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SnowPenguin

SnowPenguin

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I'm a person who likes both to read and write in my free time as well as draw on occasion, even if I suck at it. I hope to become at least a half decent author, and I hope that you will like my work.

2020-06-01 JoinedUnited Kingdom
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Replied to SnowPenguin

    I am never going to continue this story, and I am unlikely to operate in this genre again, so feel free to criticise all you want. Also, you are never going to offend me. I have heard so much worse, and used to, on a regular basis, if covid could be given any credit for keeping us all indoors. You don't have to apologise for your good faith criticism.

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    The Chosen Messenger of the Gods
    Eastern · SnowPenguin
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Replied to TheSeagull

    I'll be honest. I like the fact that you were so willing to go in and point out what I did wrong, and it honestly kind of hurt a bit too, because I did draw on my own personal background. I was operating in Eastern Fantasy, but did, on purpose, deviate from standard tropes to lean more into historical and modern tropes of Eastern stories, including my own personal Eastern background, even if it's not Chinese. There was an Eastern Setting with this from the ghosts, references to the underworld, the resentful energy monster, the one Huli Jing that turned up in one scene, the Gods, the Jade Emperor, and the main character was intended to be a quarter God himself, through his father who was going to be revealed to be a half God. As for the backstories, I mostly relied on tropes and was banking that any potential readers would already be familiar with the archetypical characters of the genre, as I was planning to just bend those stereotypes and then reframe them, by removing them from familiar contexts of some wealthy, highly stratified household into one where normal harsh social boundaries cannot exist if everyone is poor and it makes no sense to keep them if survival is being risked. Take the mother, in any other context, she would be the scorned wife, a power player who got what she wanted, at first, with a son, but was then stuck as her son turned out useless, in her opinion. Her actions make sense and are rooted in her own tragic backstory, which implies some dark shit, because she's essentially rendered a pawn for the Gods to use and only there to sire a son, and then be discarded. The entire point of her was to pass down an early example of the cycle of war and abuse, for the MC to later on decide to deny ever passing that down and choose to suffer to do the right thing, after running away at every opportunity to stand up and do better without anything to gain. His mother was going to be fridge horror personified, as she was forced to marry a man, for knowing too much and then give birth to a son, and then an additional unnecessary daughter. She does get some sort of redemption and an acknowledgement of the verbal and physical abuse that she forced her children through, with a small reconciliation, but ultimately, she was there to show that judgements made without full information can be unfair, humanity is flawed, and that even those first seemingly evil have their own reasons. She was also the one who was going to be the weapon levelled against the Gods for their own sins, as the comparison to be drawn, with her being the only character to do so as the most traditionally socially useless character. Women don't matter outside of their reproductive capabilities, and once a woman has had a son, she's essentially rendered useless in terms of providing a purpose. Sure she has favour, but there's no one to give her favour if there is no husband, so she's accomplished nothing then, forced, in high society, to retreat to being alone and taking up unobtrusive hobbies, but she's poor here, so she's got even less social value. To make her better in terms of character, as she recognises where she has gone wrong, while the Gods do not, was always meant to be an insult towards them, and a deliberate upsetting of the social hierarchy. Her husband was actually alive the entire time and was simply following mindlessly orders from the Heavens to do what needed to be done, which was supposed to be explain our MC's weird behaviour towards his father's death, as he was supposed to sense what was actually going on. The God of Deception, in the restaurant, was the MC's father, and the MC was eventually going to become the God of Knowledge and Husband of Death itself. A lot of early issues were planned out to resolve themselves by the end of the story as more of the plot gradually unfolded and make sense by the end, with a lot of the subtext only possible to read if there was a pre established background in the genre.

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    The Chosen Messenger of the Gods
    Eastern · SnowPenguin
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Replied to Roji_Nemuro

    I decided not to update anymore, and then take a break from this site because schoolwork, and other things. I am not continuing my old stories, as I sat down and took a long, hard look at what I had written and just wasn't satisfied with my output. This particular work was made up as I went along, and it's not very structured, and I only had basic outlines back then of where I was going and what was going to happen. I decided to stop, and if I do return back to writing on this site, I'll likely never tackle this genre again, and go for something else that I'm more comfortable with. I currently have one story planned out that I intend to post on this site later, but right now, I'm still in the initial stages of planning and I intend to make baby steps.

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    The Chosen Messenger of the Gods
    Eastern · SnowPenguin
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Replied to Esther_Heredia

    I regret to inform you that this work is being abandoned.

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    The Face Behind the System
    Eastern · SnowPenguin
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Replied to daydreamtowrite

    I hate to tell you that this work is now abandoned.

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    The Face Behind the System
    Eastern · SnowPenguin
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Replied to Vidit_Verma

    I'm sorry to dash your hopes, but I have no intention to continue the work. I took a break from the site, after deciding that, and I don't know if I will ever return.

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    The Face Behind the System
    Eastern · SnowPenguin
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Replied to Grant_Crouse

    I'm not writing this anymore, so I can reveal that he's in a coma. I have no intention to continue the story.

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    The Face Behind the System
    Eastern · SnowPenguin
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Posted

    Aside from the speech thing, the story is well written and flows well too. There's a large cast of characters who are all portrayed well

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    Fatal
    Fantasy · Vidit_Verma
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Posted

    The story is extremely well written and conveys a really powerful atmosphere and tone, making me feel uncomfortable. It really manages to set up characters really well, giving us the motivations and thoughts of the characters, and provide strange, contrasting disconnects that just makes me feel uncomfortable. I think that's intentional.

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    [Down for Maintenance]
    Fantasy · lilGoat
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Posted

    The story is well written and well paced with some really amazing character writing. The author definitely gets better as the story goes on with this.

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    Falling in Love With You All Over Again
    Urban · ssfx3yuchens
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Posted

    The story is well written and well paced with interesting and well defined characters. The setting is also really cool, especially with how the story starts out in the beginning and there's a fair bit of tension there between the characters as well.

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    The Final Act
    Fantasy · Saeven07
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Posted

    The work is well written and well paced with a compelling main character and plot. The work is still in it's early stages, but it's shaping up to be good.

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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Posted

    The story is well written and the author is really good at filling scenes up with tension to make up for the lack of screen time for characters in the work so far.

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    The Runaway Huntress
    Fantasy · IzannahFrame
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Posted

    Firstly, I have to say that the cover of your work is absolutely gorgeous! The writing in the work is good with only minor punctuation mistakes. The characterisation and drama of all the characters are the main strengths here.

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    Sun & Soda (REWRITING)
    Teen · moonmato
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Posted

    The story is immensely well written with the only criticism being that some paragraphs need to be broken up to become smaller. I have to say, the first line of the book description made me laugh.

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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Posted

    The story has a unique premise and is well written and well paced. In some moments as well, it gets almost sickly with how fluffy it gets.

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    The Day He Came, Everything Changed
    Urban · sunehra_sokwala
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Replied to Glenstonx

    I have never heard of that show before. I'll have to check it out.

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    The Face Behind the System
    Eastern · SnowPenguin
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Posted

    The story is well written and well paced with some amazing character writing right from the beginning. You can really feel what the main character feels so good job author!

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    Patient's curse and within
    Horror · Glenstonx
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Posted

    The story is well written and well paced with some really good dialogue from the characters.

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    Holy World
    Fantasy · EmpRabbit
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  • SnowPenguin
    SnowPenguin3yr
    Replied to Grant_Crouse

    You make me wish there was private messaging on this site.

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    The Face Behind the System
    Eastern · SnowPenguin
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