I usually don't make review.. But this fanfict actually made me pulling my hair so hard. So I'll try to make my review as fair as possible without spoiling the stories.. The Good * The writing actually really good. Languange wise and how Author bring the story to the table. * The premise actually have potential. Dig deep and make it realistic as possible. You can do it Author! * The interaction between character and how Author describe thing felt so natural. Believe me, I write a lot as it is my job. It's hard to write as good as how Author write. The Bad * The premise itself is double-eged sword. It have potential, but can go wrong easily if Author don't know what is the goal. And that actually happened to this story. * The character dan interaction between them itself was really fun to read. But not their decision. Try to read it by yourself. If you don't like, then you won't. If you like, then it gonna be a decent reading material to past time. The Ugly * The story development is.... how to put it nicely... dumb. MC shouldn't be this irrational and clueless on every choices he made with his background. Seriously? I won't nitpick. But, really Author? He is adult for Godsake! Not a 5th grader. If you said he is gonna be realistic, stick with it. (Sorry for my rambling) I know Author write some fanfict in this platform. So maybe if you as reader wanna try this fict, give it a try... If you feel this stories not your cup of tea, try other fict made by Author. Godspeed for Author! Wish you all the best. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]
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LIKEYou have described the same problem I have with this fanfic. His bad or/and absurd decisions by the protagonist. Literally, if the story was about a fan guy conjuring up video game stuff for fun that would be fine. I mean, I would. h The problem arises when he becomes vigilante just because. And then the author puts in mysterious elements that are bland just for the protagonist to look for. Things like... finding out if the supernatural is real in short, or some mysterious things from the government. Literally the story would have been better in some anime world or something. Some story with a supernatural world. I'm going on too long, so I'm going to finish. It is stupid to become famous or an entrepreneur from nothing when you want to sell something very new. And when you can get furniture, food and money out of nothing, the rest loses meaning. Yes, help the world. I might as well summon some cybor scientist or something to keep company with him and throw away knowledge from him. The stories of a protagonist who tries things and tries not to be discovered by others is not the most innovative, but it is more or less funny and I guess realistic. As well as helping people in the shadows. Well, that's my opinion. Extending my point further -as much as I want- would be unnecessary. Thank you for reading this far.