Reviews of Our hidden story

The writing is nice so far and I enjoyed reading it a lot. The novel has a good plot and is promising . The writer is successful in appealing to the readers . At last the novel is overall good and will desperately wait for the next chapters to come .[img=recommend][img=recommend]

It's an amazing story, has good writing quality. After reading the early chapter, I get hooked and want to keep reading. Nice work, author. But for some reason, the world background is still vague for me. Overall is good. Keep the good work.

the starting of this story is quite intriguing. It's still too early to say where it will flow in the future but the premise and the world background are interesting as hell. I must say that the author's writing style is unique. I don't tend to read first pov stories much but this is simply amazing. I'm definitely excited to see where it will head in the future. Thank you so much for working so hard!

There is only 4 chapters so far, but.. already I can see that you have a concept for the story... an interesting one! Just follow your main idea (it's somethig new on WN). Good luck

Worldbuilding is good. Really loving it but still not enough chapters for me to get in. Looking forward to more chapters. Will read more in the future.

I don't know what to say, it is only four chapters long for now, but one thing for sure.. I don't want to experience what the MC experienced. This mind-control/mental disorder MC seemed bizarre, yet addictive. Plot uniquely disturbing, yet with good characters description. Overall nice writing, except the grammar. But I couldn't really tell since english isn't my native. But surely you'll improve.

The story is really good. I enjoyed reading it as far as I have and look forward to your updates. I got confused in a few sentences. They did not seem to make sense for me and made me feel a bit lost. It could have been the author's intention or my misinterpretation. All in all it's a nice story and worth reading.

Wow an MC with Mental Disorders! I relate about the Mc because I am one. It was hard though getting depressed and then you found out that you have "Mental Disorder". But life is fun! The author splendidly portrayed it! Kudos author and Keep writing! Your story is unique so keep writing more!

Other than the misspelled words, which I tried to a certain extent to correct in first chapter, I find the story absolutely enthralling ! Please keep going because this is a hidden gem !

It's quite a new novel, but it's very very interesting. The confusion that the reader feels at first and then the slow realization that everything's real is quite fun. As for the characters, I just love the thoughts of the main character. But there's still the problem of grammar and quality. Some words are spelled wrong and there are some confusion between my and I, etc. I recommend downloading an assistant programm like Grammarly or ProWritingAid. They're free to use(kind of) and it's a quick way to clean up your chapters before you post them.

Well, with only 4 chapters it's a bit hard to give a review, but not impossible! Ok then let's start with the review, the setting and the world building are pretty good, I like how you describe everything and the world that you're creating, looks really promising! The characters are also really good liked them all so far, as for the writing, I also think that it is pretty good no mistakes whatsoever just a bit of editing here and there and your golden (but as it is right now, it doesn't hinder the story at least for me)

the story has only 5 chapterst so far but it's a great begginging. I really like your writing style. I hope to read more in the future. Good luck to the author!

When I read your synopsis talking about fairies and wizards, I don't know why it reminds me of Black Clover (anime) and Artemis Fowl (book). At first part I was confused with the medicine and all but when I read on, that's when I realize, it's actually cool. I like it. Nice work author!

What an interesting story! I am captivated by the plot so far, very intrigued to see what happens. Your writing is well edited, and your main character is really interesting. Your descriptions are vivid, and I felt like I was there watching the scenes unfold. Looking forward to more!

Amazing story but slight grammar mistakes. It's not too serious but is enough to divert your attention from the story. I suggest fixing those mistakes. But overall a very good novel with a great start. Worth giving a try.

Wasn't able to get too far into it, but I liked what I saw, so far! Please keep up the good work, and I look forward to your future successes!

Love this fantasy expect of your story. Could you just a tad of editing here and their. Honestly one of the best short storys iv read on here yet. Keep updating please.