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SundanceKid
SundanceKidLv142yr
2022-07-31 07:32

A great novel that was given up on too early. It seemed like the author listened to readers comments a bit too much and went back and rewrote chapters which changed future paths he had already visualized. While it's good to learn from mistakes and try to make fans happy, don't ever let them change your novel midway through. This will change the way the author writes the rest of the novel even if it's subconsciously, which in this case seemed to wilt his enthusiasm for this one, which ended up causing it to get dropped suddenly. Don't get me wrong, I enjoy White Online, but my personal opinion and a few of my buddies who've read both agree that Martial Arts Master was overall a better read and had even greater potential if it wasn't dropped. I hope that someday in the future the author either continues on, or rewrites the novel and does what he imagines without other's changing his views. Either way, I'm enjoying the reread I'm doing.

Martial Arts System

Alekzi
4.4
432 Chs

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Torbjorn_123
Torbjorn_123Lv15

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Alekzi
AlekziAuthor

Shameless review once again~ I am not english speaking native, so some grammar mistakes is to be expected, but i am sure you guys will be able to understand my writing. Also No harem! Yay anyway i hope you guys enjoy my book!

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RingoBrown
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Alekzi
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Author Update - I have looked at my previous chapters until 40, and I gotta admit that some parts were slightly amateurish and badly written, but chapters from 40 start getting better, I promise. I have written quite a lot of drafts, up to 70 chapter already and it keeps increasing and a lot of interesting things are happening in the life of Ichiro, even I, as a writer I am honestly surprised of the things I wrote and I think most of you will enjoy it, so please read at least up to 50, because a lot of interesting things start happening after it, and if you still don't like the novel, then you should prob it because this novel isn't probably for your taste then. Thanks for readind and I hope you will enjoy.

3yr
Freelancerok
FreelancerokLv4

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Suzynany
SuzynanyLv1

Small review right here, I think this book is amazing, yeah first 40 chaps shows Author's inexperience, but it obviously becomes better, and after 50 chaps it is amazing to read. Good job Author!

3yr
vkg313
vkg313Lv6

I went out of my way to write a full review for this story, because I felt like it had a lot of potential, decent plot idea, and the author can improve significantly. Writing Quality is a bit disappointing. "Show, don't tell" is a cornerstone of writing. There are lots of explanations for everything with info dumps, instead of a slow but steady discovery. Various descriptions are awkward many times as well. In addition, there are a number of typos. I honestly just expect more from a premium novel. Author updates regularly, which is great. Story development feels pretty basic. Nothing groundbreaking or new. There's a system. Someone has transmigrated. Theres a tournament arc. Etc. It doesn't pull me in because I feel like I've seen it all before. For a world that is being invaded, it doesn't feel like it at all. Everyone seems too casual about it all. Normal people just living their lives casually when the world is falling apart around them. We had a global pandemic where people were dying from covid, and things changed everywhere. I can't imagine monsters invading, and people just acting like martial arts are just "sports" anymore. You give little to no impression about how society has changed from this. Character design is a little boring. I wish that there was a little more character development. Everyone other than the MC feels a bit two dimensional. Even the MC sometimes feels a bit boring. I don't know how you plan to bring character growth to the MC either since he was already an adult, and he is doing the same thing he was doing in his previous life. There needs to be personal growth for the characters, otherwise you result in a Xianxia novel where everyone is rigid and unreasonable. World background also got 3 stars because there is nothing new about a world being invaded by monsters.

3yr
Paulo_D_Manoel
Paulo_D_ManoelLv13

man,this story is kinda stupid,the people in this are not believable, I got a couple of laughs here and there,but the world building doesn't make sense.

3yr
NICE_MAN
NICE_MANLv13

Literally mind numbingly awful. This novel is made for 12 yearold non native English speakers. The author obviously does not get out of the house much because it because 100% clear by chapter 35 they have no experience with normal human interactions. The MC meets with the first real female character and immediately just shouts at her “shut up thot.” If you like incel prepubescent outdated humor with absolutely horrible writing quality and beyond generic plot, this is the novel for you!

2yr
DZsTheOnlyWay
DZsTheOnlyWayLv13

i was rlly loving it, and just when i was about to purchase the privileges, i opened the chapter 174.. and droped... that was the worst decision i ever saw of an author.. im rlly rlly sad about it and if i could i wold just complain in everysingle fckng chapter trying to change your mind, but i wont use my fastpasses and coins in smthing so stupid. 5 stars until chapter 174, 0 stars after it, i will just give a 2,5

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