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RJMidnight
RJMidnightLv3RJMidnight

Im not into female leads or romance, but here is my honest review. Your plotline is very interesting and has potential. It is good and will keep a reader wanting to know more. What made this hard to read that I had to stop, was not due to this being a genre I dont favor, but do to the writing style and grammar mistakes. It is hard to read the story with the way it it written. The words are interesting, but the style has mistakes. Other than that, you are on a good track. Keep up the good work!

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Sanachan
SanachanLv10Sanachan

Just wow...I know it is early but your words kept me hooked. Your writing style is totally different. ..I will say dreamy. ..It is change and I am looking forward to reading it. 😍😍😍😍

Starlightxx1
Starlightxx1Lv3Starlightxx1

This story looks good so far even if there's only 3 chapters there are some words that can be fixed but other than that this looks amazing and I am enjoying it hope you can update more:).

Ghassan_
Ghassan_Lv2Ghassan_

Like I commented within... Your book needs more attention and for that, I would recommend it on my Facebook profile. I didn't completely read it which I will soon but it was indeed a story to tell. And like I saw on a review from one of your readers, the girl seems so innocent to do crazy... you know what I mean! LOL But I love and love... love it!! Just keep writing we're right there to support.[img=coins]

LinYang
LinYangLv2LinYang

Overall, pretty good. Author has created several vivid characters in a unique world, and the story is going nicely. Just be careful of punctuation (use some more commas) and also of capitalization. With practice your prose will also start flowing smoother. Keep writing author!

firstraindrop
firstraindropLv11firstraindrop

Great book author 👏👏I am totally hooked to it..😙I will recommend to all that at least give it a try once. You have created an enchanted world. The blood you have given very beautiful name to it and your novel too❤❤❤❤ I am looking forward to reading it. I really want more.😍😍😍 punctuation marks, grammar needed to get correct but I love the way MC is telling her story. Actually get feeling of vampire world's. .kudos to author. ..keep writing ❤❤❤❤

Shionokami
ShionokamiLv1Shionokami

Good story you got here, author! Good setting (even if I don't read to many stories in this style) good character and overall I think your writing is pretty good. Keep it going Author!

Kirbyisgreen
KirbyisgreenLv4Kirbyisgreen

Good beginning, interesting story idea. Keep going author, A few ideas for you, It was a bit jarring reading that an innocent girl suddenly falls in love with a strange man and had ***? I see that it is R-18 but perhaps you can set the scene that Nuwa is not very innocent after all and likes to be naughty? Just an idea, up to you. :)

JustLikeWriting777
JustLikeWriting777Lv1JustLikeWriting777

Very different than I've ever read... And I gotta tell ya, I'm hooked! So the characters - especially the main one - are very well-written. You describe them perfectly! I mean, even the background setting has been given the smallest of details. I really like it, so count me as a fan

GobSlater
GobSlaterLv3GobSlater

Limit the usage of elli**is, it disrupts the flow of reading. Best of luck in the contest and keep up the great work. There's still room for improvement but if you don't give up, you'll reap the fruits of your labor

SnowPenguin
SnowPenguinLv3SnowPenguin

There's a large and colourful cast of characters who all interact well with each other and play off of each other. The premise is interesting and so far, the plot's been good. The work only needs some tweaking in the grammar department.

LOVE097
LOVE097Lv4LOVE097

Hello... The concept of the story is new and good. The establishment of characters is also good. The feelings expressed in the story are overwhelming from a reader's point of view. With slight editing the story will really be interesting and attract more readers. Good work author😊😊😊

sirenbeauty
sirenbeautyLv13sirenbeauty

A good story, I am waiting for more updates to come, I really love your title, it could really catch attention! Good luck author!👍👍👍 more more more

iam_adh
iam_adhLv2iam_adh

The story itself is very interesting. I like the way how the author describes the world where the MC lives. I believe the story development is nice and the stability of updates is well done. However, grammar... I can't understand some things because of it. I suggest that the author uses Grammarly or any type of grammar checker. Besides that, this story is very interesting. You nice, keep going!

LyingCrowPromises
LyingCrowPromisesLv10LyingCrowPromises

Here is a 5. But I won't comment on this. Only one thing. You have the freedom to write what you want. I hate rape and tropes surrounding it.

Noleafyet
NoleafyetLv4Noleafyet

The story has a lot of potential. I can see the author's writing improving as I read further. The story can shine more with more polishing for grammar I kindly suggest using free downloadable grammarly extension app. Avoid using excessive periods since it weakens the thought of your sentences. Overall, I personally want to see more polishing to bring out the best in this novel. Hope you write more, learn more, enjoy more, and edit more. Wishes for best and keep it up![img=recommend]

FLORA_BARUA
FLORA_BARUALv2FLORA_BARUA

Nice story. I already love the vampire genre! want more chapters. Characters are great. Please update more!!!! I am waiting for some chapters. It's different too. I love female leads. Well, cause I'm one. Loved it. keep up the work

Sun23
Sun23Lv3Sun23

The beginning of the story is heartbreaking! *cries cries Even though short, the mini description of the female lead parents love is so sad, but warming at the same time. While reading the story, there were sentences that need to be reword in order for a better reading flow, but no need to worry. It's not like it's going to be the end of the world if it's not fix. Toward the latest chapters, lol, I start to cower in embarrassment at some chapters...Ahem. Let say it very cringey, not bad cringey, but when reading to those parts I feel a bit shy. Ai ya, this shy pure maiden haven't been to that side of life, no, love yet! In overall, the story is heading toward a good start. When reading, I feel like the female lead is so fragile, weak, so weak that she could shatter at any moment with what's been happening in her life. But thats not it at all, the female is strong. A strong women that doesn't give up!

prada_murthy
prada_murthyLv13prada_murthy

This story is a good read. The author knows how to take the story further and the plot id quite interesting. It has a lot of potential if not for the fact that it becomes confusing whenever there is an exchange of dialogues. It is unclear as to who is speaking at times. There are some grammatical errors and incorrect structure sentences. But that does not hinder the plot or the flow of the story. My recommendation for the author is to run through an editor before updating. Also, try to build bigger paragraphs instead of making each sentence as a paragraph. All in this book is great. Keep up the good work author.

firstraindrop
firstraindropLv11firstraindrop

Wow. Nuwa's dream told so many things about her. She is one strong girl who respect her parents and their belifes. A half vampire have so much of love inside her heart that she is ready to live alone for her infinity life but doesn't want a single soul to die because of her....Hatts off to her. For her what her mother asked her is more important than anything else. Her parents asked her not to drink blood so she fought with her grandfather for it. Her mother believed in God so nuwa also believed in God. When she felt sad in graveyard I felt her emotions so much. She miss them so much but stands strong and author you just nailed it. Other so called strong girl need others to help her but nuwa is truly MC...I loved it author. I loved it. 😍😍😍😍❤❤❤ keep updating please. ..❤❤❤