This story had a great idea. But its life in my library was tragically cut short by poor execution, slow pace, and a lack of a relatable MC. It's hard to sympathize with an MC who has a mental breakdown over a POS taking his own life after he was caught ordering the death of many innocent people and ruining many students lives. Also, way too many chapters of his BS mental dilemma he was having with taking POS unfit to be called human garbage lives. I don't mind there being a chapter like this but this stuff was dragged on for way too long that it made me hate the MC even more. Now, I tend to put myself in the MCs place when I read a story, and a lot of his decisions to me just felt like were made by the author in order to slow the pace of the story down. He worries about Big bad guys coming to get him yet he does nothing to become stronger till later on when he's in danger and he wishes he was. So you know the whole wait till bad stuff happens to realize my mistakes to then decide to become stronger. Just another classic overused way to push a story that has an OP ability or character in a story forward. And those to me are the worst type of stories. The ones where it feels like they weaken the MC's brain compacity in order to think clearly so they can push some BS character development down the line. With the whole cliche "I do need to get stronger or I will die like I almost did today". We as readers are on the internet all the time. We know how the world works. Yet somehow he docent want to get stronger quickly for some reason. Even though he mentions a lot of bad people doing bad things or scenarios of bad people wanting the technology that he may bring to the world. So it becomes frustrating that the author makes the MC realize all of this yet he docent make him seek a way to truly make himself stronger in order to prevent any of those bad things from happening. As I said, he literally waits till he's in danger to realize that, It's so dumb. The only thing he does to help him early on is to get a pokemon to protect him. That he docent want anyone in the world to see. I say this because if he was in danger in the open. Surrounded by many eyes he would most likely hesitate to let his pokemon save his life. So he pretty much becomes useless in those scenarios. Oh, and he also got a charm that would stop some bullets. But it seemed like he forgot about that when people were pointing guns at him. Now, I did like some of the story. Loved the AI, loved the pokemon. Also enjoyed the choice of your first Android. But the second one was awful. She was so annoying and it became even more frustrating to read. She reminded me of those annoying system novels where the system never stops sh*ting on the MC and calling him dumb and weak. I hate those stories so much. So in conclusion like I said, this story had a great idea. But its life in my library was tragically cut short by poor execution, slow pace, and a lack of a relatable MC. You may like it but after 42 chapters I did not.
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Too early judgement but ok
how is it to early?? man read 40+chapters thats enaugh for people to know if its good or bad.
Did you have problem with the first 40 chapters?
I will try to address his review 1. Mental dilemma was only 1 or 2 chapters. He gets over it pretty fast so I don't why he/she complained. 2. He has powers to summon a dragon and even brainwash people, if that in itself isn't op I don't know what it is. Plus he is bulletproof and other such op powers. He doesn't need too much power to take down humans. That is waste of time. He needs influence and money power to take down humans 3. He has been dumb in only the first few chapters and then he tries to make correct. Mind you this is based on myself and on what I would do if I get the power. 4. The second ai is just a chatty ai and is territorial of him but that too will slowly change.
Nah not me. But was just saying
If there ever was a novel that could use a re-write, assuming the author reads comments and reviews, this is it. But seeing the author comment.... aint gonna happen.
i dont think so. I was loving it until everything this guy mentioned and the plot became stale because it was just MC getting rich and establishing an identity(which destroyed pacing and was boring) plus the second android was beyond awful.
Yeah, that android ruined the story so dam fast for me. As I said the story started off strong then it slowed down a bit but it picked itself back up. But as soon as that 2nd android came in to play the story for me hit a big brick wall. Unfortunately, I could not break through that wall to keep reading the story.
It's fine. Everybody has their own kinks. For others it's good, for some it's great. 2nd android was introduced to bring color to the story. 2b is emotionaless so I can't just introduce emotions to her.
if this is how you would react when you suddenly get power then your ducked. the mc clear could have thought twice in his every move like if wanted take some thing out in the pubg he could have taken the pan out first. what us with the car left in some place where someone could accidentally find it and drive it of and worst take it apart. and directly take dragon soul without precaution. in the end the author knew and wanted a dumber mc just for the sake of character development. learning the Chinese hey.
I've read this back then and MC was very stoopid, especially of how dealt with the Gun and Car so I left it in my library and I thought MC would improve in later chapters but I guess he didn't... And the final nail in coffin is the "Annoying System-like Android". thank you for your review it's extremely helpful 🛐
