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Lulu50023
Lulu50023Lv33yr
2022-01-17 01:26

My first Review I understand that this is the Author's first novel and said that the first 40 chapters might be a bit rough. After Reading 9 chapters I was getting really annoyed about how many grammatical and spelling mistakes I could find. The Author doesn't use the words "The" and "a". For example: captian instead of The captian young man instead of a or the young man said... Gorilla said:"" instead of The gorilla said:"" Furthemore the Author switches from 1st person to 3r person wich is getting me really confused. I had high hopes for this novel. Author! I don't know if correcting the chapters is very time consuming but please fix them so people can enjoy this novel it's not like you have to correct the tiniest mistake just the noticable ones.

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ILoveNovels
ILoveNovelsLv11

About the change in perspective, from a moment (I don't remember which, probably after chapter 30) it's only in the third person, and if I'm not mistaken, it rarely goes back to first person, and if it is, it's for a short time

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