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Martial Arts System

作者: Alekzi
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Kurogami Ichiro was desperate because he couldn't achieve what he wanted when he once started his martial arts path at age of 8! 35 Years he spent training and honing his martial arts, but he always felt like he was born in the wrong era... And fate played its tricks and Ichiro lost his life while saving a young girl's life and no matter how much he trained his martial arts. He couldn't escape from death. But.. his story didn't end there... He reincarnated to a different world where martial arts and people with strength are targets of admiration... Can Ichiro finally reach his dream while having the assistance of the Martial Arts System? Martial Arts System seemed simple at first... But Ichiro will slowly find out... That the Martial Arts System is far from simple. ________________________________ Disclaimer: The cover is my own, made by Dini Marlina __________________ https://www.patreon.com/aesirproductions Me, alongside my friends, decided to create a novel. Please, check it out, and support if you enjoy it. I can promise, it's going to be a wild ride.

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1 :Middle School.
2 :High School

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I went out of my way to write a full review for this story, because I felt like it had a lot of potential, decent plot idea, and the author can improve significantly. Writing Quality is a bit disappointing. "Show, don't tell" is a cornerstone of writing. There are lots of explanations for everything with info dumps, instead of a slow but steady discovery. Various descriptions are awkward many times as well. In addition, there are a number of typos. I honestly just expect more from a premium novel. Author updates regularly, which is great. Story development feels pretty basic. Nothing groundbreaking or new. There's a system. Someone has transmigrated. Theres a tournament arc. Etc. It doesn't pull me in because I feel like I've seen it all before. For a world that is being invaded, it doesn't feel like it at all. Everyone seems too casual about it all. Normal people just living their lives casually when the world is falling apart around them. We had a global pandemic where people were dying from covid, and things changed everywhere. I can't imagine monsters invading, and people just acting like martial arts are just "sports" anymore. You give little to no impression about how society has changed from this. Character design is a little boring. I wish that there was a little more character development. Everyone other than the MC feels a bit two dimensional. Even the MC sometimes feels a bit boring. I don't know how you plan to bring character growth to the MC either since he was already an adult, and he is doing the same thing he was doing in his previous life. There needs to be personal growth for the characters, otherwise you result in a Xianxia novel where everyone is rigid and unreasonable. World background also got 3 stars because there is nothing new about a world being invaded by monsters.

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