Fallout 4: Rebirth At Vault 81

My biggest problem with this story is that all the dialog feels robotic and un human.second problem is that the mc(mc's name is sico) system is weak 😔 to such a degree that It makes him weaker then a normal person in gaining stats and he stated with 7 intelligence he should level up way more and gain stats way more.

I really wanted to like this story. It's exactly the type of story I was looking for, or so I thought. The writing/translation is awful. It's nearly impossible to read. The characters are... incredibly unrelatable and story itself is super hard to follow. And I mean I like wish-fulfillment, sometimes it makes a great -relaxing- read, but this is too much. No one questions anything, the dialogue is so contrived and forced that it pains me to read it. Just... super disappointed. And before anyone says it gets better or something, I made it to chapter twenty. That's far enough I think. Nothing had improved by then

Terrible dialogue, terrible sentence structure, the author skips over important details simply because he/she forgets. Introduces a system but ignores it… then why even introduce it.

Just because this was a fallout novel and fallout is my all time favorite game. So i hope you doesn't drop this one author even though i know there was no chance you to drop it

You don’t need to put the name of the speaker in front of every phrase ._. It makes it unreadable

Hello Tang12 as a fan of your writing i will support this story, I can not wait to see what you can do with such World like Fallout.

So I didn't get very far because of the clunky and for lack of better term artificial dialogue as an example to potential readers all conversation are like this Sico"did you say something Jenny" Jenny"no, I've haven't made a peep" sico "I swear I heard something" the author claims it gets better but I checked up to chapter 70 and it's still in this script format and to the author when someone says artificial dialogue they mean they style not the content e.g "Did you say something Jenny" sico whispered. "no" came her crisp reply. Would be how one expects to read dialogue Other than that it's a good story sorry I couldn't stick around I do love fallout

Since it was Tang12 who made it, I believe it would be a great piece of work just like his other work! The world-building is definitely already perfect as it was based on Fallout 4, for other things I can't see but I believe it would be great! Keep up the spirit author!

The dialogue is extremely robotic and unsatisfying, besides that everything else is fine. Really hope the author can learn from other authors dialogue and improve

5 ⭐ just because you make a fallout fanfiction.

I'm going to chapter 20 For starters, it seems like the author forgot that Mc had learned beginner hand-to-hand combat, since it's not added in his state. The dialogue system is horrible, it is the worst thing you can use since you avoid showing the characters' expressions when speaking. Things happen too fast for my liking, plus you're going to tell me that you couldn't find skill magazines in all this time.

Play a game...especially with mods. You. get far better experience.

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First he builds tech and stuff quickly and it’s kinda fast paced in the first 20 chapters after that it’s like author quit and realized he couldn’t keep that pace so he made the entire thing boring asf took 70 chapters from the time he got the electric motercycle blueprint to the time he finally decides to build guess what A gasoline powered bike because authors words ”there are still gas stations around to fill up the bikes and those gas stations don’t exist and if they did they would be full of 200 year old gas it would be sludge. Evey car in fallout is nuclear powered the cherry bomb car has a atomic v8 engine that can explode violently and the flying cars are hydrogen powered fusion engines that can’t explode or have some kind of protective shield from stopping it from exploding because they were for the rich and most of the cars explode violently if crashed

hey I love the story so far but I feel like you have completely forgotten sico's original home where his parents are and the vibe I get from him doesn't seem like the type to forget his parants.

The only reason it’s not 5 stars is because of grammar and how fast it goes but that’s really it other than that great story and will continue to read.👍

I enjoy this novel fallout 4 and am looking forward to more chapters

The story is good but the grammar needs polishing

At the beginning, I nearly quit reading the fic after seeing the writing is done in script. But I though, maybe the author might improve afterall those feedbacks given to them. So, I give it a shot... It didnt get better... Everything feel plain and robotic. No character developments. No interesting dialogs. There's storylines for sure but it just feel rush and messy, that I have to reread some parts just to fully understand where's it going. The most frustrating part about the fic that I feel is that the author skip the important dialog without giving a further details or explanations! All done in summaries. So, I hope the aurthor would actually grown and learn from this and better themselve on their writing skills to further improve the fic since it have potential to be better.

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