I went out of my way to write a full review for this story, because I felt like it had a lot of potential, decent plot idea, and the author can improve significantly. Writing Quality is a bit disappointing. "Show, don't tell" is a cornerstone of writing. There are lots of explanations for everything with info dumps, instead of a slow but steady discovery. Various descriptions are awkward many times as well. In addition, there are a number of typos. I honestly just expect more from a premium novel. Author updates regularly, which is great. Story development feels pretty basic. Nothing groundbreaking or new. There's a system. Someone has transmigrated. Theres a tournament arc. Etc. It doesn't pull me in because I feel like I've seen it all before. For a world that is being invaded, it doesn't feel like it at all. Everyone seems too casual about it all. Normal people just living their lives casually when the world is falling apart around them. We had a global pandemic where people were dying from covid, and things changed everywhere. I can't imagine monsters invading, and people just acting like martial arts are just "sports" anymore. You give little to no impression about how society has changed from this. Character design is a little boring. I wish that there was a little more character development. Everyone other than the MC feels a bit two dimensional. Even the MC sometimes feels a bit boring. I don't know how you plan to bring character growth to the MC either since he was already an adult, and he is doing the same thing he was doing in his previous life. There needs to be personal growth for the characters, otherwise you result in a Xianxia novel where everyone is rigid and unreasonable. World background also got 3 stars because there is nothing new about a world being invaded by monsters.
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LIKEAlso, I read the story until chap 13 where is stopped because I had no desire to read anymore. I understand that you have a note to read until chapter 50, but that's a lot of chapters for anyone to slog through. It might be better to go rewrite the earlier chapters instead when you have time to reflect your increased writing skills.
I agree, when I first started writing this novel, I had no idea what I was trying to do, I was very amateurish, since this is literally the result of perhaps real attempt to write something. First 40 are bad imo, I wish I could rewrite it, but its now premium so cant do that, grammar is as well bad because I didnt focus much, once I reached 50 chap, I went to look my early chaps and I hated it so I started editing, but not very good edit, only typos, etc,but I have improved a lot since then and after 50 chaps it is much better. First 40 chaps were the result of my inexperience and result of not planning anything.Thanks for your honest review, and I knew a lot of things lacked in my writing when I first started, but I have improved.
