does the immortal sin Of not describing your main character. Then you have him given his hero. Costume, and you don't describe that. You just say it looks like his normal clothes and you don't describe those. Literally brain dead stuff.

I am generally not a fan of fate, but stories like this make me have to rethink that decision. The story I feel has improved a lot compared to your other story. Great job.

I don't understand fanfic authors that torment their Mc. the books is are interesting, but all the bad stuff that's happened to the Mc is so cliche. the main reason I read it is ilike the prospect of his powers in the dc verse but he's so nerfed that it ruins the enjoyment.And he doesn't take advantage of the wisdom that the heros poses. he's copied 1 spell from madea and that's it so far. had the power for months and didn't learn anything from fighting or magic from the heros it's such a waist.

feels rushed ngl, like the way it was written is comparable to someone who's in a hurry. you might wanna slow down the pace/ rhythm, cuz it feels weird reading it. im only at the first 10+ chapters so im not judging all the chapters you've written, else i'll just update this if the writing improves in the later chapters.

Too Dramatic. Why don't you just write a korean drama Manhwa fanfic it might sound better than reading these cringy lines.