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RingoBrown
RingoBrownLv153yr
2022-01-08 04:35

- Simp paradise. He meets a girl online, 5 mins. later he gives her 10 million dollars after listening to her sob story. MC was a martial arts master with 40+ years of experience. He reincarnates into a 15 year old and acts like a 12 year old. His 40+ years of maturity and knowledge vanishes. He speaks with inexperience and naïveté. The earlier chapters are filled with plotholes. The author tries his best to cover them up later in the story but it causes inconsistencies in the plot moving forward. The outline of the story is decent enough for me to have stuck around for as long as I did, but the plot development and inconsistencies just ruins it for me. If you’re into annoying MC’s who bully their bestfriend and is a MAJOR simp, then this book is for you.

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Suzune_Simp
Suzune_SimpLv11

unfortunately it's not for me

FTLnovaKid
FTLnovaKidLv13

Thanks for the warning.

CiaaDReader
CiaaDReaderLv11

I totally agree to you with this, I'm at 201 now and as I read throughout the novel it slowly lose its taste. basically it started when he started having relationship with Azura his girlfriend. and everything feels like a filler because of how it was way to forced . blacksmithing skill was introduced so badly it could've been written way better but nah. still it has his hype moments but yeah his character development are uninteresting,big disappointed*sigh for that. it could've been better if the relationship between Azura his girlfriend has not been executed. my man became so simp and became yandere so disappointed about it.

a_commoner
a_commonerLv5

You forgot to say that the both the MC and the story are boring and uninteresting.

WOWIE
WOWIELv4

Thanks for the warning..

UncleDodger
UncleDodgerLv11

thank you for saving my time

ebit_setiawan
ebit_setiawanLv1

p

Suzune_Simp:unfortunately it's not for me
ebit_setiawan
ebit_setiawanLv1

piu

Suzune_Simp:unfortunately it's not for me
MilkGod_disciple
MilkGod_discipleLv3

Gets better

a_commoner:You forgot to say that the both the MC and the story are boring and uninteresting.
OnePun
OnePunLv6

SIMP

MilkGod_disciple:Gets better
MilkGod_disciple
MilkGod_discipleLv3

OnePun:SIMP
Darcyen
DarcyenLv1

Thanks dodged a bullet

Saikat_Chowdhury_7036
Saikat_Chowdhury_7036Lv10

Story with many harem members yet MC is a total shrimp!!I mean,whats the point of having girls!!Thats why either write novel without harem.If harem,then make every romantic interest wife,like Royal dragon and phoenix transmigrate to earth.Its not ad but I really like ruthless mc!At least,they will never be shrimp!But I also dislike MC having woman who is not pure!!It irritating!

Universal_Monarch
Universal_MonarchLv1

hmm..

Suzune_Simp:unfortunately it's not for me
Universal_Monarch
Universal_MonarchLv1

the novel? if so then i agree

Suzune_Simp:unfortunately it's not for me
sabazurc
sabazurcLv4

So you really are one?

MilkGod_disciple:
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Freelancerok
FreelancerokLv4
vkg313
vkg313Lv6

I went out of my way to write a full review for this story, because I felt like it had a lot of potential, decent plot idea, and the author can improve significantly. Writing Quality is a bit disappointing. "Show, don't tell" is a cornerstone of writing. There are lots of explanations for everything with info dumps, instead of a slow but steady discovery. Various descriptions are awkward many times as well. In addition, there are a number of typos. I honestly just expect more from a premium novel. Author updates regularly, which is great. Story development feels pretty basic. Nothing groundbreaking or new. There's a system. Someone has transmigrated. Theres a tournament arc. Etc. It doesn't pull me in because I feel like I've seen it all before. For a world that is being invaded, it doesn't feel like it at all. Everyone seems too casual about it all. Normal people just living their lives casually when the world is falling apart around them. We had a global pandemic where people were dying from covid, and things changed everywhere. I can't imagine monsters invading, and people just acting like martial arts are just "sports" anymore. You give little to no impression about how society has changed from this. Character design is a little boring. I wish that there was a little more character development. Everyone other than the MC feels a bit two dimensional. Even the MC sometimes feels a bit boring. I don't know how you plan to bring character growth to the MC either since he was already an adult, and he is doing the same thing he was doing in his previous life. There needs to be personal growth for the characters, otherwise you result in a Xianxia novel where everyone is rigid and unreasonable. World background also got 3 stars because there is nothing new about a world being invaded by monsters.

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