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Queen_Karina
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2024-01-22 01:50

The dialogue is extremely robotic and unsatisfying, besides that everything else is fine. Really hope the author can learn from other authors dialogue and improve

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Tang12
Tang12Author

Thank you for the review! Will try to change it so that it doesn't feel robotic, maybe it's because of the format of the dialogue but I see what I can do!

daniel_rahn
daniel_rahnLv2

your problem is that you need to be more realistic with the interactions, for example, the time the woman that was in charge of the vault 81 acted suspicious because of mc's ''Brilliant plan'' that is something everyone could have thought, asking mc why he is so smart. Another thing you need to show is the expression of the people, how do they feel, what face they are doing when they talked to mc or when they do something. This is not a Script man, its a novel you need to describe more than just their dialouges but how they speak or act in general and be realistic

Tang12:Thank you for the review! Will try to change it so that it doesn't feel robotic, maybe it's because of the format of the dialogue but I see what I can do!
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